Thing that shouldn't be

Baron Spider · 08-22-2006, 11:23 PM

This is part of a short story i'm working on.
It's about some passengers on a ship that are attacked by a monster.
Thanks for stopping by and taking a look

Len Kody · 08-23-2006, 03:11 AM

that monster has some wild pubes.

swift06 · 08-23-2006, 08:02 AM

Yeahh, they need to shave their private man

But otherwise I found this funny.

No pun intended

Alexithymia · 08-23-2006, 12:42 PM

I like the combination of Gore with the Cartoonish style. If i can offer one suggestion i'd maybe change the last panel of the second page. The panel with the girl pointing to her rear-end. i thought if i were doing it, and could draw well, i'd bring the POV angle down from just below her buttocks so that we get a look at her face looking down at her rear. Maybe with a big question mark drawn near her. Anyway, it's just a suggestion i probably don't know what i'm talking about or just can't explain it well.

Baron Spider · 08-23-2006, 02:08 PM

haha thanks, guys.
the story is supposed to be funny.
i always meant for it to be like those cheesy sci-fi channel movies.

Alexithymia- i get what you mean. if i get the chance i'll rework it.

thanks!

08-22-2006, 11:23 PM	#1
Baron Spider the name says it all Join Date: May 2005 Location: over there Posts: 294	Thing that shouldn't be This is part of a short story i'm working on. It's about some passengers on a ship that are attacked by a monster. Thanks for stopping by and taking a look

08-23-2006, 12:42 PM	#4
Alexithymia Rhadamanthine Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Californ-eye-A Posts: 747	I like the combination of Gore with the Cartoonish style. If i can offer one suggestion i'd maybe change the last panel of the second page. The panel with the girl pointing to her rear-end. i thought if i were doing it, and could draw well, i'd bring the POV angle down from just below her buttocks so that we get a look at her face looking down at her rear. Maybe with a big question mark drawn near her. Anyway, it's just a suggestion i probably don't know what i'm talking about or just can't explain it well. Last edited by Alexithymia; 08-23-2006 at 12:44 PM.

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08-23-2006, 03:11 AM	#2
Len Kody comics writer/producer Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Southside of Chicago Posts: 102	that monster has some wild pubes.

08-23-2006, 08:02 AM	#3
swift06 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Batam, Indonesia Posts: 70	Yeahh, they need to shave their private man But otherwise I found this funny. No pun intended

08-23-2006, 02:08 PM	#5
Baron Spider the name says it all Join Date: May 2005 Location: over there Posts: 294	haha thanks, guys. the story is supposed to be funny. i always meant for it to be like those cheesy sci-fi channel movies. Alexithymia- i get what you mean. if i get the chance i'll rework it. thanks!