KH
08-15-2006, 05:48 PM
so yeah ... i know its really long but hopefully it hooks some valiant soul and they read the whole thing. So, to you Valiant Soul, I gotta ask:
Do the concepts and logistics work?
Do the characters work?
Do you want to read Issue 2?
Any other comments etc?
EMPIRE OF THE GODS
ISSUE 1
EotG remains © Kevin Huff 2005. This script may not be reproduced without written consent of the author.
Story Arc 1 Summary
Empire of the Gods – Paradox Apocalyptica
Pitch/Summary
In the year 2007, the planet Earth will meet its destruction at the hands of an alien race that has foreseen its own end at the hands of humans.
The story follows our hero, Department of Defense/Office of Special Operations field officer, Lt. Roderick Damon, and a young, beautiful Japanese archeologist named Kyuusai on an adventure across the globe to stop the doomsday clock from striking midnight. The discovery of a fantastic technology in a Chinese pyramid seems tied to the invading alien fleet and it’s now up to Lt. Damon and Kyuusai to unravel the mystery of the pyramids and save the human race from destruction. At the same time, our heroes are threatened and hunted by Red China’s military and Triads, operating under the mad auspices of Chairman Sheng, who views the alien fleet as the return of the Dragon, and will stop at nothing to bathe the Western nations of the world in the fire of the One True Path.
Page 1
PIC 1 – ½ page shot.
Wide angle shot of the Earth and moon from space. The sun is a piercing needle of golden light about to slip below the curve of the Earth’s horizon. Three quarters of the globe are still bright with a blue/gold pristine look about it. A rich backdrop of stars hangs behind. Very 3D, poignant colors here. High Def.
CAP; I remember the nuns at Sunday School saying, “In the beginning there was The Word.” And from that Word a god popped into being, flew around his little universe for a little while, got bored.
CAP; So he imagined the Earth and all the shit that walked, swam and flew around it. Was seven long days before God rested and got a chance to just kick back and enjoy it for a few billion years.
PIC 2 – ½ page shot
Perspective shifts westward and the Earth has now eclipsed the sun leaving the planet in relative darkness. The continents are now a jigsaw puzzle of magma, cracked, stretched, sunken, on fire, glowing in the absence of sunlight.
CAP; So what happened, God? Cuz it only took half a day for it to all go to hell.
Page 2
PIC 1 – 1/3 page shot
Shot (below, right, a portion of the dying planet still in view) of an observation window (presumably looking out from an alien starship). Hundreds of shell shocked refugee humans staring at their planet burning and dying, some standing on tiptoes to get a better view. Perspective focused on a toddler with his nose pressed to the glass, child’s mother’s eyes are wide in shock. All of the adults’ eyes represent horror, fear, loneliness and the same round, wide, disturbing, unmistakable sense of shock.
PIC 2
Close up through the window on the child. The kid is doe eyed, sucking on his finger absently, watching the world recede away forever.
CAP; Thousands of years of human history and advancement shot through the skull and left to boil away in an ocean of what might have been … evaporate into the substance of a memory.
PIC 3
The kid and ship are now receding further into the distance but still quite visible to the reader.
CAP; Like the drawing board of history just got wiped clean.
PIC 4
The ship has receded further away.
PIC 5 – 1/3 shot
The ship is swallowed into a wormhole, a 2D disc of what looks like space surrounded by an energetic event horizon.
CAP; Been a fucker of a week…
Page 3
PIC 1 – full page
An aerial shot of the Chinese Great White Pyramid covered with trees and shrubs (a government effort to hide the pyramid). It is night time. A full moon hovers low in the sky blanketing the landscape with a silvery glow and casting long, eerie shadows. A dirt road leads off panel. A high chain link fence topped with barbed wire surrounds the pyramid – however, there is a spot, close up in the picture, where the bottom of the links have been bent, forming a tiny passage through. A sign warns trespassers not to enter.
Superimposed display lett; Xi’an Province, China. One week earlier.
PIC 1.1 - Superimposed
Silhoutted shot of a pair of legs, climbing the face of the pyramid. Loose rubble scrapes off and bounces down the steps beneath the feet.
Page 4
PIC 1
Boy 1 pointing towards a doorway near the top of the pyramid. It is barred and locked, a sign with Chinese characters unquestioningly telling trespassers to stay clear.
BOY1; 你 確?
