Go Back   Digital Webbing Forums > Talent Engine > Sequential Art Showcase

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 11-28-2017, 02:52 PM   #1
Arak-8
Registered User
 
Join Date: Nov 2017
Posts: 50
Arak-8 is on a distinguished road

My Deviantart fan comics...

Well,i've been meaning to do this since I got here,but I need to further display my art to other fellow artists,and i'm not getting much feedback from them on at DA,so here it is.

https://arak-8.deviantart.com/galler...629/Fan-comics

This is just the fan comics section of my Deviantart gallery. The rest of the gallery is made up of mostly pin ups and sections,but..I always had got into the habit of doing pin ups and sketches instead of actual comic pages and sequential art.

I am however,trying to make up for this fault and am currently doing a new short comic starring Akuma from Capcom's Street Fighter series.

Anyways,feel free to look and give critics and feedback on my comic art,but please..be honest,helpful and nothing negative and/or critical,just helpful feedback and any tips on how to improve my art will be appreciated.

I know it's gonna look a little shabby,but hey i'm still learning,and aren't we all right?

Anyways,the link is back at the top,enjoy.
Arak-8 is online now   Reply With Quote
Connect With Facebook to "Like" This Thread

Old 12-04-2017, 07:00 PM   #2
Gav Heryng
Formally Known As Dismas
 
Gav Heryng's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2002
Location: Madchester
Posts: 3,579
Gav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to beholdGav Heryng is a splendid one to behold

Ah, man, look at all those pages!

You must have some energy, keeping up the momentum like that is something I struggle with. It's clear you enjoy your work there.

Insofar as an honest critique it would be the standard advice we all need; study anatomy, from life if possible and don't limit yourself to comics. That said, keep reading comics and once you've enjoyed the story go back and study how each page and panel has been designed to guide and focus your eye. Get reference for EVERYTHING. It will slow you down a bit, but your artwork will benefit overall.

Keep sharing!!

Gav
__________________
Follow me on Facebook!
Follow me on Twitter!
Follow me on Deviant Art!
Follow me on MySpace!
Gav Heryng is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-04-2017, 08:41 PM   #3
Arak-8
Registered User
 
Join Date: Nov 2017
Posts: 50
Arak-8 is on a distinguished road

Finally,and long last,someone said something. And thanks so much for that as well gav,I really and truly appreciate it.

And yes,I understand what you told me,it still needs work on the anatomy and everything else,I try to practice and reference whenever I can on my work.

Thanks again!
Arak-8 is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 12-04-2017, 08:59 PM   #4
sevans
www.sevans.co.nz
 
Join Date: May 2004
Location: Nowheresville, New Zealand
Posts: 6,229
sevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to all

Anatomy as already stated.
Watch your proportions. You have the large head, small body thing happening...which works well for cute, fun, light hearted comics, not really for superheroes.

And some variation in line weights might help too. Use thicker lines to help show form, foreground vs background and the light direction.
__________________
Have a look at all my other work.... you won't regret it.
Well you might, but do it anyway!

https://sevans73.deviantart.com/gallery/

www.sevans.co.nz

www.darkarts.co.nz
sevans is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-04-2017, 09:02 PM   #5
Arak-8
Registered User
 
Join Date: Nov 2017
Posts: 50
Arak-8 is on a distinguished road

Duly noted,thank you. So sorry it came out like that though,heh. And I appreciate the comments,I was wondering if anyone ever looked at all.
Arak-8 is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 12-04-2017, 09:12 PM   #6
sevans
www.sevans.co.nz
 
Join Date: May 2004
Location: Nowheresville, New Zealand
Posts: 6,229
sevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to allsevans is a name known to all

Comments and crits are hard to get on here. Just how it is some days.
__________________
Have a look at all my other work.... you won't regret it.
Well you might, but do it anyway!

https://sevans73.deviantart.com/gallery/

www.sevans.co.nz

www.darkarts.co.nz
sevans is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-06-2017, 01:46 AM   #7
Neil Allen
Registered User
 
Neil Allen's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2017
Posts: 117
Neil Allen is on a distinguished road

You might actually want to look into seriously learning the craft of lettering. There's a bit more to it than just making balloons and writing some text into them.

