Superman

rodrigo · 07-20-2012, 05:55 PM

Hello,

Few pages of Superman samples,
Please let me know what you think

Cheers,

mikeorion22 · 07-20-2012, 09:32 PM

these look great is it all photoshop?

crizam · 07-20-2012, 10:57 PM

I saw this before...

crizam · 07-20-2012, 11:21 PM

Got it, Will Conrad's samples (2003):
http://www.comicartfans.com/GalleryP...580&GSub=23465
http://www.comicartfans.com/GalleryP...578&GSub=23465
http://www.comicartfans.com/galleryp...619&gsub=14137
they are still on the same script for samples, thought.

rodrigo · 07-21-2012, 02:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by mikeorion22

these look great is it all photoshop?

Thanks Mike. Yes it´s all done in Photoshop.

The script for these samples can be found here:
http://glasshousegraphics.com/newsite/?page_id=288

So, yes Crizam, I believe it has been done before by lots of other artists.
Anyway, Thanks for stopping by...

OZ! · 07-21-2012, 04:18 AM

You are getting to a really good stage in your sequentials so it time to get rough and push you to that next level. I can do a draw over if you would like to explain these critiques. I'll start tonight with page 1.

panel 1:
Composition: Jimmy is the main focus. Its his party. Why is everyone faced away from him and why is he in the BG? Also, the gift plays a big role in this scene, he should be focusing on it as he picks it up or completely ignoring it, but looking blankly forward doesn't relay anything. This panel takes up too much room for what it does as well. You have a big reveal and action coming, don't choke it with small panels.

Weight: Be aware that everything has a weight to it and you have to relay that in the drawing. Perry has a piece of cake that seems to be floating. There isn't anything with his hand telling me that the plate is supported. His coffee cup is titled when it shouldn't be. Nobody swings a hot coffee mug without adjusting the angle as the hand raises. The mug should remain level. The speed at which he raises it will cause the overflow.

Balance and Proportions: Perry seems to be tripping over his own feet. He also has a small head. Clarks legs are too small and his torso is too long as well as the fact that since he is too upright to give us the feeling that he is truly leaning on anything. Play with those angles.

The balloons: This may seem insignificant but balloons are not all going to float up at the same angle with the same string flow. Its visually disconcerting to see.

Panel 2:
The girl's neck feeds directly into her chin. This shouldn't be happening. On a secondary note though, this panel shouldn't be happening. The first panel should have established their banter and the present.

Panel 3:
When you kiss, your lips jut outward in a pucker. Her facial exaggeration isn't convincing. Also, be aware of small heads. You established her size as being the same as his in panel one. Her head got a lot smaller in those two frames.

Panel 4:
The only people that seem to be reacting the way they should are Jimmy and the Girl. Also, Clark has super speed. If he notices alien objects he will react faster than anyone else. Regardless of the writing, you have to explain why he didn't. Maybe he didn't notice at all. Maybe he dropped his cake. You have to become a visual storyteller and draw a scene, not simply a pretty picture.

Panel 5: The super speed thing comes in to play again here. And how did Jimmy get turned around? And why is Lois so far in the BG all of a sudden?

That's all I have time for tonight. You do some brilliant stuff(technically clean, nice lines, good BGs), but it looks like the most important thing you need to work on is loosening up(learn to push faces and features, poses and reactions) and working on your storytelling.

rodrigo · 07-23-2012, 01:09 PM

Hello OZ,

Thanks very much for the time and effort on your critics. I don´t know if you´re awere but your critics helped me a LOT and oppened my eyes for details I know good professionals don´t miss.
Thank you very very much for pointing these out, it´s very much appreciated.

OZ! · 07-23-2012, 10:21 PM

I'm glad to hear that man. I really think you can do big things which is the only reason I take the time to crit your work. Most peoples' work I simply ignore or smile at because they are just going through the motions. You seem to want to do something with it and that thrills me.

Comics Commando · 08-04-2012, 02:43 AM

Very nice work, man!!

Kurt Hathaway
Cartoon Balloons Studio
khathawayart@gmail.com

rodrigo · 08-05-2012, 10:20 AM

Thanks very much guys.

