aghori
09-21-2006, 04:47 AM
HEy Guys,
I am kinda new here.I am a rookie writer trying to get in the comic world.I am also an artist but I am not good enough for industry standards so I am working on that too.
Heres a sample script for the story I am currently working on.
HumanKind #1
Page 1 (flashback Page)
Panel 1:
A front view of a girl staring at you . She is leaning against a wall of a dim lighted room, she seems very scared, you can actually see it in her eyes. She is pleading for you to forgive her.
Girl: Please let me live and I will do anything, anything you say.
Other bubble(of a person not in the scene )-Well , hone this is all want from you
Panel 2: The same view of the girl who is now on her knees , she is crying, she is looking down .The way her shoulders are drooped She know this is her end.
Bubble(of a person not in the panel)_ this is what you wanted , isn’t it?
Panel 3:
Red font with black background
CAPTION: You could never believe that the scream was that of a human….
CAPTION: It was.
SFX:AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH
SFX:AAAAAAAahhhhh
Panel 4:
Red font with black background
CAPTION: I Could ‘cause I heard several more times…
CAPTION: 14 to be exact
Page 2 (present)
Panel 1: An aerial view looking down at the building which is a high court, which is a huge structure. There are a lot of wide steps leading to the main entrance of the building which is on a higher level than ground. It is bustling with people. You can see a lot of people on the steps and the front corridors which run along the whole building .
Panel 2: The view of the inside corridor from a corner .the corridors there are some doors in the corridor . Barristers and their clients are walking in the corridors getting and out of the rooms . Again the scene is very busy.
Panel 3: Readers POV .The view of the courtroom from the witness box looking at the lawyer, behind him the tables of the defendant and the prosecutors . And behind them the people viewing the proceedings of the case. The Lawyer points to the defendant, a man with the good/defined muscle structure .He is big, his face looks cruel , he has big bulging eyes .They are bloody red . And he has a faint devilish smile.
Lawyer-Now Mr. Arthur , Is the man sitting over there he one who held you and 14 others hostage and brutally killed the rest of the hostages?
Link-I couldn’t hear you
Arthur-Yes (he says in his mouth, that is not loud enough for the lawyer to hear him)
Link- Yes.
Page 3
The side view of the courtroom .The focal point again here is the lawyer , the defendan , the judge ,the witness who is man in his late 20s ,a jaded look on his face and a droopy posture .
Lawyer-As you said, Mr. Arthur in your statement, to the police, that you managed to escape in the last minute, didn’t you?
Link- Now can you tell me how you managed to do that?
Link-Can you please tell the courts what all you said in the statement given to the police?
Arthur -Yes I did.
Link-It is all in the statement.
Panel 2: The lawyers POV looking at Arthur. Arthur is looking down wih dropped shoulders in his chair. The judge who is in the corner of the panel who is too looking at the witness. Arthur is trembling ,.shaking .
Panel 3(small panel): The lawyers POV, now Arthur is looking up at him , with a scared look in his eyes and a pleading face. The tears are about to come out . And his mouth is open as if he is about to say something.
Panel 4(small panel):The view form above the witness’ head looking at the defendant who is sitting in his chair has a wry smile on his face. The background is black and there is no one else , The defendant is fully red in color
Panel 5(small panel):Puke falling ,show the texture. There is black background.
SFX-BWAAAAH
Panel 6 (wide panel):The view looking down at arthur who lying loosely on the bars of the witness box, he is at the edge of the seat showing he is about to fall down.
Voice of the lawyer (not in the panel)-Get the witness to the medics room, and some one please clean this mess up. The court is adjourned till the witness gains consciousness And is fully prepared to give his statement.
PAGE 4
Panel 1: The side view inside the medics room which is well lit by the huge windows as the curtains have been pulled aside. Arthur is lying on the clinical bed, there is a desk next to the bed there are some bottles kept on it and there is also a filing cabinet. The room is like a normal clinical room.
Panel 2:
Black background
SFX_ Sniff, sniff
Panel 3:
The view from top looking at Arthur half sitting , half lying on the bed with his elbow supporting him looking up at us with his eyes and mouth wide open. The nurse is standing next to his bed with a piece of cotton in her hand holding it near his nose. There is a person next to her on the chair he formally dressed, his is bulgy and balding.
Nurse- Its good to see that you are awake and doing pretty well.
Link – They are waiting for you to return to the courtroom.
Man- Are you ready?
Panel 4:Mans POV , Arthur looks at him, with a determined look .chin up looking him (the reader) straight in the eye.
Arthur-Yes.
Panel 5 : The view looking from the back of the courtroom to the Judges table. Judge is standing in his seat
Judge-Every body , please be seated.
Link – Gentlemen lets start the proceedings.
Page 5
Panel !: The view same as in the first panel of the first page But the background changes there are clouds lurking on the horizon and the day is less sunny.
