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the name says it all
Join Date: May 2005
Location: over there
Posts: 294
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Thing that shouldn't be
This is part of a short story i'm working on.
It's about some passengers on a ship that are attacked by a monster. Thanks for stopping by and taking a look
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comics writer/producer
Join Date: Mar 2006
Location: Southside of Chicago
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that monster has some wild pubes.
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Registered User
Join Date: Aug 2006
Location: Batam, Indonesia
Posts: 70
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Yeahh, they need to shave their private man
But otherwise I found this funny. No pun intended
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Rhadamanthine
Join Date: Mar 2004
Location: Californ-eye-A
Posts: 747
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I like the combination of Gore with the Cartoonish style. If i can offer one suggestion i'd maybe change the last panel of the second page. The panel with the girl pointing to her rear-end. i thought if i were doing it, and could draw well, i'd bring the POV angle down from just below her buttocks so that we get a look at her face looking down at her rear. Maybe with a big question mark drawn near her. Anyway, it's just a suggestion i probably don't know what i'm talking about or just can't explain it well.
Last edited by Alexithymia; 08-23-2006 at 12:44 PM. |
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the name says it all
Join Date: May 2005
Location: over there
Posts: 294
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haha thanks, guys.
the story is supposed to be funny. i always meant for it to be like those cheesy sci-fi channel movies. Alexithymia- i get what you mean. if i get the chance i'll rework it. thanks! |
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