PIC 2
BOY2, not more than 15 years old, lithe, strong, holding his finger before his lips and an angry look in his eye at having to tell his friend to shut it.
No dialogue (N/D)
PIC 3
BOY2 working himself underneath the barred gate, barely squeezes through.
No dialogue
PIC 4
BOY1 with a scared look on his face. Extremely reluctant to enter the pyramid.
N/D
Page 5
PIC 1
Both boys now inside the pyramid. BOY1’s zippo casts some spots of light on the walls. They’re covered in traditional Chinese stuff like dragons, angry looking warriors, etc. Not very much little stuff like swords or anything as that would’ve been plundered long ago.
SFX (on lighter); Click.
PIC 2
Moving down a hallway now.
PIC 3
They enter another smaller hall with more ornaments hanging on the walls. This time it looks to be more like pictures, or murals describing a story. A metallic dragon in the sky?
PIC 4
Everything suddenly dark as the zippo goes out.
BOY1; 咒!
BOY2; 不服?!?
Page 6
PIC 1 - Blacked out
Sound effect; Click.
PIC 2 – blacked out
Sound effect; Click. Click. Clickclickclickclickclick.
PIC 3
blacked out
PIC 4
Blacked out.
PIC 5
A pinpoint of light.
BOY1; 看!
PIC 6
A slightly larger pinpoint of light.
PIC 7
Closer more pinpoints of light
PIC 8 (slightly larger than pics 1-7)
Closer ... more pinpoints of light illuminating a wall before the two boys. The wall is flickering. The wall is a hologram whose power source is obviously waning. BOY2’s hand passes through where the wall should be.
Page 7
PIC 1
Not blacked out but a very doused picture of a chamber that suddenly doesn’t seem like the rest of the temple. The walls are not stone, but a white plastic looking substance that emits a faint milky glow.
PIC 2
The walls of the holochamber go dark and the two boys are suddenly standing (or seemingly floating) before a 12 foot high holographic image of the Earth that spins silently in the darkness. The moon, stars and rest of the planets seem very far away—except for the sun which sits very large and bright some distance away from the boys and the earth. It’s a topographical image, meaning you can see the mountains and valleys, seas, ice bergs … an amazing amount of real time detail. The Great White Pyramid of China, The Great Pyramid of Egypt, a Japanese pyramid off the coast of Okinawa, and Macchu Pichu are all exaggerated and huge compared to other features on the globe. (Think Google Earth)
PIC 3
BOY2 is pointing in excitement at the exaggerated Great White pyramid on the globe.
PIC 3.1
As the boy touches the Great White Pyramid, it’s like the image has zoomed in. Incredible amount of detail, it’s got to look almost exactly like the aerial image from page 3 / pic 1. (Idea: There also happens to be a parked humvee outside the image of the pyramid.)
PIC 4
The boys are looking at each other with bewildered amusement on their faces.
PIC 5
Pull back to show the room again with two shadowy figures suddenly standing with them.
Official1 (tagged); 妖嬈!!
Page 8
PIC 1
The guard is aiming his rifle at the two boys who are now prostrate on the floor. The first official is obviously surprised despite his anger. (NOTE: the following ital. dialogue is intended to be a translation.)
Official2; Nan! Enough!
Official1; What is this place? Why have we not seen this room before??
PIC 2
The second chinese official passing his hand through hologram of the sun with a haughty, bemused look on his face.
SHENG; Apparently, the time has come. “The dragon has taken flight in the clouds.” We must prepare its nest.
Official1; This is not the time for your renditions of the I Ching, Chairman Sheng.
SHENG; Hmm. "Death is nothing but the temporary end of this temporary phenomenon." I trust you enjoy Buddha then?
PIC 2.1 (Superimposed)
Chairman Sheng points at the guard who now has his gun pointing at official1’s head.
SHENG; Guard.
PIC 3
Floor level looking at the two suddenly shaken and still prostrate boys covering their heads as the corpse of Official1 falls near them. A good portion of Official1’s head has been sheared away by the blast.
BOY1 and 2; AAAAGH!
SFX; BLAM!
PIC 4
Still looking at the prostrate boys on the floor. A pair of black booted legs, fatigues tucked into boot, gently kicking at the corpse of official1.