Here is a cool resource about the subject:
https://www.lettering-daily.com/

And here is a video about using an ames guide, which many letterers use. It can really help you clean up your lettering some:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8mnlQYSk6TM

Of course, that's if you care about that, though. At the very least it can be an interesting thing to look into, and I think it will help you improve your work.

Also, I think it would be interesting if you inked and colored some of your work (I didn't see any in the link that was). If you haven't, it's a good habit to get into, and like lettering, it can open up a whole new world to you. I used to just do pencil stuff, too, but one day I bought some pots of ink and some dip pens and placed a strict rule upon myself that whatever I drew MUST be inked. Always. And later on, I got a hold of some water color pencils (I started with Derwents but have since switched to Faber-Castell Albrecht Dürer) and said to myself that whatever I drew MUST be inked AND COLORED. Always. I feel those were really good habits to develop for me, and I've gotten much better at being a one man comic operation (which is how I like to be) by employing them. Doesn't really matter if the work winds up not being spectacular at first. The important thing to do is build that discipline where it just becomes the norm for you to do all of this stuff.
Neil Allen is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-10-2017, 12:48 PM   #8
Charles
New Hero
 
Charles's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2013
Posts: 752
Charles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really nice

Quote:
Originally Posted by Arak-8 View Post
Anyways,feel free to look and give critics and feedback on my comic art,but please..be honest,helpful and nothing negative and/or critical,just helpful feedback and any tips on how to improve my art will be appreciated.
Hi, kid! Nothing negative or critical, yet you want helpful feedback?

Tsk. . .tsk. . .tsk. . .

That's a recipe for silence. Critique is like a forge. It can get hot. It can burn! But, ultimately, you will end up with a better edge on your artistic blades.

Your deviantArt gallery is woefully underpopulated. It's not much different from the last time that I visited it.
__________________
Ye Olde Comic Book Temple
Charles is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-12-2017, 11:50 PM   #9
cesare2009
Blood Sweat and Tears
 
Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Montreal, Qc
Posts: 631
cesare2009 will become famous soon enoughcesare2009 will become famous soon enough

Im sure no one would discuss your art with the intention of hurting your feelings, but if you want feedback its going to be about what you might want to improve in your work. Everybody's work reflects the time they put into it, and the amount of experience they have. Great artists learn to be great artists. Some have a natural ability that they build on, others have to work a little harder.

It's clear you have a great work ethic, for many that's the hardest thing to do, sit down and draw, as much as you can. From what I see in your work, you are young, but you have a natural ability, build on that. Draw with purpose. Doing pages is fun, and its work, omg so much work, but I think you should study, copy drawings of artists you like. Look carefully at how the human body is put together. There are also rules you can learn, like proportions. Make your figures 7 head tall all the time. IF you dont know what that means, look it up. Find the rules for drawing a face and use them. Get some books on anatomy. Learn to draw. Trace pictures of big guys and pretty girls. Work for it.
cesare2009 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2017, 06:04 PM   #10
12013
Rob Norton
 
12013's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2017
Location: utah
Posts: 507
12013 will become famous soon enough12013 will become famous soon enough

Quote:
Originally Posted by cesare2009 View Post
Im sure no one would discuss your art with the intention of hurting your feelings, but if you want feedback its going to be about what you might want to improve in your work. Everybody's work reflects the time they put into it, and the amount of experience they have. Great artists learn to be great artists. Some have a natural ability that they build on, others have to work a little harder.

It's clear you have a great work ethic, for many that's the hardest thing to do, sit down and draw, as much as you can. From what I see in your work, you are young, but you have a natural ability, build on that. Draw with purpose. Doing pages is fun, and its work, omg so much work, but I think you should study, copy drawings of artists you like. Look carefully at how the human body is put together. There are also rules you can learn, like proportions. Make your figures 7 head tall all the time. IF you dont know what that means, look it up. Find the rules for drawing a face and use them. Get some books on anatomy. Learn to draw. Trace pictures of big guys and pretty girls. Work for it.
this is truth right here.

tho I also would like to know...what kind of art style do you ultimately want to have? like a Jim Lee big superhero style...or a more cartoony look like...I don't know...bill watterson?
what are you going for?
IF its the big superhero powerful figure stuff..there is a lot of learning to be done.. human figures and anatomy...foreshortening..storytelling.. a long list of stuff that we are ALL still learning. it never ends really.

so..what is it that you WANT to do?

rob
__________________
My art here...for anyone that wants to see..
https://robnor101.deviantart.com/gallery/
12013 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-13-2017, 06:20 PM   #11
Arak-8
Registered User
 
Join Date: Nov 2017
Posts: 50
Arak-8 is on a distinguished road

Heh,man what answers here eh? Thank you all for your kind attention,it was appreciated. I'm not afraid of getting hurt feelings Charlie,it's nothing like that,just trying to set a clear understand is all.

