To all my writing brothers

[sixthring]

I am currently writing this alternate action type series that is fiction but written throught the perspective of it being a comic/80's action film. A bit much but I want to get your opinions on the stuff i've written. Remember open your mind and let your creative juices flow.
This is the link for episode 1
[URL=http://www.archive.org/download/Krillon_Kallane_Lunch_Money/Situation01.doc]

link for episode 2
[URL=http://www.ourmedia.org/node/134641]

Just want to get some feedback on these two.
Cheers

[sixthring]

I think I messed up with the links. Try this one instead.
http://www.ourmedia.org/user/41154

The list of all the 'Krillon Kallane' episodes that I have written are there when you scroll down.