Page 9
PIC 1
SHENG has walked over to and placed his head into the center of the sun and raised his arms around it. He has a very casual manner. (Need Plan B in case this story just doesn’t fit in)
SHENG; Once, long ago, we believed that there were ten suns. They were of course gods. And you know, of course, that our calendar represented the week as a period of not less than ten days. So there were ten suns and ten days.
PIC 2
Close up on the Chairman’s face barely visible, appearing to burn within the sun.
SHENG; Their mother would wash the little bastards in the lake in the East each night and then place them in the branches of the fu-sang tree. Each morning one of them would leave and travel across the sky to the great mountain in the West, Yen-tzu.
SHENG; Of course the ten suns grew tired of this and banded together and formed a single ball of light.
PIC 3
SHENG now outside of the sun, appearing to palm it with his right hand. The guard has his rifle trained on the two boys, still not moved from their prostrate position on the floor. The stars twinkle all around them.
SHENG; The sun.
SHENG; The power of all ten suns almost killed everything on our small, blue planet. So the Emperor Yao of that time kindly asked the father of the suns to revert to their old ways. Naturally, the impudent little suns refused. So the Emperor summoned the greatest archer in the land, Yi ...
Page 10
PIC 1
Sheng sits down crosslegged before the two boys. He looks content, happy, like an old man telling stories to grandchildren.
Sheng; Yi embarked on an epic quest to right the wrong of the ten suns. For they had done much more damage than simply burning crops. The sun children incited the great monsters of the land to rampage and kill and rape and destroy everything that our great great grandfathers of the Yao dynasty had built.
PIC 2 – 4 sequence
Yi, standing atop a giant lizard with buck teeth firing arrows into its skull; A hideous creation called the Nine Babies rampaging and causing people to bleed from their ears, Yi cutting the babies heads off with his sword in the middle of a village in tatters; Yi fitting the Monster of Pigs (use your imagination) ass-first onto a pike.
Sheng; They were very nasty monsters.
PIC 5
Yi aiSheng his bow at the sun in the sky.
Sheng; And then Yi, the greatest hero this world has ever known, slew nine of the suns. In doing so, Yi created new a future from the ashes of the sun.
PIC 6
SHENG picking up BOY1’s head by the chin, gently, looking into his eyes.
Sheng; But nobody knows this story, do they? Ask anyone, even here in China, “Who slew the nine suns?” and they will be stumped, think you’re mad. But the works of Homer are taught worldwide. You fear the toyless wrath of Santa, do you not? Our greatest legends have become nothing more than ash let fly in the Western winds.
Sheng; The time for change has arrived.
Sheng; “Change comes from awakening and directing men's higher natures, which originate in the primal depths of the universe and are appointed by Heaven.” I like that one. It makes sense. Every change is a new creation.
Page 11
PIC 1
Chairman Sheng’s face up close, evil, the sun and earth eclipsed and behind him.
Sheng; Today, you and I will make glorious changes!
Page 12
PIC 1 - Edges of the pic should be rounded off. Night-cam.
Outside the pyramid again and we’re staring down at the entrance through a sniper scope (held by our hero, Roderick Damon). A jeep is parked at the foot of the pyramid.
PIC 2 - Night-cam.
GUARD1 exits the pyramid dragging the bodies of the two boys.
PIC 3 - Night-cam.
Close up on Chairman Sheng exiting the pyramid.
Roderick (jagged); Oswald to GrassyKnoll. I have confirmation: President Kennedy in my sights. Await orders to terminate.
Brannick (jagged); That’s a negative. We want a recon inside the pyramid as soon as President Kennedy has left the building.
PIC 4 - Night-cam.
Zoomed in on the guard. Bodies being loaded into trunk of jeep.
Roderick (jagged); Permission to speak candidly, sir.
Brannick (jagged); That’s a negative, Oswald. This is now a recon mission.
Page 13
PIC 1 – nightcam
The jeep speeds off into the distance.
PIC 2
Silhouette of Roderick’s legs running through the grass.
PIC 3
Silhouette of Roderick scaling the face of the pyramid, not using the steps.
PIC 4
A shot of the lock on the barred door being picked and opening
Page 14
PIC 1
Roderick, in full black, night vision goggles now on. His sniper rifle leading the way through the pyramid.
Roderick; I’m inside, copy?
Brannick (jagged); You’re choppy but we got you. Recording visual. What’s all that shit on the floor?