07-20-2012, 05:55 PM	#1
rodrigo Registered User Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Brazil Posts: 274	Superman Hello, Few pages of Superman samples, Please let me know what you think Cheers,

07-20-2012, 10:57 PM	#3
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07-20-2012, 09:32 PM	#2
mikeorion22 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2012 Location: rochester, ny Posts: 176	these look great is it all photoshop?

07-20-2012, 11:21 PM	#4
crizam www.crizam.com Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Uruguay Posts: 69	Got it, Will Conrad's samples (2003): http://www.comicartfans.com/GalleryP...580&GSub=23465 http://www.comicartfans.com/GalleryP...578&GSub=23465 http://www.comicartfans.com/galleryp...619&gsub=14137 they are still on the same script for samples, thought.

07-21-2012, 04:18 AM	#6
OZ! All Powerful Wizard Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Texas Posts: 4,501	You are getting to a really good stage in your sequentials so it time to get rough and push you to that next level. I can do a draw over if you would like to explain these critiques. I'll start tonight with page 1. panel 1: Composition: Jimmy is the main focus. Its his party. Why is everyone faced away from him and why is he in the BG? Also, the gift plays a big role in this scene, he should be focusing on it as he picks it up or completely ignoring it, but looking blankly forward doesn't relay anything. This panel takes up too much room for what it does as well. You have a big reveal and action coming, don't choke it with small panels. Weight: Be aware that everything has a weight to it and you have to relay that in the drawing. Perry has a piece of cake that seems to be floating. There isn't anything with his hand telling me that the plate is supported. His coffee cup is titled when it shouldn't be. Nobody swings a hot coffee mug without adjusting the angle as the hand raises. The mug should remain level. The speed at which he raises it will cause the overflow. Balance and Proportions: Perry seems to be tripping over his own feet. He also has a small head. Clarks legs are too small and his torso is too long as well as the fact that since he is too upright to give us the feeling that he is truly leaning on anything. Play with those angles. The balloons: This may seem insignificant but balloons are not all going to float up at the same angle with the same string flow. Its visually disconcerting to see. Panel 2: The girl's neck feeds directly into her chin. This shouldn't be happening. On a secondary note though, this panel shouldn't be happening. The first panel should have established their banter and the present. Panel 3: When you kiss, your lips jut outward in a pucker. Her facial exaggeration isn't convincing. Also, be aware of small heads. You established her size as being the same as his in panel one. Her head got a lot smaller in those two frames. Panel 4: The only people that seem to be reacting the way they should are Jimmy and the Girl. Also, Clark has super speed. If he notices alien objects he will react faster than anyone else. Regardless of the writing, you have to explain why he didn't. Maybe he didn't notice at all. Maybe he dropped his cake. You have to become a visual storyteller and draw a scene, not simply a pretty picture. Panel 5: The super speed thing comes in to play again here. And how did Jimmy get turned around? And why is Lois so far in the BG all of a sudden? That's all I have time for tonight. You do some brilliant stuff(technically clean, nice lines, good BGs), but it looks like the most important thing you need to work on is loosening up(learn to push faces and features, poses and reactions) and working on your storytelling.

07-23-2012, 01:09 PM	#7
rodrigo Registered User Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Brazil Posts: 274	Hello OZ, Thanks very much for the time and effort on your critics. I don´t know if you´re awere but your critics helped me a LOT and oppened my eyes for details I know good professionals don´t miss. Thank you very very much for pointing these out, it´s very much appreciated.

07-23-2012, 10:21 PM	#8
OZ! All Powerful Wizard Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Texas Posts: 4,501	I'm glad to hear that man. I really think you can do big things which is the only reason I take the time to crit your work. Most peoples' work I simply ignore or smile at because they are just going through the motions. You seem to want to do something with it and that thrills me.

08-04-2012, 02:43 AM	#9
Comics Commando Registered User Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 590	Very nice work, man!! Kurt Hathaway Cartoon Balloons Studio khathawayart@gmail.com

08-05-2012, 10:20 AM	#10
rodrigo Registered User Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Brazil Posts: 274	Thanks very much guys.