CloudrenderComics
09-20-2006, 11:52 PM
So here are some pages from the first issue of To Serve and Protect from Reckless Abandon Studios. Please C&C i'd appreciate it.
To Serve and Protect #1
Written by: Daniel Burdziak
©2006
Property of:
Reckless Abandon Studios
1/1 Full page, aerial shot
On this page we have an aerial view of a vast and great city. We can see many buildings and roads, as well as lush vegetation. In the center of the city is the largest building. It is a large circular building, with many smaller circular buildings interconnecting around it. There should also be above ground walkways leading from the smaller circular buildings into the large one in the center.
CAP:
This is my home, well it used to be until it was taken over by an Alien race known as the Yiger.
2/1 Top
In this panel we see Thunderfist standing on the sidewalk looking across the street. Across from him we can see the front entrance to another building. At the entrance to this building we can see two strong looking Yiger aliens. Next to the front door is a line of humans that leads off to the right. The Yiger aliens should look as though they are checking the humans papers before they enter the building. Above the door should be a banner that reads "Human Processing and Trade."
CAP:
I used to be known as a hero to these people....
2/2 Center
In this panel we can see Thunderfist as he begins to walk away from the building. Behind him we can see one of the Yiger grab a young human woman by the arm. The young woman looks horrified. The people in line behind the woman look as though they are shocked.
Yiger: You're comming with us. You'll make a nice toy.
Woman: Please don't do this, I promise I payed the fee!! Please someone help me.
CAP: These monsters known as the Yiger have taken over my planet, and use the human populace as nothing more than toys for them to sell and trade.
2/3 Bottom
In this panel we see Thunderfist has turned around and is watching the scene at the processing building. We can see a look of anger in his eyes. The Yiger should now be pulling the woman towards the door, as tears stream down her face.
Thunderfist: Let her go...Now!
Yiger: And just what do you think you're going to do if I don't?
3/1 Top
Here we can see Thunderfist rushing at the Yiger that was holding the woman. We should also see that the Yiger has released the woman and is in a defensive stance, weapon in hand. The woman should be down on the ground watching in fear.
3/2 Center
In this panel we can see the brick wall next to the door exploding outward as Thunderfist slams the Yigers head through it, nearly decapitating him. The people who were in line should now either be running or standing back frightened from whats happening. The second Yiger can now be seen behind and to the left of Thunderfist weapon drawn, as he approaches.
SFX: BRABOOOOOOM.
Thunderfist: I told you to let her go. Should've listened.
3/3 Bottom
Thunderfist has now turned quickly around and is looking the second Yiger directly in the eyes. There is a strong blue glow surrounding Thunderfist's hands now, and in his eyes is a look of pure anger and hatred. The Yiger should now be in a strong offensive stance as though he is going to strike quickly at Thunderfist.
Thunderfist: Is this a game to you people, do you enjoy seeing people suffer?
Yiger: Look around you hero these people are not suffering. They no longer need you here to protect them.
4/1 Top Half
The blue glow that surrounded Thunderfist's hands has now enveloped the Yiger completly. Thunderfist has lifted him up into the air. The bystanders nearby are watching as they know bad things are about to happen.
Thunderfist: These people will always need me you scum.
Yiger: Do what you will to me, and believe what you wish, but these people have turned their backs on you.
4/2 Bottom Half
In this shot we should be looking down from above. There is a hole in the ground about 2 feet deep in the center of the street. In the center of the hole we should be able to see the Yigers limp body, bloodied and broken. Next to the hole looking down with his fists at his sides is Thunderfist.
CAP: They need me now more than ever.....
5/1 Top
In this panel we are inside the Yiger's main council chambers. This room should be dark, and along the far wall should be six chairs, one for each of the Yiger elders. They should look as though they are talking to someone who is off-panel.
Yiger Elder: We have a situation. It seems a local soldier named Thunderfist does not like our operation here.
Off-Panel: What would you like done with him?
Yiger Elder: Kill him, and destroy everything he stands for. If you are successful, then we will speak of payment.
Off-Panel: Would you like me to bring his head back for you?
Yiger Elder: Of course.
5/2 Middle
Here we can see a large shadowy figure watching Thunderfist from a low rooftop. Thunderfist should be walking down the street.
Shadowy figure: Soon Thunderfist, very soon you will fall before me.
5/3 Bottom
In this panel we can see Thunderfist walking into what looks to be a dilapedated and abandoned building. He should be looking behind him, to see if anyone is watching where he is going. He looks as though he is being very careful so as to not be seen.
CAP: Why am I here, when the world no longer needs a hero?