PIC 2 – night vision mode
First person looking down at two piles of brains and whatnot and two smeared trails of blood on the floor. One of Roderick’s feet is in it.
Roderick; Goddamnit. Stepped into a river of brains and blood.
PIC 3
Roderick moving down a hallway, the light attached to his gun (or helmet) illuminates the trail of blood.
PIC 4
Further down the trail … Roderick aiming the beam of light at a wall where the blood trail has ended abruptly. The wall is flickering like before.
Roderick (jagged); Um. The river ends at a … wall. It’s not a wall.
Brannick (jagged); Repeat that, Oswald. We’re losing you.
Roderick (jagged); I repeat: the blood trail ends at a wall.
Brannick (jagged); GrassyKnoll1 to Oswald. Come in.
Roderick; Fuck.
PIC 4
An expression of surprise on Roderick’s mouth as his hand passes right through where the wall should be.
PIC 5
Roderick steps through the holographic wall.
Page 15
PIC 1 – topleft, superimposed over pic 2
Just a superimposed shot of the goggles coming off frantically.
PIC 2 – full page
Roderick standing in the midst of the solar system with billions of stars twinkling around him.
Roderick (jagged); GrassyKnoll1? Any chance you copy?
Roderick (jagged); I didn’t think so …
Page 16
PIC 1
Roderick’s silhouetted feet running down steps of the pyramid.
PIC 2
Roderick has skidded to a halt, face in shock at what he sees before him.
Roderick (tag off frame); Fuck fuck fuck.
PIC 3 – half page shot
Aerial shot from somewhere behind Roderick’s position on the pyramid. Bright lights from 20 helicopters, 6tanks, 4 humvees all converging on the pyramid.
Brannick (jagged); Update, now! What the hell is going on, Roderick?
Roderick (jagged); Can’t leave the pyramid, need a plan right fucking now. Going dark and silent.
Brannick (jagged); We’ll think of something. Stay low.
PIC 4 - Superimposed over 3
Finger pushing headset to off position.
Roderick (no tag); This is fucked.
Sound effect; CLICK
Page 17 – Full page shot
The Great White Pyramid eclipses a red, dawning sun. There is a ton of commotion surrounding the pyramid as several battalions of the Red Army have made camp. Missile turrets, tanks, jeeps, misc. military trucks, men running around doing military stuff. Etc.
contd
Do the concepts and logistics work?
Do the characters work?
Do you want to read Issue 2?
Any other comments etc?
EMPIRE OF THE GODS
ISSUE 1
EotG remains © Kevin Huff 2005. This script may not be reproduced without written consent of the author.
Story Arc 1 Summary
Empire of the Gods – Paradox Apocalyptica
Pitch/Summary
In the year 2007, the planet Earth will meet its destruction at the hands of an alien race that has foreseen its own end at the hands of humans.
The story follows our hero, Department of Defense/Office of Special Operations field officer, Lt. Roderick Damon, and a young, beautiful Japanese archeologist named Kyuusai on an adventure across the globe to stop the doomsday clock from striking midnight. The discovery of a fantastic technology in a Chinese pyramid seems tied to the invading alien fleet and it’s now up to Lt. Damon and Kyuusai to unravel the mystery of the pyramids and save the human race from destruction. At the same time, our heroes are threatened and hunted by Red China’s military and Triads, operating under the mad auspices of Chairman Sheng, who views the alien fleet as the return of the Dragon, and will stop at nothing to bathe the Western nations of the world in the fire of the One True Path.
Page 1
PIC 1 – ½ page shot.
Wide angle shot of the Earth and moon from space. The sun is a piercing needle of golden light about to slip below the curve of the Earth’s horizon. Three quarters of the globe are still bright with a blue/gold pristine look about it. A rich backdrop of stars hangs behind. Very 3D, poignant colors here. High Def.
CAP; I remember the nuns at Sunday School saying, “In the beginning there was The Word.” And from that Word a god popped into being, flew around his little universe for a little while, got bored.
CAP; So he imagined the Earth and all the shit that walked, swam and flew around it. Was seven long days before God rested and got a chance to just kick back and enjoy it for a few billion years.
PIC 2 – ½ page shot
Perspective shifts westward and the Earth has now eclipsed the sun leaving the planet in relative darkness. The continents are now a jigsaw puzzle of magma, cracked, stretched, sunken, on fire, glowing in the absence of sunlight.
