Hyperfish
07-21-2006, 04:53 AM
Hello All,
I haven't spent a huge amount of time on the writers thread as I'm usually over at the artists one commenting on the amazing work people display, but anyway as I'm a writer, (in name/hope only :) ) I thought I'd come and submit some stuff. Herea the story synopsis and sample page for my own creator owned series thing called, 'The Guard Call', it's all to do with bioengineered soliders on the run and has some mature themes and stuff. So anyway below is the synopsis of the first issue and a sample page of script. I did have someone pencilling it, but he seems to have disappeared...oh well...C&C most welcome :happy:
Story Synopsis #1 Guard Call:
Set in the year 2014: At his lowest ebb Richard Gaiman,a leading expert and scientist in the field of human genetics, is thrown a lifeline by the U.S. Government who want him to help design and implement a unit of bio-engineered soldiers. The U.S. military, knowing Gaiman's previous history in genetic engineering want to us his skillsin a last ditch attempt to end the war in the Middle East. Three soldiers in the U.S. military volunteer to undergo genetic upgrading while Gaiman manages to go one step further and creates a fourth member of the team in a lab using D.N.A from his ex-wife, and other various female role models in society. This fourth member he takes as his ‘wife’ and calls her Linda, (after he’s long dead former ‘wife’). They are finally joined by a mysterious stranger from Gaiman’s past called ‘Darkwalker’, who has joined the military as a ‘consultant’.
While this unit is a potentially deadly weapon, there are different opinions within the military on how best they should be used. The decision is made to only deploy them on reconnaissance missions and keep their presence top secret, leaving them to be kept in suspended animation. However an entire division of the U.S. Marine Core is wiped out south of the city of Jouf and the decision is made not to risk anymore military personal. The unknown unit is sent in to find out what happened.
The team soon find the division; they’ve been massacred, torn apart by what looks to be large animals. Darkwalker detects a massive psychic presence and becomes ill by it's power. The team soon find the culprits, large insect half human hybrids that descend upon the team. Our heroes defend themselves clumsily, while questioning what they’ve got themselves into. As the issue closes the insect men back of from our heroes as on the last page the leader of the group, a massive centipede man, reveals himself as a threat the team must face in the next issue!!
This a sample of the action sequences:
Sample pg 3 and 4 Action panels
pg18:
Panel 1: Large Panel in forest clearing Lightning and the gang, (including DarkWalker), facing off against the bug men. Darkwalker is on the floor looking ill and struggling. Red Tiger and Wild Thing are firing there M-16's at two bugs there are in view hitting them, bit of blood. Lighting is pointing her arm forward towards them with her mouth open like she's yelling.
Lightning: Everyone, lets go!
Panel 2: One of the bugs attacks Wild thing, (Remember he's not with his scars yet), destroying his gun, he looks shocked.
Solider 9 (Wild Thing): What are these things?!
Panel 3: Red Tiger, (Still In weapon 12 persona, sarcastic without the blades in her back) leaping over a bugs head, acrobatically, (possibly faded drawings of motion of a somersault) now she's horizontal in the air with her M-16 pointing down firing rounds into the top of the creatures head, lots of blood brain everywhere as the bullets find there way through.
Tiger: Does anyone emit DDT from there armpits?
Tiger:....Cos that'd be useful about now....
Panel 4: Crimson standing next to Wild Thing and firing his gun into the beast thats attacking Wild Thing, determined look on his face, Crimson is next to a tree. Wild Thing is trying to hold the thing off, over Crimson's shoulder we can see another insect man with large claws racing towards Crimson. Wild Thing is looking towards the approaching beast and his mouth is open like his desperately screaming, looking strained.
Wild Thing: 'Look Out!!'
Panel: 5 Thinner panel, Crimson spinning round, (motion lines) with a shocked look on his face and the beastie leaping towards him claw out stretched.
Panel 6: Last one to squeeze on the page, thin panel, close up shot of Crimsons eye,(maybe top half of his face) we can see the reflection of the beast coming towards him through the pupil, looks distressed.
Next pg
Panel 1: Crimson ducks just in time, the huge claw embedding itself in the tree, splinters, motion lines round the claw and Crimson ducking down, this is a closeish shot so we can see all of the above and the end of Crimsons M-16 firing up at the monster.
Crimson: urggh!...Who cares what they are?!, All I know is that are guns are having no effect!!
Panel 2: Switch to Lightning and Darkwalker. Walker is still on the ground suffering, Lightning is standing over him protecting him, still clearing in a woodland, a circle of the beasties are around them. Lighting is holding one of them of with her arm, while kicking another in what would be it's face.
Lightning Arc: Hit them with sticks and stones if you have to!...Walkies you gonna stop vomiting and offer some help here?
Panel 3: Close shot of DarkWalker still sweating and straining looking up at Lightning Arc. A Lightning bolt image appears above his head, a bit faded but clear.
Panel 4: Closer shot of Lightning' face, she's smiling, a self knowing smile. A beast is right near her.
Lighting: 'Now why didn't I think of that ?....
Panel 5: Last shot on page is of the beast on Lightning from behind. Her eyes are glowing and her hands are full of lightning bolts, her arms are positioned next to her. Gritting her teeth like she's charging up her powers.
Next pg.
Panel 1 Full page, Lighting has flung her arms out, lightning firing from her fingertips and bouncing of every bug around her, firing them, including the one behind her. This should look spectacular, really go for it. Lightning should look like a lightning god incarnate, Darkwalker is looking at her shocked, the rest of the team are shielding their eyes.
