critiques appreciated

teamlattie · 05-25-2006, 01:16 PM

im doin construction and need a job drawin
http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...ie/pageone.jpg

http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg2b.jpg

http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg3b.jpg

http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg4b.jpg

http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg5B.jpg

VANDAL · 05-25-2006, 01:22 PM

GAWD this is some nice work!

sacredsincomics · 05-25-2006, 01:37 PM

Beautiful work. Such a lovely style.

Good luck man.

**Ron Phillips** · 05-25-2006, 02:10 PM

I'd have to say you've got a wonderful style to tell adventurous children tales.

Not much to comment on with this actual art. I did look at your website, and some of the magic of this style gets lost in your finishes/inkes. I think your work would look wonderful if rendered either by paint or a talented colorist.

Matango · 05-25-2006, 02:13 PM

Yes man great! Be carreful when you finish these.
One thing thats wrong here is the forum. hhehe this should be on "sequentials"

Dannthr · 05-25-2006, 02:24 PM

Lovely,

Looks like Construction has been doing you some good, no reason to leave that wonderful work now.

- Dan

Steve Robinson · 05-25-2006, 02:56 PM

WRONG FORUM this belongs in sequential forum moving it

joshm · 05-25-2006, 02:59 PM

At first glance I noticed the first panel should show a background going far off into the horizon line, however, I don't see anything. You either didn't finish this or you're planning to leave it out. I would put it in, because right now it looks like it is a warms eye view, but it is a bird’s eye view, which is why you need to include that background.

Everything else from there looks great. Until I got to the last page and the characters seemed to grow up or something. I'm not sure if this is apart of the story, but the characters don't look the same in the last page as they do in the other pages. Otherwise, I like everything.

I would have this type of style colored, rather than inked. You seem to use some shading that doesn’t work well with ink.

Josh

Phatman · 05-25-2006, 03:17 PM

Solid storytelling and consistant quality throughout. Good luck getting work.

teamlattie · 05-26-2006, 08:23 AM

thanks everyone i really appreciate the comments

Ogre187 · 05-27-2006, 11:41 PM

You're stuff still looks great Tim. Awesome, awesome stuff.

05-25-2006, 01:16 PM	#1
teamlattie Registered User Join Date: May 2006 Location: New Orleans Posts: 23	critiques appreciated im doin construction and need a job drawin http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...ie/pageone.jpg http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg2b.jpg http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg3b.jpg http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg4b.jpg http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i1...attie/pg5B.jpg Last edited by teamlattie; 05-25-2006 at 01:20 PM.

05-25-2006, 02:10 PM	#4
Ron Phillips Are you terminal? Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Some where under a deep blue sky. Posts: 4,105	I'd have to say you've got a wonderful style to tell adventurous children tales. Not much to comment on with this actual art. I did look at your website, and some of the magic of this style gets lost in your finishes/inkes. I think your work would look wonderful if rendered either by paint or a talented colorist. __________________ Ron Earl Phillips Buy Ron's Books - on Amazon Kindle Flash Fiction Friday - A community writing project Shotgun Honey - a blast of fiction to blow your mind Home \| Twitter \| Facebook \|MySpace

05-27-2006, 11:41 PM	#11
Ogre187 Bacon Master Extrordinare Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Mobile,AL Posts: 126	Still the master... You're stuff still looks great Tim. Awesome, awesome stuff.

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05-25-2006, 01:22 PM	#2
VANDAL VANDAL Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Austin, Texas Posts: 1,189	GAWD this is some nice work!

05-25-2006, 01:37 PM	#3
sacredsincomics Partner in Crime Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: UK, Manchester Posts: 469	Beautiful work. Such a lovely style. Good luck man.

05-25-2006, 02:13 PM	#5
Matango Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Brasil Posts: 188	Yes man great! Be carreful when you finish these. One thing thats wrong here is the forum. hhehe this should be on "sequentials"

05-25-2006, 02:24 PM	#6
Dannthr Freelance Composer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Los Angelos, California Posts: 247	Lovely, Looks like Construction has been doing you some good, no reason to leave that wonderful work now. - Dan

05-25-2006, 02:56 PM	#7
Steve Robinson Supreme Destroyer Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Born in Venezuela live in Long Beach California Posts: 2,735	WRONG FORUM this belongs in sequential forum moving it

05-25-2006, 02:59 PM	#8
joshm Comic Book creator Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Colorado Springs, CO Posts: 548	At first glance I noticed the first panel should show a background going far off into the horizon line, however, I don't see anything. You either didn't finish this or you're planning to leave it out. I would put it in, because right now it looks like it is a warms eye view, but it is a bird’s eye view, which is why you need to include that background. Everything else from there looks great. Until I got to the last page and the characters seemed to grow up or something. I'm not sure if this is apart of the story, but the characters don't look the same in the last page as they do in the other pages. Otherwise, I like everything. I would have this type of style colored, rather than inked. You seem to use some shading that doesn’t work well with ink. Josh

05-25-2006, 03:17 PM	#9
Phatman Midi-chlorians are a lie! Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Folsom, CA Posts: 4,443	Solid storytelling and consistant quality throughout. Good luck getting work.

05-26-2006, 08:23 AM	#10
teamlattie Registered User Join Date: May 2006 Location: New Orleans Posts: 23	thanks everyone i really appreciate the comments