Sequentials for Construct #1 C&C Welcome

[Mike225]

http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m137/jobberstable/Construct1copy.jpg

http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m137/jobberstable/construct2copy.jpg

http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m137/jobberstable/construct3copy.jpg

http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m137/jobberstable/page4copy.jpg

[thall838]

great pages man! can't find anything to complain about. :kewl:

[Mike225]

Ah! Thanks for responding.

There's stuff to complain about, though...

[The Anti-crest]

Its really sad. For the first three panels on the last page, I would have him look up at "god", Down at the body, then up again. I dont really get why he is looking behind him.

they look crisp though man, good job.

[JonHParrish]

Very nice.

[Mike225]

Thanks, guys.

Anti-Crest, I had something similar in mind when planning this page, but it got lost in translation. He should be looking toward the body's head, but that's my fault. I'll redraw the head and tilt it more so that can be clearer.

[udgang99]

Those pages are really, really beautiful !!!
I have nothing to complain about - it just works 100% for me! Great job - really great!

[The Anti-crest]

Thanks, guys.

Anti-Crest, I had something similar in mind when planning this page, but it got lost in translation. He should be looking toward the body's head, but that's my fault. I'll redraw the head and tilt it more so that can be clearer.


ah that sounds good. I think you got a great thing going.

[Mike225]

Thanks, everyone.

Would now be a good time to mention that this should be on sale by Fall?

[Lovecraft13]

I find these pages to be rather elegant.

[Mike225]

Wow! Public acceptance!

Thank you all.

[Mike225]

The first eight pages of the script are posted in the writer's forum, so here's a bump for anyone wishing to look at both.

[Spacious Interior]

I absolutely love black and white contrast. It, to me, is how I choose which artists I like and which are worth continuing to read.

What I see here is very similar to "All Is Full of Love", my favorite music video...BECAUSE OF BLACK AND WHITE CONTRAST. I am completely hypnotized by page three (the last panel).

Do not color this book! I want it the way it is and I want it in my mailbox yesterday. (standing ovation)

[Paul Sanderson]

This certainly looks very interesting, and I don't say that about a great many things. Intriguing, I like very much.

[Mike225]

I absolutely love black and white contrast. It, to me, is how I choose which artists I like and which are worth continuing to read.

What I see here is very similar to "All Is Full of Love", my favorite music video...BECAUSE OF BLACK AND WHITE CONTRAST. I am completely hypnotized by page three (the last panel).

Do not color this book! I want it the way it is and I want it in my mailbox yesterday. (standing ovation)

Your post is overwhelming, man. You're a fine artist, so your comments are an honor.

[Mike225]

This certainly looks very interesting, and I don't say that about a great many things. Intriguing, I like very much.

I can't believe that all these guys I've respected are digging my work.

Thank you all for your positive feedback. I'm sure other people get this way, but I've been in a bit of a funk lately with working and not thinking anything I do is very good. These comments and criticisms are awesome motivational tools.

[JasonM]

It's hard to go into depth on these pages, there are no people and the background is fairly flat. What IS here, is good, well drawn and tells a story. It would rely heavily on a good story because not much happens and without expressions it's hard to care. Otherwise it's all good. Maybe change up some angles some more, but again, that might play more into the dialogue.

Good work!

[Mike225]

Thanks, buddy.

Yeah, you're right, it's a moody first few pages.

[Paul Sanderson]

I can't believe that all these guys I've respected are digging my work.

Thank you all for your positive feedback. I'm sure other people get this way, but I've been in a bit of a funk lately with working and not thinking anything I do is very good. These comments and criticisms are awesome motivational tools.

Yeah, know how you feel, been a pretty tough year for me too in some respects. Glad things are looking better for you though :)

[Mike225]

Yeah, know how you feel, been a pretty tough year for me too in some respects. Glad things are looking better for you though :)

Yep. I'm taking action, though. Tomorrow, my wife will take the modem with her to work. I'm guaranteed to knock another page out, cause I won't be on the boards. :)

[Boy]

Pretty good. Very clear storytelling, dude

[Gilby]

Very nicely done--really liked these pages. Had an almost melancholy Mignola-type vibe to the illustration and the storyline. Looking forward to seeing more.

[Mike225]

Thanks, Gilby.

[cs3ink]

Very stylish, but very vague as well. I really can't tell what is happening. Is the first page supposed to be a close-up of the fembot's face? If so, aren't the lines going the wrong way?

And on the second page, the last panel is just inpenetrable to me. Is he shaking her head? Slamming it into a wall? Are those supposed to be sparks? She seemed fine, and then for some unknown reason, something happens to her.

Then on page four, he's suddenly kneeling again.

Overall I would suggest choreographing the camera angles and the character's movements more.

It's all well designed, graphically speaking, but storytelling wise (IMO) it's just odd and confusing.

Later,
Chip

[Mike225]

Thanks for responding, Chip.