Ghosts

Jeremy Colwell · 11-04-2008, 05:42 PM

I entered this for the Ten Ton sketch challenge this week, but then I felt like adding some digital greyscale paint to it so I did the second one over it.

Yojimbo · 11-04-2008, 06:17 PM

This needs more rendering. I understand the look you're going for, but with your smoke you haven't gone all the way yet. Still looks like you blotched it in with a large point brush in photoshop. I think you're trying to get something similar to the concept art from MGS, but even as "messy" as the style is, there is still a crisp, finished feel that you're missing here.

Jeremy Colwell · 11-05-2008, 04:08 PM

Good points, Yojimbo. I've never heard of MGS, but glad it resonates somewhere close to something popular.

Jeremy Colwell · 11-05-2008, 05:14 PM

Revisited this today. Better?

Fernando Lucas · 11-05-2008, 06:48 PM

she seems bored

cool pic

Jeremy Colwell · 11-05-2008, 07:30 PM

I was going for contemplative/relaxed, but bored works, too.

Thanks for the comment.

TimR · 11-05-2008, 11:34 PM

I REALLY think the looser one works better.. When you get that tight, it puts more importance on the "correctness" of all the anatomy etc. When it's looser, it's easier to accept it as stylized, and it has a rough Seinkewicz sort of vibe.

One thing you might try is to get some texture in the clouds in sketch 2, to relate to the texture on her, and also to get away from how they look drawn by a bland computer paint-brush.

William Blankenship · 11-05-2008, 11:49 PM

I saw this over on tenton. That revised version is the badass.

3!LL

BobRivard · 11-06-2008, 01:45 AM

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Originally Posted by Jeremy Colwell

I think this one has a much better design than your revision. Having the white at the bottom with the logo is just much more striking and it doesn't distract from the figure. I also like the looseness on her in this one, even the loose background. Much better, in my opinion.

One suggestion, if you wanna tighten things up a bit, is to not clean up everything. Just hit the important areas, like her face, hand and gun, and maybe the roof just below her feet and some of the nearer buildings, but leave everything else loose.

11-04-2008, 05:42 PM	#1
Jeremy Colwell colwellillustration.com Join Date: May 2004 Location: Vancouver, WA Posts: 978	Ghosts I entered this for the Ten Ton sketch challenge this week, but then I felt like adding some digital greyscale paint to it so I did the second one over it.

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11-04-2008, 06:17 PM	#2
Yojimbo Registered User Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 134	This needs more rendering. I understand the look you're going for, but with your smoke you haven't gone all the way yet. Still looks like you blotched it in with a large point brush in photoshop. I think you're trying to get something similar to the concept art from MGS, but even as "messy" as the style is, there is still a crisp, finished feel that you're missing here.

11-05-2008, 04:08 PM	#3
Jeremy Colwell colwellillustration.com Join Date: May 2004 Location: Vancouver, WA Posts: 978	Good points, Yojimbo. I've never heard of MGS, but glad it resonates somewhere close to something popular.

11-05-2008, 05:14 PM	#4
Jeremy Colwell colwellillustration.com Join Date: May 2004 Location: Vancouver, WA Posts: 978	Revisited this today. Better?

11-05-2008, 06:48 PM	#5
Fernando Lucas I'm not your father... Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Maia, Portugal Posts: 476	she seems bored cool pic

11-05-2008, 07:30 PM	#6
Jeremy Colwell colwellillustration.com Join Date: May 2004 Location: Vancouver, WA Posts: 978	I was going for contemplative/relaxed, but bored works, too. Thanks for the comment.

11-05-2008, 11:34 PM	#7
TimR Registered User Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Birmingham, AL Posts: 710	I REALLY think the looser one works better.. When you get that tight, it puts more importance on the "correctness" of all the anatomy etc. When it's looser, it's easier to accept it as stylized, and it has a rough Seinkewicz sort of vibe. One thing you might try is to get some texture in the clouds in sketch 2, to relate to the texture on her, and also to get away from how they look drawn by a bland computer paint-brush.

11-05-2008, 11:49 PM	#8
William Blankenship Inconsequential Nobody Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Blankenship estate. Posts: 2,118	I saw this over on tenton. That revised version is the badass. 3!LL