sci-fi stuff

bluebeast1965 · 01-19-2008, 07:18 PM

this is my first post here. it's a few pages from a grpahic novel i'm working on. any crits and comments are wlcome. i know my inking isn't the best so anything ya'll can do to help would be great.

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jeffo46 · 01-19-2008, 08:17 PM

I would have liked to see how the pencils were,because as a inker,it looks like you're only using one line with no variation in your inking at all.As a result,it looks flat and unispiring.If you're not sure what line weights are look them up.If you can master those,they will add much more depth and fullness to your art.

Caio Reis · 01-20-2008, 10:10 AM

Science fiction usually is a tough genre to work with, because there's a lack of action and a lot of talking. It is a chalange to make pages interesting and exciting. I think you did well in some things here: I like the environment you created and the aliens are OK too.

But you could have used more dinamic panels and angle shots. All panels are viewed from the same perspective and you cropped the characters's head and feet in many of those. Basically you could have been a bit more inventive on your layouts, spend more time planning the general composition and such.

Again, not a bad work, but you could use some refinement on the storytelling. Hope it helped!

Rex · 01-21-2008, 04:53 PM

It reminds me of comics from the independent 80's black and white explosion, where a lot of stuff was a little amateur, but interesting anyway. I'd read this if the story was great. But as far as art, I agree with the other crits, and recommend a little photo reference to bring the bacgrounds to life.

bluebeast1965 · 01-21-2008, 06:46 PM

i really am greatfull for everyones rits and comments. they have all been helpfull. on the next few layouts i'm trying some more dynamic shots and using more detail in the backgrounds. as for the inking....... i think im gonna have to find an inker to help out on this.

01-19-2008, 07:18 PM	#1
bluebeast1965 Registered User Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: san antonio, texas Posts: 36	sci-fi stuff this is my first post here. it's a few pages from a grpahic novel i'm working on. any crits and comments are wlcome. i know my inking isn't the best so anything ya'll can do to help would be great. [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG]

01-21-2008, 06:46 PM	#5
bluebeast1965 Registered User Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: san antonio, texas Posts: 36	thanx i really am greatfull for everyones rits and comments. they have all been helpfull. on the next few layouts i'm trying some more dynamic shots and using more detail in the backgrounds. as for the inking....... i think im gonna have to find an inker to help out on this.

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01-19-2008, 08:17 PM	#2
jeffo46 jeffo46 Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Woonsocket,R.I. Posts: 1,466	I would have liked to see how the pencils were,because as a inker,it looks like you're only using one line with no variation in your inking at all.As a result,it looks flat and unispiring.If you're not sure what line weights are look them up.If you can master those,they will add much more depth and fullness to your art.

01-20-2008, 10:10 AM	#3
Caio Reis Registered User Join Date: May 2006 Location: Brazil Posts: 454	Science fiction usually is a tough genre to work with, because there's a lack of action and a lot of talking. It is a chalange to make pages interesting and exciting. I think you did well in some things here: I like the environment you created and the aliens are OK too. But you could have used more dinamic panels and angle shots. All panels are viewed from the same perspective and you cropped the characters's head and feet in many of those. Basically you could have been a bit more inventive on your layouts, spend more time planning the general composition and such. Again, not a bad work, but you could use some refinement on the storytelling. Hope it helped!

01-21-2008, 04:53 PM	#4
Rex The Antidrama Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Las Vegas, NV Posts: 173	It reminds me of comics from the independent 80's black and white explosion, where a lot of stuff was a little amateur, but interesting anyway. I'd read this if the story was great. But as far as art, I agree with the other crits, and recommend a little photo reference to bring the bacgrounds to life.