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Old 04-14-2012, 03:44 PM   #1
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Legend of the Toadrider: The Farmer's Wife

Hmm, there doesn't seem to have been much activity here recently, but hello anyway! My name is Andrzej, and over the last couple of years I have become steadily more interested in writing comics. I just finished my first 'proper' script, and was wondering if anyone could have a look and tell me if I am on the right track? I would really appreciate some unbiased feedback

The script is in 3 parts, 6 pages a piece (I set myself the challenge of sticking to the six page format, being a bit of a 2000ad geek). Here is a link to part one:

http://astepien.com/blog/download/Toadrider_1.pdf

Any feedback will be most appreciated!
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Old 04-14-2012, 07:11 PM   #2
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Old 04-14-2012, 07:22 PM   #3
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Thanks!
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Old 07-12-2014, 05:10 PM   #4
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I encountered a link in your forum signature a short while ago, Andrzej.

http://digitalwebbing.com/forums/sho...8&postcount=36

I haven''t read your Toadrider script, but I see that at least some of it is already made its way into comic form.

Looks interesting. Is the comic in PDF format, by chance?
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I finished reading Toadrider: The Farmer's Wife. I'm not a fan of having to read full comic books on web pages, as I much prefer PDF format, but it held my interest. I liked it. I've only read that one Toadrider story, though.
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OK, I caught up, reading Toadrider: Fear the Toadrider.

It was a good find. I enjoyed it.
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Old 07-13-2014, 03:26 AM   #7
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Thanks, Charles! There is only a pdf of the first story, I'm afraid. The plan is to make a book one compilation when I've gone back and neatened it all up / when it's finished... I'm teaching myself digital coloring too atm, with the hope of putting out a full color book at some point in the future. Thanks for reading
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