Supergirl

evilpunk · 06-17-2007, 04:41 AM

This is a short sequence from this heroine, ive already posted the layouts some time ago so heres the finals , hope you like and you know C&C welcome .

seth chi · 06-18-2007, 09:29 PM

I like how you pay attention to background details. A lot of pros lack on background details. But you did a great job. But the realism needs to be improved, especially the cars.

Keep it up.

J. Alexopoulos · 06-18-2007, 10:30 PM

Her face seems a bit cartoonish in Page 1 panel 3, but other than that it all looks great.

sevans · 06-18-2007, 11:34 PM

The close up on her face on the first page needs to be re-done.
It looks really out of place and is bringing the rest of the pages down.
Love the fact that you put effort into creating the surroundng environment.

nate-p · 06-19-2007, 04:00 AM

You might want to also make it easier to tell where one panel ends and another begins, especially with a blue pencil. I like to use double lines about 1/32" apart. The second page in particular is a little messy.

The backgrounds are great.

Also, the faces in general could use some tightening up. I really like the expressions you gave them, but they're a little off.

evilpunk · 06-19-2007, 11:47 AM

thats right -nate p- i forgot to put the frames in page 2, theres a few details i didnt finish, with your comments now i know where i have to work on, actually i tought the flow was going to be misunderstanding*, well if theres something more please make me know, thanks for the look.

06-17-2007, 04:41 AM	#1
evilpunk Registered User Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 149	Supergirl This is a short sequence from this heroine, ive already posted the layouts some time ago so heres the finals , hope you like and you know C&C welcome .

06-18-2007, 09:29 PM	#2
seth chi veryverylucky Join Date: May 2007 Location: Indonesia Posts: 93	Nice I like how you pay attention to background details. A lot of pros lack on background details. But you did a great job. But the realism needs to be improved, especially the cars. Keep it up.

06-19-2007, 04:00 AM	#5
nate-p Registered User Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 6	Panels You might want to also make it easier to tell where one panel ends and another begins, especially with a blue pencil. I like to use double lines about 1/32" apart. The second page in particular is a little messy. The backgrounds are great. Also, the faces in general could use some tightening up. I really like the expressions you gave them, but they're a little off.

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06-18-2007, 10:30 PM	#3
J. Alexopoulos AKA Beefpipe Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Whitby, Ontario Posts: 229	Her face seems a bit cartoonish in Page 1 panel 3, but other than that it all looks great.

06-18-2007, 11:34 PM	#4
sevans www.sevans.co.nz Join Date: May 2004 Location: behind you ...... MotherF**KER! Posts: 4,525	The close up on her face on the first page needs to be re-done. It looks really out of place and is bringing the rest of the pages down. Love the fact that you put effort into creating the surroundng environment.

06-19-2007, 11:47 AM	#6
evilpunk Registered User Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 149	thats right -nate p- i forgot to put the frames in page 2, theres a few details i didnt finish, with your comments now i know where i have to work on, actually i tought the flow was going to be misunderstanding*, well if theres something more please make me know, thanks for the look.