|08-07-2009, 05:38 PM||#1|
Me, a Hulk fan?
Join Date: Aug 2009
Vgilante Part 2
Alright, I've taken all the criticisms and I'm trying to write better stories. I've also decided to make vilgante for unique as you shall see in the next story.
Vigilante Part 2-Four Pages
Page 1- Four Panels
Panel 1- Vigilantes alter ego, Walter Dwayne, is hooked up to a drip in his bed. Give Walter a tired expression.
Walters Thought bubble : I waiting for the results to see if I've got cancer but the longer I stay in bed, the more the city goes to waste. But I have to ignore that, my health is my priority.
Panel 2- The doctor opens the door into Walters room, a grave expression on his face.
Walter : Whats the news doctor, I'm I curable.
Doc : Well yes, thats the good news, but the cure is hidden in a top secret facility, and I don't have access to it.
Panel 3- Walter, in anger hits the bedside table, smashing it to pieces. Only show his fist hitting the table.
Sound FX : CRASH!
Walter : GOD DAMMIT!!!!
Panel 4- The doctor, visibly shaken, backs out the door.
Doc : O-Okay Walter, I'll be back later.
Page 2- Three Panels
Panel 1- Walter sitting up in bed, pulls out the drip in his arm.
Walter : I've got to be careful with my powers. Next I might hurt the doctor, and I can't risk that.
Panel 2- Walter is at a small closet in his room, holding the door open, show that the clothes in it are dusty and ripped.
Walter :There is only one option left!!
Panel 3- Close-up of Walters hand typing in a code on a small device stuck on the end wall inside the closet.
Page 3- One large panel
At the back of the closet is a huge room filled with equipment, memorabilia, old suits(including the one in my last story), weapons. Make sure it isn't like the Batcave but is essentially just like a huge stock room rather than an operations center, filled with all his stuff. Make sure it is covered in cobwebs, showing he hasn't been there in a while.
Walter : I'll have to become Vigilante again.
Page Four- Four Panels
Panel 1- Walter is pulling down his suit which is dark blue and has a red skull on the chest, the suit also has gun holster and grenade belts on its upper part.
Panel 2- Walter, now in suit is perched on his window sill, ready to jump on to the street below. The sill should be three floors high.
Walter : I have to be careful, my cancer could have weakened me, I'll keep my wits up.
Panel 3- Show Vigilante, landed on the street, but the landing has messed up and he has his teeth gritted in pain.
Sound FX : Thump!!
Vigilante : (Loudly)ARRRRGH
Vigilante : I was right, this goddamn disease has weakened me big time. This WILL be a liability.
Panel 4- Vigilante, in pain is limping down the street toward the top secret facility where his cure is hidden. Make sure the shot of Vigilante looks grim and foreboding for him, and increase the shadow in the street behind him.
Vigilante : My powers are weakened, my foot is killing me, I wonder If I can even get past the first wave of guards in the facilty while looking for my cure.