Spiderman samples page 2

darnelbond009 · 01-13-2012, 12:46 PM

Here is what i have for the second page of dwayne mcduffie's spiderman skating in thin ice script. Comments and crits welcome!

thejaz180 · 01-13-2012, 03:15 PM

I dig it a lot.

darnelbond009 · 01-13-2012, 09:18 PM

Thanks Jazz, I'm trying to work with the gesture of movement, and a lot with perspective, it's gonna take time, but you don't learn this stuff over night, it takes a lot of time.

thejaz180 · 01-13-2012, 09:38 PM

Ha! I’m trying to get my mojo back, and on top of that, I know, it’s a process and at the end of the day if you can wing it and make comics, that’s good, ‘cause right now I wanna get better while doing the two.

joshh · 06-22-2012, 11:02 AM

this good man. I like spidey's pose in the first panel.

Keep studying perspective it is probably the most valuable tool aside from anatomy when darwing comics.

your heading in the right direction man!

Bishop · 06-22-2012, 11:56 AM

I like what you've got here!

The first thing that jumped out at me was Spidey's left leg in panel 2. It seems distorted and too long.

Rex · 06-22-2012, 04:03 PM

Yup, this is great.
I don't like that gun in panel 3. Looks like it was drawn without reference.
Everything else, I like!

Scribbly · 06-23-2012, 01:29 AM

Very nice.
Just try no to cut Spiderman fingers, toes or elbows against the panel’s gutter.
What is that figure that is coming at the right in the last panel? It looks like an Alien.
Illegible.

jeffo46 · 06-23-2012, 02:48 PM

I like this. It has a Kirbyish Silver age feel to it. I would love to come out of retirement and ink your work.

ArminOzdic · 06-23-2012, 05:36 PM

Nice work!
The only think that I dont like is the way you crop spidermans part of arm,fingers and toes in first two panels.

01-13-2012, 12:46 PM	#1
darnelbond009 Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 278	Spiderman samples page 2 Here is what i have for the second page of dwayne mcduffie's spiderman skating in thin ice script. Comments and crits welcome!

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01-13-2012, 03:15 PM	#2
thejaz180 The artist from Brooklyn Join Date: Oct 2011 Location: Brooklyn, NY Posts: 2,509	I dig it a lot.

01-13-2012, 09:18 PM	#3
darnelbond009 Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 278	Thanks Jazz, I'm trying to work with the gesture of movement, and a lot with perspective, it's gonna take time, but you don't learn this stuff over night, it takes a lot of time.

01-13-2012, 09:38 PM	#4
thejaz180 The artist from Brooklyn Join Date: Oct 2011 Location: Brooklyn, NY Posts: 2,509	Ha! I’m trying to get my mojo back, and on top of that, I know, it’s a process and at the end of the day if you can wing it and make comics, that’s good, ‘cause right now I wanna get better while doing the two.

06-22-2012, 11:02 AM	#5
joshh Registered User Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Ticonderoga Ny Posts: 64	this good man. I like spidey's pose in the first panel. Keep studying perspective it is probably the most valuable tool aside from anatomy when darwing comics. your heading in the right direction man!

06-22-2012, 11:56 AM	#6
Bishop Keeper of random thoughts Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: In your head. Posts: 4,093	I like what you've got here! The first thing that jumped out at me was Spidey's left leg in panel 2. It seems distorted and too long.

06-22-2012, 04:03 PM	#7
Rex The Antidrama Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Las Vegas, NV Posts: 172	Yup, this is great. I don't like that gun in panel 3. Looks like it was drawn without reference. Everything else, I like!

06-23-2012, 01:29 AM	#8
Scribbly Easy Reader Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Amerika Posts: 3,732	Very nice. Just try no to cut Spiderman fingers, toes or elbows against the panel’s gutter. What is that figure that is coming at the right in the last panel? It looks like an Alien. Illegible.

06-23-2012, 02:48 PM	#9
jeffo46 jeffo46 Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Woonsocket,R.I. Posts: 1,463	I like this. It has a Kirbyish Silver age feel to it. I would love to come out of retirement and ink your work.

06-23-2012, 05:36 PM	#10
ArminOzdic Registered User Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: Sarajevo,BiH Posts: 79	Nice work! The only think that I dont like is the way you crop spidermans part of arm,fingers and toes in first two panels.