Panel 2: The view from the judges table looking at the courtroom, the hammer is on the table in the foreground, there is a lawyer standing in his seat. Arthur is at the door of the court is walking towards the witness box with a cop escorting him. He rest of the people are in their usual places , the lawyers, the reporters, the jury, The CONVICT. The mood is quite grim , you can show this by the lighting , show the shadows beneath the eyes , the nose , the mouth not showing any of the facial features.
Panel 3: And angled side view( like 45 degrees from the side view, please remember this for future use) of the witness sitting in his chair not entirely comfortable .The lawyers is at the edge of the panel ,looking at the witness.
Lawyer- Now where were we? The question , oh let me put another question , lets go a little bit deeper in the case.
Link-Tell me how did it all happen , I mean you meeting the defendant , the hostage situation and the rest?
Panel 4- The bust/ torso view of Arthur looking down at the floor But we can still see his face, which kind of sad, dejected which is how he is supposed to be.
Panel 5: the close up view of the Arthur’s face who is still looking at the floor.
Arthur- It sounds quite stupid when I think about it now……..
Link-But it was a part of our lives back then.
Page 6(Flashback page)
Panel 1:The low side bust view looking up at Arthur, sitting in front of his PC, the room is quite dark , the monitor being the only source of light . There is stuff lying on his pc table., he is laid back sitting in his chair, he seems down and depressed, typing on the keyboard.
Caption: All of us had a common problem back then, depression, we were tired of living.
Caption: And many a times someone in the group would suggest a new way to end our lives. Probably suicide.
Panel 2: A detailed view looking down the newspaper classifieds with hands holding it. There are ads given by hitmen which have been encircled by red marker.
Ads like –We can rest your souls in peace.
Planning a funeral and a death before that.
I do my job well , by the way my job is to do people. There are some other ads encircled write gibberish in them .
Caption: And then some times a group mate would even make arrangements to get himself bonked too.
Panel 3: a small panel : A front view of a person holding a revolver to his temple he looks scared and his eyes are tightly closed, he shaking with fear.
Caption: sometime tried killing themselves but failed, it takes strength to kill yourself
Panel 4: the same size as panel 3 and its right next to the third panel: the same type of front view of another man shooting himself in the temple with his eyes wide open show the lot of blood coming out from the other side of the head.
Caption: And some succeeded.
Panel 5: A front man of a man in hat and trench coat inside a phone booth , there is complete shadow on his face due to the hat.
Caption: The word got around and hitmen starting calling us give us nice proposals. But we always declined, saying we don’t have enough money in our pockets.
Caption: But the money was enough , more than enough , but there were other things stopping us .
Critics and comments are more than welcome.
Thank you bhanu.
I am kinda new here.I am a rookie writer trying to get in the comic world.I am also an artist but I am not good enough for industry standards so I am working on that too.
Heres a sample script for the story I am currently working on.
HumanKind #1
Page 1 (flashback Page)
Panel 1:
A front view of a girl staring at you . She is leaning against a wall of a dim lighted room, she seems very scared, you can actually see it in her eyes. She is pleading for you to forgive her.
Girl: Please let me live and I will do anything, anything you say.
Other bubble(of a person not in the scene )-Well , hone this is all want from you
Panel 2: The same view of the girl who is now on her knees , she is crying, she is looking down .The way her shoulders are drooped She know this is her end.
Bubble(of a person not in the panel)_ this is what you wanted , isn’t it?
Panel 3:
Red font with black background
CAPTION: You could never believe that the scream was that of a human….
CAPTION: It was.
SFX:AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH
SFX:AAAAAAAahhhhh
Panel 4:
Red font with black background
CAPTION: I Could ‘cause I heard several more times…
CAPTION: 14 to be exact
Page 2 (present)
Panel 1: An aerial view looking down at the building which is a high court, which is a huge structure. There are a lot of wide steps leading to the main entrance of the building which is on a higher level than ground. It is bustling with people. You can see a lot of people on the steps and the front corridors which run along the whole building .
Panel 2: The view of the inside corridor from a corner .the corridors there are some doors in the corridor . Barristers and their clients are walking in the corridors getting and out of the rooms . Again the scene is very busy.
Panel 3: Readers POV .The view of the courtroom from the witness box looking at the lawyer, behind him the tables of the defendant and the prosecutors . And behind them the people viewing the proceedings of the case. The Lawyer points to the defendant, a man with the good/defined muscle structure .He is big, his face looks cruel , he has big bulging eyes .They are bloody red . And he has a faint devilish smile.
Lawyer-Now Mr. Arthur , Is the man sitting over there he one who held you and 14 others hostage and brutally killed the rest of the hostages?
Link-I couldn’t hear you
Arthur-Yes (he says in his mouth, that is not loud enough for the lawyer to hear him)
Link- Yes.
Page 3
The side view of the courtroom .The focal point again here is the lawyer , the defendan , the judge ,the witness who is man in his late 20s ,a jaded look on his face and a droopy posture .
Lawyer-As you said, Mr. Arthur in your statement, to the police, that you managed to escape in the last minute, didn’t you?
Link- Now can you tell me how you managed to do that?