CAP; So what happened, God? Cuz it only took half a day for it to all go to hell.
Page 2
PIC 1 – 1/3 page shot
Shot (below, right, a portion of the dying planet still in view) of an observation window (presumably looking out from an alien starship). Hundreds of shell shocked refugee humans staring at their planet burning and dying, some standing on tiptoes to get a better view. Perspective focused on a toddler with his nose pressed to the glass, child’s mother’s eyes are wide in shock. All of the adults’ eyes represent horror, fear, loneliness and the same round, wide, disturbing, unmistakable sense of shock.
PIC 2
Close up through the window on the child. The kid is doe eyed, sucking on his finger absently, watching the world recede away forever.
CAP; Thousands of years of human history and advancement shot through the skull and left to boil away in an ocean of what might have been … evaporate into the substance of a memory.
PIC 3
The kid and ship are now receding further into the distance but still quite visible to the reader.
CAP; Like the drawing board of history just got wiped clean.
PIC 4
The ship has receded further away.
PIC 5 – 1/3 shot
The ship is swallowed into a wormhole, a 2D disc of what looks like space surrounded by an energetic event horizon.
CAP; Been a fucker of a week…
Page 3
PIC 1 – full page
An aerial shot of the Chinese Great White Pyramid covered with trees and shrubs (a government effort to hide the pyramid). It is night time. A full moon hovers low in the sky blanketing the landscape with a silvery glow and casting long, eerie shadows. A dirt road leads off panel. A high chain link fence topped with barbed wire surrounds the pyramid – however, there is a spot, close up in the picture, where the bottom of the links have been bent, forming a tiny passage through. A sign warns trespassers not to enter.
Superimposed display lett; Xi’an Province, China. One week earlier.
PIC 1.1 - Superimposed
Silhoutted shot of a pair of legs, climbing the face of the pyramid. Loose rubble scrapes off and bounces down the steps beneath the feet.
Page 4
PIC 1
Boy 1 pointing towards a doorway near the top of the pyramid. It is barred and locked, a sign with Chinese characters unquestioningly telling trespassers to stay clear.
BOY1; 你 確?
PIC 2
BOY2, not more than 15 years old, lithe, strong, holding his finger before his lips and an angry look in his eye at having to tell his friend to shut it.
No dialogue (N/D)
PIC 3
BOY2 working himself underneath the barred gate, barely squeezes through.
No dialogue
PIC 4
BOY1 with a scared look on his face. Extremely reluctant to enter the pyramid.
N/D
Page 5
PIC 1
Both boys now inside the pyramid. BOY1’s zippo casts some spots of light on the walls. They’re covered in traditional Chinese stuff like dragons, angry looking warriors, etc. Not very much little stuff like swords or anything as that would’ve been plundered long ago.
SFX (on lighter); Click.
PIC 2
Moving down a hallway now.
PIC 3
They enter another smaller hall with more ornaments hanging on the walls. This time it looks to be more like pictures, or murals describing a story. A metallic dragon in the sky?
PIC 4
Everything suddenly dark as the zippo goes out.
BOY1; 咒!
BOY2; 不服?!?
Page 6
PIC 1 - Blacked out
Sound effect; Click.
PIC 2 – blacked out
Sound effect; Click. Click. Clickclickclickclickclick.
PIC 3
blacked out
PIC 4
Blacked out.
PIC 5
A pinpoint of light.
BOY1; 看!
PIC 6
A slightly larger pinpoint of light.
PIC 7
Closer more pinpoints of light
PIC 8 (slightly larger than pics 1-7)
Closer ... more pinpoints of light illuminating a wall before the two boys. The wall is flickering. The wall is a hologram whose power source is obviously waning. BOY2’s hand passes through where the wall should be.
Page 7
PIC 1
Not blacked out but a very doused picture of a chamber that suddenly doesn’t seem like the rest of the temple. The walls are not stone, but a white plastic looking substance that emits a faint milky glow.
PIC 2
The walls of the holochamber go dark and the two boys are suddenly standing (or seemingly floating) before a 12 foot high holographic image of the Earth that spins silently in the darkness. The moon, stars and rest of the planets seem very far away—except for the sun which sits very large and bright some distance away from the boys and the earth. It’s a topographical image, meaning you can see the mountains and valleys, seas, ice bergs … an amazing amount of real time detail. The Great White Pyramid of China, The Great Pyramid of Egypt, a Japanese pyramid off the coast of Okinawa, and Macchu Pichu are all exaggerated and huge compared to other features on the globe. (Think Google Earth)
PIC 3
BOY2 is pointing in excitement at the exaggerated Great White pyramid on the globe.
