City of Warriors

[Jay]

Thanks for that i have noted it. were the sentences too long in general or too long for a comic because it was not orginally supposed to be a comic thats why but i have seen the format and will try again.

[Lewis]

My humble suggestions are to rewrite this into a more "comic friendly" style and be more focused grammatically. Some of your sentences ran on when you should have ended them which made reading it difficult.