Pain #1

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Here's the latest from us at optimixcomics.com

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[Rex]

Aaaahaha! Those endings. Where to begin...
This writing is good. It's funny to see well-revealed characters next to amateur art and processing. It might be kind of cheap to reveal all characters through pure aggression, but whatever. At least we know who's who already.
If you don't give me someone to root for in the next few pages, though, I might lose interest.
In the art, you guys are making interesting choices. You're picking the difficult angles and details, and trying to make them work. That will start to work better for you when your artwork improves. I'd say go whip out some life drawings when you're not doing this and watch your work get better.
I like the last page. It's good to be able to tell a story in a short space.
I hate looking at the back of that girl's head for two pages. I can't tell if you did it on purpose or not. Why can't we see her face?

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ya know....that's a good question....I never noticed that. I cant say its a bad thing since the splash page is her in all her glory.
The characters are rooted in aggression, its an aggression filled book...I tried to balance it with humor, but its most certainly a darker side book.
Thanks for the thoughts! Very much appreciated

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[thejaz180]

You know, I finally got the chance to read some of this, very interesting stuff; I like the creativity you got going here.

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thank you

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