PIC 3.1
As the boy touches the Great White Pyramid, it’s like the image has zoomed in. Incredible amount of detail, it’s got to look almost exactly like the aerial image from page 3 / pic 1. (Idea: There also happens to be a parked humvee outside the image of the pyramid.)
PIC 4
The boys are looking at each other with bewildered amusement on their faces.
PIC 5
Pull back to show the room again with two shadowy figures suddenly standing with them.
Official1 (tagged); 妖嬈!!
Page 8
PIC 1
The guard is aiming his rifle at the two boys who are now prostrate on the floor. The first official is obviously surprised despite his anger. (NOTE: the following ital. dialogue is intended to be a translation.)
Official2; Nan! Enough!
Official1; What is this place? Why have we not seen this room before??
PIC 2
The second chinese official passing his hand through hologram of the sun with a haughty, bemused look on his face.
SHENG; Apparently, the time has come. “The dragon has taken flight in the clouds.” We must prepare its nest.
Official1; This is not the time for your renditions of the I Ching, Chairman Sheng.
SHENG; Hmm. "Death is nothing but the temporary end of this temporary phenomenon." I trust you enjoy Buddha then?
PIC 2.1 (Superimposed)
Chairman Sheng points at the guard who now has his gun pointing at official1’s head.
SHENG; Guard.
PIC 3
Floor level looking at the two suddenly shaken and still prostrate boys covering their heads as the corpse of Official1 falls near them. A good portion of Official1’s head has been sheared away by the blast.
BOY1 and 2; AAAAGH!
SFX; BLAM!
PIC 4
Still looking at the prostrate boys on the floor. A pair of black booted legs, fatigues tucked into boot, gently kicking at the corpse of official1.
Page 9
PIC 1
SHENG has walked over to and placed his head into the center of the sun and raised his arms around it. He has a very casual manner. (Need Plan B in case this story just doesn’t fit in)
SHENG; Once, long ago, we believed that there were ten suns. They were of course gods. And you know, of course, that our calendar represented the week as a period of not less than ten days. So there were ten suns and ten days.
PIC 2
Close up on the Chairman’s face barely visible, appearing to burn within the sun.
SHENG; Their mother would wash the little bastards in the lake in the East each night and then place them in the branches of the fu-sang tree. Each morning one of them would leave and travel across the sky to the great mountain in the West, Yen-tzu.
SHENG; Of course the ten suns grew tired of this and banded together and formed a single ball of light.
PIC 3
SHENG now outside of the sun, appearing to palm it with his right hand. The guard has his rifle trained on the two boys, still not moved from their prostrate position on the floor. The stars twinkle all around them.
SHENG; The sun.
SHENG; The power of all ten suns almost killed everything on our small, blue planet. So the Emperor Yao of that time kindly asked the father of the suns to revert to their old ways. Naturally, the impudent little suns refused. So the Emperor summoned the greatest archer in the land, Yi ...
Page 10
PIC 1
Sheng sits down crosslegged before the two boys. He looks content, happy, like an old man telling stories to grandchildren.
Sheng; Yi embarked on an epic quest to right the wrong of the ten suns. For they had done much more damage than simply burning crops. The sun children incited the great monsters of the land to rampage and kill and rape and destroy everything that our great great grandfathers of the Yao dynasty had built.
PIC 2 – 4 sequence
Yi, standing atop a giant lizard with buck teeth firing arrows into its skull; A hideous creation called the Nine Babies rampaging and causing people to bleed from their ears, Yi cutting the babies heads off with his sword in the middle of a village in tatters; Yi fitting the Monster of Pigs (use your imagination) ass-first onto a pike.
Sheng; They were very nasty monsters.
PIC 5
Yi aiSheng his bow at the sun in the sky.
Sheng; And then Yi, the greatest hero this world has ever known, slew nine of the suns. In doing so, Yi created new a future from the ashes of the sun.
PIC 6
SHENG picking up BOY1’s head by the chin, gently, looking into his eyes.