Link-Can you please tell the courts what all you said in the statement given to the police?
Arthur -Yes I did.
Link-It is all in the statement.
Panel 2: The lawyers POV looking at Arthur. Arthur is looking down wih dropped shoulders in his chair. The judge who is in the corner of the panel who is too looking at the witness. Arthur is trembling ,.shaking .
Panel 3(small panel): The lawyers POV, now Arthur is looking up at him , with a scared look in his eyes and a pleading face. The tears are about to come out . And his mouth is open as if he is about to say something.
Panel 4(small panel):The view form above the witness’ head looking at the defendant who is sitting in his chair has a wry smile on his face. The background is black and there is no one else , The defendant is fully red in color
Panel 5(small panel):Puke falling ,show the texture. There is black background.
SFX-BWAAAAH
Panel 6 (wide panel):The view looking down at arthur who lying loosely on the bars of the witness box, he is at the edge of the seat showing he is about to fall down.
Voice of the lawyer (not in the panel)-Get the witness to the medics room, and some one please clean this mess up. The court is adjourned till the witness gains consciousness And is fully prepared to give his statement.
PAGE 4
Panel 1: The side view inside the medics room which is well lit by the huge windows as the curtains have been pulled aside. Arthur is lying on the clinical bed, there is a desk next to the bed there are some bottles kept on it and there is also a filing cabinet. The room is like a normal clinical room.
Panel 2:
Black background
SFX_ Sniff, sniff
Panel 3:
The view from top looking at Arthur half sitting , half lying on the bed with his elbow supporting him looking up at us with his eyes and mouth wide open. The nurse is standing next to his bed with a piece of cotton in her hand holding it near his nose. There is a person next to her on the chair he formally dressed, his is bulgy and balding.
Nurse- Its good to see that you are awake and doing pretty well.
Link – They are waiting for you to return to the courtroom.
Man- Are you ready?
Panel 4:Mans POV , Arthur looks at him, with a determined look .chin up looking him (the reader) straight in the eye.
Arthur-Yes.
Panel 5 : The view looking from the back of the courtroom to the Judges table. Judge is standing in his seat
Judge-Every body , please be seated.
Link – Gentlemen lets start the proceedings.
Page 5
Panel !: The view same as in the first panel of the first page But the background changes there are clouds lurking on the horizon and the day is less sunny.
Panel 2: The view from the judges table looking at the courtroom, the hammer is on the table in the foreground, there is a lawyer standing in his seat. Arthur is at the door of the court is walking towards the witness box with a cop escorting him. He rest of the people are in their usual places , the lawyers, the reporters, the jury, The CONVICT. The mood is quite grim , you can show this by the lighting , show the shadows beneath the eyes , the nose , the mouth not showing any of the facial features.
Panel 3: And angled side view( like 45 degrees from the side view, please remember this for future use) of the witness sitting in his chair not entirely comfortable .The lawyers is at the edge of the panel ,looking at the witness.
Lawyer- Now where were we? The question , oh let me put another question , lets go a little bit deeper in the case.
Link-Tell me how did it all happen , I mean you meeting the defendant , the hostage situation and the rest?
Panel 4- The bust/ torso view of Arthur looking down at the floor But we can still see his face, which kind of sad, dejected which is how he is supposed to be.
Panel 5: the close up view of the Arthur’s face who is still looking at the floor.
Arthur- It sounds quite stupid when I think about it now……..
Link-But it was a part of our lives back then.
Page 6(Flashback page)
Panel 1:The low side bust view looking up at Arthur, sitting in front of his PC, the room is quite dark , the monitor being the only source of light . There is stuff lying on his pc table., he is laid back sitting in his chair, he seems down and depressed, typing on the keyboard.
Caption: All of us had a common problem back then, depression, we were tired of living.
Caption: And many a times someone in the group would suggest a new way to end our lives. Probably suicide.
Panel 2: A detailed view looking down the newspaper classifieds with hands holding it. There are ads given by hitmen which have been encircled by red marker.
Ads like –We can rest your souls in peace.
Planning a funeral and a death before that.
I do my job well , by the way my job is to do people. There are some other ads encircled write gibberish in them .
Caption: And then some times a group mate would even make arrangements to get himself bonked too.
Panel 3: a small panel : A front view of a person holding a revolver to his temple he looks scared and his eyes are tightly closed, he shaking with fear.
Caption: sometime tried killing themselves but failed, it takes strength to kill yourself
Panel 4: the same size as panel 3 and its right next to the third panel: the same type of front view of another man shooting himself in the temple with his eyes wide open show the lot of blood coming out from the other side of the head.
Caption: And some succeeded.
Panel 5: A front man of a man in hat and trench coat inside a phone booth , there is complete shadow on his face due to the hat.
Caption: The word got around and hitmen starting calling us give us nice proposals. But we always declined, saying we don’t have enough money in our pockets.
Caption: But the money was enough , more than enough , but there were other things stopping us .
Critics and comments are more than welcome.
Thank you bhanu.