my comic - now available

Ebony Warrior · 10-29-2009, 07:06 PM

This is my digital comic (printed editions available to order). It is written by Keith Dallas and coloured by John Hunt and Wilson Ramos. Obviouly it is too late to change it, but comments are always welcome.

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Argonauts at http://www.tjcomics.com/wordpress/

Ebony Warrior · 10-29-2009, 07:09 PM

next pages.

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that's it. Thanks for looking.

Saul Haber · 11-03-2009, 09:37 PM

Very nice-looking pages. Everything looks very professional.
One geeky nitpick: That bridge would not stand the way you've drawn the cables. There should be vertical suspenders connecting the roadway to the cables. Or if you want to have the cables emanating fron a single point, they need to be coming from the top of the towers, down to the roadway (meaning, turn what you have upside down). The brooklyn bridge (-BROOKLYN!-) is a good example to look at - it actually uses both systems.

Ebony Warrior · 11-04-2009, 03:25 PM

Thanks for the crit.
As I progress on these books I will keep the bridge comment in mind as I am always looking for ways to improve (especially when it come the buildings and city scapes). I've bought a huge book on New York that I use for reference now.

We are now working on issue 3 and I think there is a big difference in my art and style as I have gotten back into the swing of sequentials.

gadgetwk · 11-06-2009, 01:48 PM

very nice. the only thing i can say really is that in panel 3 it doesnt really look like the kid is looking at the window. he looks like hes looking straight ahead down the street. but i still understood what was supposed to be going on which is always a good thing.

10-29-2009, 07:06 PM	#1
Ebony Warrior Registered User Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 100	my comic - now available This is my digital comic (printed editions available to order). It is written by Keith Dallas and coloured by John Hunt and Wilson Ramos. Obviouly it is too late to change it, but comments are always welcome. [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG] Argonauts at http://www.tjcomics.com/wordpress/

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Ebony Warrior Registered User Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 100	next pages. [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG] that's it. Thanks for looking.

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11-03-2009, 09:37 PM	#3
Saul Haber Registered User Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,581	Very nice-looking pages. Everything looks very professional. One geeky nitpick: That bridge would not stand the way you've drawn the cables. There should be vertical suspenders connecting the roadway to the cables. Or if you want to have the cables emanating fron a single point, they need to be coming from the top of the towers, down to the roadway (meaning, turn what you have upside down). The brooklyn bridge (-BROOKLYN!-) is a good example to look at - it actually uses both systems.

11-04-2009, 03:25 PM	#4
Ebony Warrior Registered User Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 100	Thanks for the crit. As I progress on these books I will keep the bridge comment in mind as I am always looking for ways to improve (especially when it come the buildings and city scapes). I've bought a huge book on New York that I use for reference now. We are now working on issue 3 and I think there is a big difference in my art and style as I have gotten back into the swing of sequentials.

11-06-2009, 01:48 PM	#5
gadgetwk Registered User Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 66	very nice. the only thing i can say really is that in panel 3 it doesnt really look like the kid is looking at the window. he looks like hes looking straight ahead down the street. but i still understood what was supposed to be going on which is always a good thing.