6/1 Top
In this panel we are looking towards the front door from the back of the room, as the front door explodes inwards. We should see the back of Thunderfist as he is laying on the ground, trying to see what happened. In the doorway we see the shadowy figure of the headhunter known only as Razgar,
Razgar: Your time has come Thunderfist. You have been a menace for to long,
6/2 Middle
In this shot we see that Thunderfist is now standing, and he is surrounded by a strong blue glow. We can now fully see Razgar standing before him. Behind Razgar outside of the doorway we can see two Yiger's poking their heads in to see what is going on.
Thunderfist: I don't know who you are or why you are here, but you can bet on one thing...You will not be standing in about five minutes.
6/3 Bottom
In this panel we should see a massive blue bolt lauching out of Thunderfists outstretched hands hitting Razgar in the chest. Razgar should be standing straight with his arms out to his sides, as if the massive bolt hitting him in the chest does not phase him at all.
SFX: Craaaaaaack
Page 7/8 Full two page spread
In this shot we should see Razgar standing tall on page 7 with the two Yiger still watching from behind him. The blue bolt has now come back and struck Thunderfist in the chest. We should see Thunderfist flying through the back wall of the building, as the bolt hits him. There should also be alot of damage to the building from where Thunderfist was hit, leading to the back wall.
SFX: Ba-Doooooooom
9/1 Top
Here we can see that Thunderfist has flown completly through the back of the building and is embedded in the wall of another building across the street. There should be smoke rising from him since he has just been hit with a bolt of pure energy. There should be a few bystanders on either side of Thunderfist, trying to figure out what just happened.
Razgar Off-Panel: Did you really think it would be that easily Thunderfist? Good thing I learned to reflect psychic energy, or else that may have stung just a little bit.
9/2 Middle
Here we can see Thunderfist down on one knee, looking up at Razgar. Razgar should be looking down at him with the two Yiger still behind him watching everything. There should be blood on Thunderfists head comming from a wound by his forehead. He clothes should also be a bit shredded.
Thunderfist: You may be able to reflect my psychic attacks, but lets see if you can handle a good ole' fashioned ass kicking.
9/3 Bottom
In this panel we can see Thunderfist landing a heavy right handed punch to the head of Razgar. We should see Razgar's head cocked to the side from the blow. The bystanders are now behind Thunderfist on the sidewalk, watching the fight.
10/ Full Page
We should be looking at the fight from the side. We can see what looks to be a large portal opening by the two combatants.
To Serve and Protect #1
Written by: Daniel Burdziak
©2006
Property of:
Reckless Abandon Studios
1/1 Full page, aerial shot
On this page we have an aerial view of a vast and great city. We can see many buildings and roads, as well as lush vegetation. In the center of the city is the largest building. It is a large circular building, with many smaller circular buildings interconnecting around it. There should also be above ground walkways leading from the smaller circular buildings into the large one in the center.
CAP:
This is my home, well it used to be until it was taken over by an Alien race known as the Yiger.
2/1 Top
In this panel we see Thunderfist standing on the sidewalk looking across the street. Across from him we can see the front entrance to another building. At the entrance to this building we can see two strong looking Yiger aliens. Next to the front door is a line of humans that leads off to the right. The Yiger aliens should look as though they are checking the humans papers before they enter the building. Above the door should be a banner that reads "Human Processing and Trade."
CAP:
I used to be known as a hero to these people....
2/2 Center
In this panel we can see Thunderfist as he begins to walk away from the building. Behind him we can see one of the Yiger grab a young human woman by the arm. The young woman looks horrified. The people in line behind the woman look as though they are shocked.
Yiger: You're comming with us. You'll make a nice toy.
Woman: Please don't do this, I promise I payed the fee!! Please someone help me.
CAP: These monsters known as the Yiger have taken over my planet, and use the human populace as nothing more than toys for them to sell and trade.
2/3 Bottom
In this panel we see Thunderfist has turned around and is watching the scene at the processing building. We can see a look of anger in his eyes. The Yiger should now be pulling the woman towards the door, as tears stream down her face.
Thunderfist: Let her go...Now!
Yiger: And just what do you think you're going to do if I don't?
3/1 Top
Here we can see Thunderfist rushing at the Yiger that was holding the woman. We should also see that the Yiger has released the woman and is in a defensive stance, weapon in hand. The woman should be down on the ground watching in fear.
3/2 Center
In this panel we can see the brick wall next to the door exploding outward as Thunderfist slams the Yigers head through it, nearly decapitating him. The people who were in line should now either be running or standing back frightened from whats happening. The second Yiger can now be seen behind and to the left of Thunderfist weapon drawn, as he approaches.
