Thor red sonja

striker · 06-18-2012, 11:44 PM

I draw some pages based on a script , the name of title its thor red sonja, Well I know I have a lot to learn, but I hope you like

Rex · 06-20-2012, 07:49 PM

This is so even-handed, it's hard to critique.

You need to master several areas of art to make comics, like expressions, figures, settings, storytelling, and light/shadow. You're not a master of any of these, but they're all working at the same level as the others, so the overall effect is very pleasant. We're not distracted by a great figure placed on a sloppy background. It all just works together.

Nitpicking would be pointless. Just do five more pages of something, then five pages of something else, then ten pages of something different, and you'll be amazing soon! Looks like you're coming along fine.

striker · 06-20-2012, 08:21 PM

I dont who you are, but thanks for the tips. Someday I hope to be amazing!

Sean Rutan · 07-02-2012, 12:15 AM

I absolutely LOVE your variety in "camera angles." The action tells a story, even without any narration to accompany it. To me, that's the sign of a good artist.

I'll agree with Rex in that, overall, this still looks like an amateur's work. That's not a BAD thing, because Muhammad Ali was still an amateur when he won a gold medal in the Olympics. Even then, he was pretty sweet. My point is that everyone starts somewhere. With your talent, you WILL progress rapidly, especially if you work hard. Like I said, I love your action sequencing.

If you're looking for direct feedback on the individual panels, I'll be more than happy to share. Whatever you choose, I hope to see your name on a book that I pick up at a convention some day

Steven Forbes · 07-02-2012, 12:13 PM

(I should be writing. Thankfully, I'm almost finished the one project, and will start the next.)

Things to work on: perspective and anatomy.

Let's take a look at P1.

Panel 1 shows what I take to be giants. Why do I take them to be giants? Because they're huge compared to the people on the ground as well as the buildings.

Panel 2 shows Sonja in a cage. What happened to the bottom bars? Instead of being in the cage and looking forlorn, she looks like she's hugging the cage like a savior. Notice how there are no bars near her chin/neck, her right elbow, and her left ankle. She's curled up around it. The bars should be in front of her. And that cage? The bars are on a slant. The good thing is that they're on the same slant in panel 3. The bad thing is that they're on a slant in panel 3. I like the consistency.

P2: Besides lots of obvious things, Thor's hand is tiny compared to the head of Mjolnir.

P3: You placed Thor's hand right at Sonja's chain-scaled crotch. Because of the way you draw hands, you're creating all kinds of unnecessary tangents there. Not to mention, that isn't the way Thor would be fighting, anyway. He'd either be leading with his hammer or doing a swing. He's not going to do a broken-hipped leap.

Those huts? They aren't going to hold anyone. They're too small.

Perspective and anatomy.

However, these pages show a lot of promise! Like Rex said, everything is at the same level. Keep working hard at it, and hopefully, it should all be raised at the same level. Looking forward to seeing a post from you in a few months time!

Oh, yeah: the giants.

Why are they huge on P1, but only as big as Sonja on P3?

striker · 07-02-2012, 08:33 PM

Thanks for your words, draw these pages as a practice,Trying to interpret a small script however I know I need much more practice and with their advice, maybe one day I will be at the level of good artists who there are on this page.

06-18-2012, 11:44 PM	#1
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06-20-2012, 07:49 PM	#2
Rex The Antidrama Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Las Vegas, NV Posts: 172	This is so even-handed, it's hard to critique. You need to master several areas of art to make comics, like expressions, figures, settings, storytelling, and light/shadow. You're not a master of any of these, but they're all working at the same level as the others, so the overall effect is very pleasant. We're not distracted by a great figure placed on a sloppy background. It all just works together. Nitpicking would be pointless. Just do five more pages of something, then five pages of something else, then ten pages of something different, and you'll be amazing soon! Looks like you're coming along fine.

06-20-2012, 08:21 PM	#3
striker Registered User Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: peru Posts: 18	I dont who you are, but thanks for the tips. Someday I hope to be amazing!

07-02-2012, 12:15 AM	#4
Sean Rutan Registered User Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Ohio Posts: 6	I absolutely LOVE your variety in "camera angles." The action tells a story, even without any narration to accompany it. To me, that's the sign of a good artist. I'll agree with Rex in that, overall, this still looks like an amateur's work. That's not a BAD thing, because Muhammad Ali was still an amateur when he won a gold medal in the Olympics. Even then, he was pretty sweet. My point is that everyone starts somewhere. With your talent, you WILL progress rapidly, especially if you work hard. Like I said, I love your action sequencing. If you're looking for direct feedback on the individual panels, I'll be more than happy to share. Whatever you choose, I hope to see your name on a book that I pick up at a convention some day

07-02-2012, 12:13 PM	#5
Steven Forbes Freelance Editor Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 2,103	(I should be writing. Thankfully, I'm almost finished the one project, and will start the next.) Things to work on: perspective and anatomy. Let's take a look at P1. Panel 1 shows what I take to be giants. Why do I take them to be giants? Because they're huge compared to the people on the ground as well as the buildings. Panel 2 shows Sonja in a cage. What happened to the bottom bars? Instead of being in the cage and looking forlorn, she looks like she's hugging the cage like a savior. Notice how there are no bars near her chin/neck, her right elbow, and her left ankle. She's curled up around it. The bars should be in front of her. And that cage? The bars are on a slant. The good thing is that they're on the same slant in panel 3. The bad thing is that they're on a slant in panel 3. I like the consistency. P2: Besides lots of obvious things, Thor's hand is tiny compared to the head of Mjolnir. P3: You placed Thor's hand right at Sonja's chain-scaled crotch. Because of the way you draw hands, you're creating all kinds of unnecessary tangents there. Not to mention, that isn't the way Thor would be fighting, anyway. He'd either be leading with his hammer or doing a swing. He's not going to do a broken-hipped leap. Those huts? They aren't going to hold anyone. They're too small. Perspective and anatomy. However, these pages show a lot of promise! Like Rex said, everything is at the same level. Keep working hard at it, and hopefully, it should all be raised at the same level. Looking forward to seeing a post from you in a few months time! Oh, yeah: the giants. Why are they huge on P1, but only as big as Sonja on P3?

07-02-2012, 08:33 PM	#6
striker Registered User Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: peru Posts: 18	Thanks for your words, draw these pages as a practice,Trying to interpret a small script however I know I need much more practice and with their advice, maybe one day I will be at the level of good artists who there are on this page.