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07-22-2006, 11:14 AM
i was looking for advice on my story here if somone could help me with it and stuff like that and give me some advice to wrighting it i would like to see it one day turned into a comic book and stuff like that one of theas day i was told i could get some help here so that all good
07-22-2006, 11:19 AM
here is my story for your enjoay ment tell me what you think of it what i could impove on and and stuff like that i am looking for help
New Moon Over Michigan
Hi. Welcome to Michigan, my home state. Well, I have a troubled history. I was always beaten by my father when i was younger. I always keep to my self. I don't let other push me around or anything. If I don't have to push them, I keep quiet most of the time.
My story is of how I became a werewolf. The government had just recognized werewolves as a species that need to be protected. There was no hunting of werewolves allowed. So, I keep to my self most of the time. I need a break anyway. It’s kinda hard for me to tell my story. My favorite thing to do is to take photographs of people and animals and also of scenery, such as the sun setting.
Well, let’s start off with how I became a werewolf. I was traveling up I-75 from Ann Arbor Michigan. I was a student of the University of Michigan, and I was just about to my destination of Gaylord Michigan whre I was going to go out in the wood and take pictures, just for the Hell of doing what I like. I was wearing a gray hoodie and black jeans - not my usual attire, but hey, I like jeans. Also, I wear sweatpants a lot, so forgive me.
Anyway, I was out snapping photos most of the day, and I forgot about the werewolves that roamed this area of Gaylord. My truck was parked on the side of the road by the wood, so i could get to it fast. It was bout 4:00 p.m. It wasn't going to get dark until about 9:00pm, so I still had a lot of time. I went back to my truck to eat, and take some more photos of the wolves. They had just come back to the area, as part of a Northern Michigan wolf restoration program our government had begun, recognizing the need just as European countries have.
Anyway, I have always had a fascination for werewolves.
Out of nowhere, a girl came around. She was a tom boy girl wearing sweatpants and hoodie. I was getting hot and stuff like that. Her name was Misty. She was about 5’9”, the same height as me, at least that what she told me. She was skinny and muscular built. I was getting a stiff seeing her in mens sweatpants, and stuff like that.
She wanted to stay around, “Hi, I was wondering if i could stay around and watch you take photos, if that's all right.”
“Sure,” I said to her. She was very cute. She didn't even have a top on so that made me even more erect than I already was in my black jeans. I was blushing when she said that. Coming by me, the heat was rising on both misty and polar at that moment. He continued to take photos. The sun was about ready to set when Misty sat down on the grass. She was still wearing her sweatpants. She watched the sun go down as I was taking photos by the lake in the woods. It was getting dark out. She said something about werewolves being around her.
“Oh, like the ones the government just recognized as a race?”
“Yes,” Misty said.
“You are not a werewolf, are you?”
“Mm,” Misty said
Polar gave her a stern look.
“Yes, I am polar. I am sorry. I should have told you earlier.”
“Why didn't you tell me?” polar said.
Well after that the moon rose in the sky. Misty was just fantasized by the moons light and rays. She doubled over and began to change. Her back bulged and joints twisted and contorted, and her breast got more muscular and her hair fell back and she howled with joy as a wolf. Her sweatpants were not torn but ripped at the thigh on her right leg and left knee.
07-22-2006, 01:18 PM
how could i turn this into a comic format if somone could exsplane that to me?
07-22-2006, 02:05 PM
Here is a good place to get some pointers in general:
At the end is a sample script so you can see exactly how comic book scripts are written.
Here are some other links that should help as well:
07-22-2006, 03:50 PM
The three most important things I can think of, as far as writing goes, are these.
1. Spell check. I know it's just a post on a bulletin board, but if you are going to want people to read your story they should feel comfortable while doing so.
2. Don't rely on the same words over and over again. Try to think of new ways to say things and try not to present the same idea twice.
3. Mystery and Subtly are what makes people want to read on. Saying, over and over again that you are a warewolf does not create these things. Let us see the warewolf come out slowly, and build excitement around the idea.
07-22-2006, 05:11 PM
You should go and visit the following pages. Each one of these offers tips, and help on how comicbook script is made.
http://jameshudnall.com/toc.htm: Its a book-long tutorial, focusing on how to structure your story and such. There's also a sample script, and a terminology thingamajig.
http://www.comicbookresources.com/columns/index.cgi?column=cia&article=237: First part of the three-part essay from the great Warren Ellis. Very helpfull, fun, and concise.
http://www.m-w.com/: A dictionary.
http://members.shaw.ca/creatingcomics/writers.html: A collection of different links you may find helpful.
07-22-2006, 05:15 PM
those are great links you guys put up.
07-22-2006, 08:22 PM
Once you get a feel for the format. I have a suggestion.
From what I read, you would probably have to use a narrative voice or captions for some of story.
07-22-2006, 10:28 PM
with my story i whant to have there werewolves the main part of the story and stuff like that just so you guys know
07-23-2006, 12:27 AM
I dont understand a word of that last post.
07-23-2006, 01:33 AM
He was informing us that the story was about Werewolves and that he wanted to make that his theme.
07-23-2006, 02:00 AM
ah, yeah. my dyslexia + his spelling and grammar= wowzers.
07-26-2006, 12:15 PM
I wish you success, but I am declaring a moritorium on the phrase "and stuff like that."
Please, post the script here, once it comes together. I dig werewolves, and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this, but please, please, please do not use the term "and stuff like that."
You're relying on the reader to do your work for you.
And yes, the spelling is horrid, but don't sweat that, at least until you're ready to show off your work. Most Word Processors have a spell check. And I hear Bendis can't spell, either.
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