SFX: BRABOOOOOOM.
Thunderfist: I told you to let her go. Should've listened.
3/3 Bottom
Thunderfist has now turned quickly around and is looking the second Yiger directly in the eyes. There is a strong blue glow surrounding Thunderfist's hands now, and in his eyes is a look of pure anger and hatred. The Yiger should now be in a strong offensive stance as though he is going to strike quickly at Thunderfist.
Thunderfist: Is this a game to you people, do you enjoy seeing people suffer?
Yiger: Look around you hero these people are not suffering. They no longer need you here to protect them.
4/1 Top Half
The blue glow that surrounded Thunderfist's hands has now enveloped the Yiger completly. Thunderfist has lifted him up into the air. The bystanders nearby are watching as they know bad things are about to happen.
Thunderfist: These people will always need me you scum.
Yiger: Do what you will to me, and believe what you wish, but these people have turned their backs on you.
4/2 Bottom Half
In this shot we should be looking down from above. There is a hole in the ground about 2 feet deep in the center of the street. In the center of the hole we should be able to see the Yigers limp body, bloodied and broken. Next to the hole looking down with his fists at his sides is Thunderfist.
CAP: They need me now more than ever.....
5/1 Top
In this panel we are inside the Yiger's main council chambers. This room should be dark, and along the far wall should be six chairs, one for each of the Yiger elders. They should look as though they are talking to someone who is off-panel.
Yiger Elder: We have a situation. It seems a local soldier named Thunderfist does not like our operation here.
Off-Panel: What would you like done with him?
Yiger Elder: Kill him, and destroy everything he stands for. If you are successful, then we will speak of payment.
Off-Panel: Would you like me to bring his head back for you?
Yiger Elder: Of course.
5/2 Middle
Here we can see a large shadowy figure watching Thunderfist from a low rooftop. Thunderfist should be walking down the street.
Shadowy figure: Soon Thunderfist, very soon you will fall before me.
5/3 Bottom
In this panel we can see Thunderfist walking into what looks to be a dilapedated and abandoned building. He should be looking behind him, to see if anyone is watching where he is going. He looks as though he is being very careful so as to not be seen.
CAP: Why am I here, when the world no longer needs a hero?
6/1 Top
In this panel we are looking towards the front door from the back of the room, as the front door explodes inwards. We should see the back of Thunderfist as he is laying on the ground, trying to see what happened. In the doorway we see the shadowy figure of the headhunter known only as Razgar,
Razgar: Your time has come Thunderfist. You have been a menace for to long,
6/2 Middle
In this shot we see that Thunderfist is now standing, and he is surrounded by a strong blue glow. We can now fully see Razgar standing before him. Behind Razgar outside of the doorway we can see two Yiger's poking their heads in to see what is going on.
Thunderfist: I don't know who you are or why you are here, but you can bet on one thing...You will not be standing in about five minutes.
6/3 Bottom
In this panel we should see a massive blue bolt lauching out of Thunderfists outstretched hands hitting Razgar in the chest. Razgar should be standing straight with his arms out to his sides, as if the massive bolt hitting him in the chest does not phase him at all.
SFX: Craaaaaaack
Page 7/8 Full two page spread
In this shot we should see Razgar standing tall on page 7 with the two Yiger still watching from behind him. The blue bolt has now come back and struck Thunderfist in the chest. We should see Thunderfist flying through the back wall of the building, as the bolt hits him. There should also be alot of damage to the building from where Thunderfist was hit, leading to the back wall.
SFX: Ba-Doooooooom
9/1 Top
Here we can see that Thunderfist has flown completly through the back of the building and is embedded in the wall of another building across the street. There should be smoke rising from him since he has just been hit with a bolt of pure energy. There should be a few bystanders on either side of Thunderfist, trying to figure out what just happened.
Razgar Off-Panel: Did you really think it would be that easily Thunderfist? Good thing I learned to reflect psychic energy, or else that may have stung just a little bit.
9/2 Middle
Here we can see Thunderfist down on one knee, looking up at Razgar. Razgar should be looking down at him with the two Yiger still behind him watching everything. There should be blood on Thunderfists head comming from a wound by his forehead. He clothes should also be a bit shredded.
Thunderfist: You may be able to reflect my psychic attacks, but lets see if you can handle a good ole' fashioned ass kicking.
9/3 Bottom
In this panel we can see Thunderfist landing a heavy right handed punch to the head of Razgar. We should see Razgar's head cocked to the side from the blow. The bystanders are now behind Thunderfist on the sidewalk, watching the fight.
10/ Full Page
We should be looking at the fight from the side. We can see what looks to be a large portal opening by the two combatants.