I haven't spent a huge amount of time on the writers thread as I'm usually over at the artists one commenting on the amazing work people display, but anyway as I'm a writer, (in name/hope only :) ) I thought I'd come and submit some stuff. Herea the story synopsis and sample page for my own creator owned series thing called, 'The Guard Call', it's all to do with bioengineered soliders on the run and has some mature themes and stuff. So anyway below is the synopsis of the first issue and a sample page of script. I did have someone pencilling it, but he seems to have disappeared...oh well...C&C most welcome :happy:
Story Synopsis #1 Guard Call:
Set in the year 2014: At his lowest ebb Richard Gaiman,a leading expert and scientist in the field of human genetics, is thrown a lifeline by the U.S. Government who want him to help design and implement a unit of bio-engineered soldiers. The U.S. military, knowing Gaiman's previous history in genetic engineering want to us his skillsin a last ditch attempt to end the war in the Middle East. Three soldiers in the U.S. military volunteer to undergo genetic upgrading while Gaiman manages to go one step further and creates a fourth member of the team in a lab using D.N.A from his ex-wife, and other various female role models in society. This fourth member he takes as his ‘wife’ and calls her Linda, (after he’s long dead former ‘wife’). They are finally joined by a mysterious stranger from Gaiman’s past called ‘Darkwalker’, who has joined the military as a ‘consultant’.
While this unit is a potentially deadly weapon, there are different opinions within the military on how best they should be used. The decision is made to only deploy them on reconnaissance missions and keep their presence top secret, leaving them to be kept in suspended animation. However an entire division of the U.S. Marine Core is wiped out south of the city of Jouf and the decision is made not to risk anymore military personal. The unknown unit is sent in to find out what happened.
The team soon find the division; they’ve been massacred, torn apart by what looks to be large animals. Darkwalker detects a massive psychic presence and becomes ill by it's power. The team soon find the culprits, large insect half human hybrids that descend upon the team. Our heroes defend themselves clumsily, while questioning what they’ve got themselves into. As the issue closes the insect men back of from our heroes as on the last page the leader of the group, a massive centipede man, reveals himself as a threat the team must face in the next issue!!
This a sample of the action sequences:
Sample pg 3 and 4 Action panels
pg18:
Panel 1: Large Panel in forest clearing Lightning and the gang, (including DarkWalker), facing off against the bug men. Darkwalker is on the floor looking ill and struggling. Red Tiger and Wild Thing are firing there M-16's at two bugs there are in view hitting them, bit of blood. Lighting is pointing her arm forward towards them with her mouth open like she's yelling.
Lightning: Everyone, lets go!
Panel 2: One of the bugs attacks Wild thing, (Remember he's not with his scars yet), destroying his gun, he looks shocked.
Solider 9 (Wild Thing): What are these things?!
Panel 3: Red Tiger, (Still In weapon 12 persona, sarcastic without the blades in her back) leaping over a bugs head, acrobatically, (possibly faded drawings of motion of a somersault) now she's horizontal in the air with her M-16 pointing down firing rounds into the top of the creatures head, lots of blood brain everywhere as the bullets find there way through.
Tiger: Does anyone emit DDT from there armpits?
Tiger:....Cos that'd be useful about now....
Panel 4: Crimson standing next to Wild Thing and firing his gun into the beast thats attacking Wild Thing, determined look on his face, Crimson is next to a tree. Wild Thing is trying to hold the thing off, over Crimson's shoulder we can see another insect man with large claws racing towards Crimson. Wild Thing is looking towards the approaching beast and his mouth is open like his desperately screaming, looking strained.
Wild Thing: 'Look Out!!'
Panel: 5 Thinner panel, Crimson spinning round, (motion lines) with a shocked look on his face and the beastie leaping towards him claw out stretched.
Panel 6: Last one to squeeze on the page, thin panel, close up shot of Crimsons eye,(maybe top half of his face) we can see the reflection of the beast coming towards him through the pupil, looks distressed.
Next pg
Panel 1: Crimson ducks just in time, the huge claw embedding itself in the tree, splinters, motion lines round the claw and Crimson ducking down, this is a closeish shot so we can see all of the above and the end of Crimsons M-16 firing up at the monster.
Crimson: urggh!...Who cares what they are?!, All I know is that are guns are having no effect!!
Panel 2: Switch to Lightning and Darkwalker. Walker is still on the ground suffering, Lightning is standing over him protecting him, still clearing in a woodland, a circle of the beasties are around them. Lighting is holding one of them of with her arm, while kicking another in what would be it's face.
Lightning Arc: Hit them with sticks and stones if you have to!...Walkies you gonna stop vomiting and offer some help here?
Panel 3: Close shot of DarkWalker still sweating and straining looking up at Lightning Arc. A Lightning bolt image appears above his head, a bit faded but clear.
Panel 4: Closer shot of Lightning' face, she's smiling, a self knowing smile. A beast is right near her.
Lighting: 'Now why didn't I think of that ?....
Panel 5: Last shot on page is of the beast on Lightning from behind. Her eyes are glowing and her hands are full of lightning bolts, her arms are positioned next to her. Gritting her teeth like she's charging up her powers.
Next pg.
Panel 1 Full page, Lighting has flung her arms out, lightning firing from her fingertips and bouncing of every bug around her, firing them, including the one behind her. This should look spectacular, really go for it. Lightning should look like a lightning god incarnate, Darkwalker is looking at her shocked, the rest of the team are shielding their eyes.