Sheng; But nobody knows this story, do they? Ask anyone, even here in China, “Who slew the nine suns?” and they will be stumped, think you’re mad. But the works of Homer are taught worldwide. You fear the toyless wrath of Santa, do you not? Our greatest legends have become nothing more than ash let fly in the Western winds.
Sheng; The time for change has arrived.
Sheng; “Change comes from awakening and directing men's higher natures, which originate in the primal depths of the universe and are appointed by Heaven.” I like that one. It makes sense. Every change is a new creation.
Page 11
PIC 1
Chairman Sheng’s face up close, evil, the sun and earth eclipsed and behind him.
Sheng; Today, you and I will make glorious changes!
Page 12
PIC 1 - Edges of the pic should be rounded off. Night-cam.
Outside the pyramid again and we’re staring down at the entrance through a sniper scope (held by our hero, Roderick Damon). A jeep is parked at the foot of the pyramid.
PIC 2 - Night-cam.
GUARD1 exits the pyramid dragging the bodies of the two boys.
PIC 3 - Night-cam.
Close up on Chairman Sheng exiting the pyramid.
Roderick (jagged); Oswald to GrassyKnoll. I have confirmation: President Kennedy in my sights. Await orders to terminate.
Brannick (jagged); That’s a negative. We want a recon inside the pyramid as soon as President Kennedy has left the building.
PIC 4 - Night-cam.
Zoomed in on the guard. Bodies being loaded into trunk of jeep.
Roderick (jagged); Permission to speak candidly, sir.
Brannick (jagged); That’s a negative, Oswald. This is now a recon mission.
Page 13
PIC 1 – nightcam
The jeep speeds off into the distance.
PIC 2
Silhouette of Roderick’s legs running through the grass.
PIC 3
Silhouette of Roderick scaling the face of the pyramid, not using the steps.
PIC 4
A shot of the lock on the barred door being picked and opening
Page 14
PIC 1
Roderick, in full black, night vision goggles now on. His sniper rifle leading the way through the pyramid.
Roderick; I’m inside, copy?
Brannick (jagged); You’re choppy but we got you. Recording visual. What’s all that shit on the floor?
PIC 2 – night vision mode
First person looking down at two piles of brains and whatnot and two smeared trails of blood on the floor. One of Roderick’s feet is in it.
Roderick; Goddamnit. Stepped into a river of brains and blood.
PIC 3
Roderick moving down a hallway, the light attached to his gun (or helmet) illuminates the trail of blood.
PIC 4
Further down the trail … Roderick aiming the beam of light at a wall where the blood trail has ended abruptly. The wall is flickering like before.
Roderick (jagged); Um. The river ends at a … wall. It’s not a wall.
Brannick (jagged); Repeat that, Oswald. We’re losing you.
Roderick (jagged); I repeat: the blood trail ends at a wall.
Brannick (jagged); GrassyKnoll1 to Oswald. Come in.
Roderick; Fuck.
PIC 4
An expression of surprise on Roderick’s mouth as his hand passes right through where the wall should be.
PIC 5
Roderick steps through the holographic wall.
Page 15
PIC 1 – topleft, superimposed over pic 2
Just a superimposed shot of the goggles coming off frantically.
PIC 2 – full page
Roderick standing in the midst of the solar system with billions of stars twinkling around him.
Roderick (jagged); GrassyKnoll1? Any chance you copy?
Roderick (jagged); I didn’t think so …
Page 16
PIC 1
Roderick’s silhouetted feet running down steps of the pyramid.
PIC 2
Roderick has skidded to a halt, face in shock at what he sees before him.
Roderick (tag off frame); Fuck fuck fuck.
PIC 3 – half page shot
Aerial shot from somewhere behind Roderick’s position on the pyramid. Bright lights from 20 helicopters, 6tanks, 4 humvees all converging on the pyramid.
Brannick (jagged); Update, now! What the hell is going on, Roderick?
Roderick (jagged); Can’t leave the pyramid, need a plan right fucking now. Going dark and silent.
Brannick (jagged); We’ll think of something. Stay low.
PIC 4 - Superimposed over 3
Finger pushing headset to off position.
Roderick (no tag); This is fucked.
Sound effect; CLICK
Page 17 – Full page shot
The Great White Pyramid eclipses a red, dawning sun. There is a ton of commotion surrounding the pyramid as several battalions of the Red Army have made camp. Missile turrets, tanks, jeeps, misc. military trucks, men running around doing military stuff. Etc.
contd