A page from my personal project

brianmccranie31216 · 07-24-2012, 07:23 PM

My own little thing I'm working on in the little of extra time I have. Page 1, the inks aren't done yet and i'm unhappy with some small things I'll be fixing soon.

https://www.facebook.com/BrianMcCranieArt

emmanuelxerxjavier · 07-25-2012, 08:58 AM

i like it!. awesome page!

j giar · 07-25-2012, 02:40 PM

Nice page....couple suggestions. First panel...if there's a reason for the background being down in that fashion, great. But if not....so something else. Go with more dark shapes instead of lines. The main panel....the perspective of the stairway is confusing. More so in the foreground. Remember, if the character on the steps is important...frame him in. Use as much solid blacks as possible. You don't want him getting lost or confusing the reader when this gets shot down...reduced. Great start . J.

brianmccranie31216 · 07-25-2012, 03:24 PM

hey thanks for the critics guys, @j giar, there are a lot of problems I have with the page myself, the inks on the left side of the house in panel 3 etc. I agree with the background being more solid in panel 1, and also out lining the figure in the 3rd panel, thanks as soon as I'm able to get back to this those changes will more than likely take effect.

07-24-2012, 07:23 PM	#1
brianmccranie31216 Brian31216 Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Macon, Georgia Posts: 107	A page from my personal project My own little thing I'm working on in the little of extra time I have. Page 1, the inks aren't done yet and i'm unhappy with some small things I'll be fixing soon. https://www.facebook.com/BrianMcCranieArt

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07-25-2012, 08:58 AM	#2
emmanuelxerxjavier Registered User Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 151	i like it!. awesome page!

07-25-2012, 02:40 PM	#3
j giar Has nothing to add. Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Elyria, Ohio Posts: 5,968	Nice page....couple suggestions. First panel...if there's a reason for the background being down in that fashion, great. But if not....so something else. Go with more dark shapes instead of lines. The main panel....the perspective of the stairway is confusing. More so in the foreground. Remember, if the character on the steps is important...frame him in. Use as much solid blacks as possible. You don't want him getting lost or confusing the reader when this gets shot down...reduced. Great start . J.

07-25-2012, 03:24 PM	#4
brianmccranie31216 Brian31216 Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Macon, Georgia Posts: 107	hey thanks for the critics guys, @j giar, there are a lot of problems I have with the page myself, the inks on the left side of the house in panel 3 etc. I agree with the background being more solid in panel 1, and also out lining the figure in the 3rd panel, thanks as soon as I'm able to get back to this those changes will more than likely take effect.