As for what I want to do Rob? I'd like to do superheroes and sci fi related concepts,and I would like my art style to be an influence of the following Neal Adams,jack Kirby and even some like rob liefeld and erik Larsen.

I hope that clears it up,but as some of you told me,I need more practice and practice is what I try to do whenever I can. Thanks again.
Arak-8 is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 12-14-2017, 12:00 AM   #12
MattTriano
Storyteller for Comics
 
MattTriano's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2011
Location: PHL PA USA
Posts: 429
MattTriano has a spectacular aura aboutMattTriano has a spectacular aura about

Quote:
Originally Posted by Charles View Post
Hi, kid! Nothing negative or critical, yet you want helpful feedback?

Tsk. . .tsk. . .tsk. . .

That's a recipe for silence. Critique is like a forge. It can get hot. It can burn! But, ultimately, you will end up with a better edge on your artistic blades.

Your deviantArt gallery is woefully underpopulated. It's not much different from the last time that I visited it.
You make it really hard to push past your delivery for any good info. Especially here, where there is no good info!

FYI 'Hi kid' is ****y as fuck. You seem to have either no idea how you come off socially OR you're trying to be a dickhead and Alpha people to build yourself up(which only serves to alert everyone that they need not pay you any attention). Do some work on yourself.
__________________
matttriano.tumblr.com
@matttriano
MattTriano is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-14-2017, 06:38 AM   #13
Scribbly
Registered User
 
Scribbly's Avatar
 
Join Date: Oct 2006
Location: Wicked Salem, MA
Posts: 4,944
Scribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud ofScribbly has much to be proud of

Quote:
Originally Posted by Arak-8 View Post
Duly noted,thank you. So sorry it came out like that though,heh. And I appreciate the comments,I was wondering if anyone ever looked at all.
Ok. I did look at it. What I see is a lot of dedication, perseverance and passion for working full comics. Fan passion. From writing to drawing.
I think we all had been there at some point.
I wouldn't mind that much for you on improving your artwork right now but your writing skills. If you want write a story it should be interesting enough that no matter what artwork you may lay on top of it, would keep the tale attractive for the reader.

As I can see you artwork already has some style. The narrative is clear. And can it be read perfectly.
Again, where I see you can improve a lot is on your writing.
Having a solid story and using your naïve style as it is could work successfully on an children's story book or underground, indie comics.
You want sell for marvel or DC you seriously need to take academic art classes.
Best wishes and keep it up.
You already have the diamond, your talent, it needs to be continuously polished to its final stage.

Last edited by Scribbly; 12-14-2017 at 09:08 PM.
Scribbly is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-14-2017, 11:47 AM   #14
Charles
New Hero
 
Charles's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2013
Posts: 752
Charles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really nice

Quote:
Originally Posted by MattTriano View Post
You make it really hard to push past your delivery for any good info. Especially here, where there is no good info!

FYI 'Hi kid' is ****y as fuck. You seem to have either no idea how you come off socially OR you're trying to be a dickhead and Alpha people to build yourself up(which only serves to alert everyone that they need not pay you any attention). Do some work on yourself.
Or it could simply be that I've known him for a while, now. Usually, he and I communicate with one another via e-mail. You could ask him, yourself, of course, but his response might not fit the narrative that you have crafted.

I was simply glad to see him on here. It was through this site that he and I first became acquainted with one another, a good while back. He and I aren't strangers to one another.
__________________
Ye Olde Comic Book Temple
Charles is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-14-2017, 11:57 AM   #15
Charles
New Hero
 
Charles's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2013
Posts: 752
Charles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really niceCharles is just really nice

I went back to check, and Arak-8 and I have known one another for a little over four years, now. That's when he and I first began exchanging e-mails with one another.
__________________
Ye Olde Comic Book Temple
Charles is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 08:33 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.11
Copyright ©2000 - 2018, vBulletin Solutions Inc.
© 1997-2015 Digital Webbing, LLC