Green Lantern & Batman Comic

Antoine X · 09-11-2009, 09:15 PM

I apologize for the poor scan job on these pages. I drew them with a very light pencil, 5h I think and it was hard to get clear images due to my light line work. I played around with them in photoshop and did the best I could with them but the bottom line is that I need to switch to a darker pencil for my next set of pages and will definitely do so. I'd like to have some feedback so I can do a better job on my next pages so comments are welcome and appreciated. My site Antoine-X.Deviantart.com/

hellblazer72 · 09-12-2009, 12:25 AM

you might want to go with an hb lead next time. as far as the pages, the only thing i get from the story is a very asian john stewart is pissed at batman for something and they make up. it's alittle hard critiquing these because theres so little to go off of. there's no real backgrounds, the characters don't look like they are interacting with eachother and the pages look like they are composed of all cool shots. you should really find a script and draw some pages from it then post those pages.

Antoine X · 09-15-2009, 01:54 AM

I see, thanks for your help. It's funny you mention that they were nothing but "cool shots"

I take that as a complement lol

. Next time I will work with a real story of some sorts probably with action and movement. This comic was just freestyled, I kinda was making stuff up as I went along lol. I know I should'nt have done it that way and I guess I cheated the process in a way but I have to admit it was fun even though the pages are lacking some elements

. Thanks for your input

.

UniverseX259 · 09-15-2009, 08:46 AM

I think one of the main issues here is that it isn't established that Batman and GL are in the same place until page 2. I'd really like to see some kind of indication in page 1, panel 1 that they are, in fact, on the same rooftop. This would make the close up shots easier to understand.

Antoine X · 09-18-2009, 11:40 AM

Ok, I see what you mean, I'll have to keep it in mind for my next set of pages, thanks

09-11-2009, 09:15 PM	#1
Antoine X The Dark One Join Date: May 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 82	Green Lantern & Batman Comic I apologize for the poor scan job on these pages. I drew them with a very light pencil, 5h I think and it was hard to get clear images due to my light line work. I played around with them in photoshop and did the best I could with them but the bottom line is that I need to switch to a darker pencil for my next set of pages and will definitely do so. I'd like to have some feedback so I can do a better job on my next pages so comments are welcome and appreciated. My site Antoine-X.Deviantart.com/

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09-12-2009, 12:25 AM	#2
hellblazer72 the love ninja Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 874	you might want to go with an hb lead next time. as far as the pages, the only thing i get from the story is a very asian john stewart is pissed at batman for something and they make up. it's alittle hard critiquing these because theres so little to go off of. there's no real backgrounds, the characters don't look like they are interacting with eachother and the pages look like they are composed of all cool shots. you should really find a script and draw some pages from it then post those pages.

09-15-2009, 01:54 AM	#3
Antoine X The Dark One Join Date: May 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 82	I see, thanks for your help. It's funny you mention that they were nothing but "cool shots" I take that as a complement lol . Next time I will work with a real story of some sorts probably with action and movement. This comic was just freestyled, I kinda was making stuff up as I went along lol. I know I should'nt have done it that way and I guess I cheated the process in a way but I have to admit it was fun even though the pages are lacking some elements . Thanks for your input .

09-15-2009, 08:46 AM	#4
UniverseX259 AKA Ian Miller Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: New York Posts: 383	I think one of the main issues here is that it isn't established that Batman and GL are in the same place until page 2. I'd really like to see some kind of indication in page 1, panel 1 that they are, in fact, on the same rooftop. This would make the close up shots easier to understand.

09-18-2009, 11:40 AM	#5
Antoine X The Dark One Join Date: May 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 82	Ok, I see what you mean, I'll have to keep it in mind for my next set of pages, thanks