Pencils Page three, Demon with Heavy Blacks

robozo · 07-17-2012, 05:47 AM

dear fellows

heres page three, please let me know what you think:

Richf · 07-17-2012, 07:55 PM

I would try and focus on one aspect of comic book art because neither one is helping the other.

There's issues in the anatomy. When in doubt leave it out. The way your muscle connects in the inks flattens both leg areas and the Demon's right arm.

Perspective issues in panel 3. There doesn't seem to be any kind of vanishing point. It seems to be built on a x grid.

creativesynergy · 07-17-2012, 11:27 PM

I think for me, the biggest issue is the humanization of The Demon by giving him irises and pupils instead of leaving his eyes blank and white.

robozo · 07-18-2012, 04:12 AM

mmh, i agree, i guess i messed it up, sometimes i work fast and a bit careless..

thanks guys

hellospaceboy · 07-26-2012, 12:34 PM

I like the detailed backgrounds, and I can see how you could make it even stronger with inking. However, the panel layout of the page is a bit odd. Try to give the panels a bit more frame / breathing room.

07-17-2012, 05:47 AM	#1
robozo Registered User Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 177	Pencils Page three, Demon with Heavy Blacks dear fellows heres page three, please let me know what you think:

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07-17-2012, 07:55 PM	#2
Richf Registered User Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Atlanta Posts: 28	I would try and focus on one aspect of comic book art because neither one is helping the other. There's issues in the anatomy. When in doubt leave it out. The way your muscle connects in the inks flattens both leg areas and the Demon's right arm. Perspective issues in panel 3. There doesn't seem to be any kind of vanishing point. It seems to be built on a x grid.

07-17-2012, 11:27 PM	#3
creativesynergy Steve Colle, Editor Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Calgary, Alberta, Canada Posts: 1,302	I think for me, the biggest issue is the humanization of The Demon by giving him irises and pupils instead of leaving his eyes blank and white.

07-18-2012, 04:12 AM	#4
robozo Registered User Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 177	mmh, i agree, i guess i messed it up, sometimes i work fast and a bit careless.. thanks guys

07-26-2012, 12:34 PM	#5
hellospaceboy Registered User Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 10	I like the detailed backgrounds, and I can see how you could make it even stronger with inking. However, the panel layout of the page is a bit odd. Try to give the panels a bit more frame / breathing room.