Legend of the Toadrider: The Farmer's Wife

[Andrzej]

Hmm, there doesn't seem to have been much activity here recently, but hello anyway! My name is Andrzej, and over the last couple of years I have become steadily more interested in writing comics. I just finished my first 'proper' script, and was wondering if anyone could have a look and tell me if I am on the right track? I would really appreciate some unbiased feedback

The script is in 3 parts, 6 pages a piece (I set myself the challenge of sticking to the six page format, being a bit of a 2000ad geek). Here is a link to part one:

http://astepien.com/blog/download/Toadrider_1.pdf

Any feedback will be most appreciated!

[paul brian deberry]

Nice panel description when needed. Easy to read dialogue.

[Andrzej]

Thanks!