5 Page Gun-Runners

[ariel]

These 5 pages are from a project Im working on called Gun-Runners
Writen by Jono Way and Edited by Adrian Todd [T-Mac].

What are the comic guys thoughts?

http://tn3-1.deviantart.com/fs10/300W/i/2006/120/7/b/gunruners1_by_Ariel_ZB.jpg

http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs10/300W/i/2006/132/6/a/gunrunners2_by_Ariel_ZB.jpg

http://tn3-1.deviantart.com/fs10/300W/i/2006/136/d/4/gunnruners3_by_Ariel_ZB.jpg

http://tn3-1.deviantart.com/fs10/300W/i/2006/138/0/9/gunrunners4_by_Ariel_ZB.jpg

http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs9/300W/i/2006/147/3/c/gun_runners5_by_Ariel_ZB.jpg

[thecarrierone]

looks cool but really cant see much of the detail

[sevans]

Your artwork is very stylised - it actually reminds me of Vampire Hunter D.

I'm completely undecided if I like it or hate it!

Could you post a couple of the pages larger?

[NMEZero]

This is cool looking stuff. Like others say it's kinda small and very detailed so kinda hard to critique.
From what I can see though, i think overall your compositions are working out rather well. As is your rendering style which I think is pretty sweet. It has just enough manga/anime and american comic style influence for me to like it. i do notice some things that are wierd and how much of this to chalk up to the style I'm not sure. Sometimes your figures arms take on wierd positions that seem somewhat unnatural like in the last panel on the first page BG figure in front. And the guy in front on the last panel of the last page, also that girl on the right, her forearm is as big as her thigh almost. I don't think some of this could just be chalked up to style but you could surely argue the point.
I'm also seeing inconsistencies in the look of the characters faces that at first made me question whether they were actually the same or not. It's mostly the guy that's in the BG on page 1, last panel. Here he has dark hair, the next time we see him he is standing in the same place but has light hair and seems older somehow and then he looks like a different person in pretty much every panel of the third. Your main character does stay pretty consistent though, so that's good. But on the last panel of the second page his hands seem to have turned into shapely blobs. Maybe I'm not seeing all the detail.
I like your guns and you seem to have done a pretty decent job on the cars and stuff except maybe the limo third panel of the last page seems a little wonky perspective wise.
I think your figures ahve some nice movement going on in them, particularly the main character in pg 1 panels 2 & 3, pg 2 panels 3 & 4, pg 3 panel 3 and pg 4 panel 4, though i do feel on the last that the other figure with him seems not to be done as well. I tink this is still my favorite panel here though, maybe the third panel of the first page.
It would be cool to see these a bit larger, you've got them posted 300px wide and they'll let you post them at least 500px heer at DW without any flak I've posted stuff wider and never got any crap so, next time you might want to do that. :har:
Hope these are the kind of comments you were looking for.

[ariel]

This is cool looking stuff. Like others say it's kinda small and very detailed so kinda hard to critique.
From what I can see though, i think overall your compositions are working out rather well. As is your rendering style which I think is pretty sweet. It has just enough manga/anime and american comic style influence for me to like it. i do notice some things that are wierd and how much of this to chalk up to the style I'm not sure. Sometimes your figures arms take on wierd positions that seem somewhat unnatural like in the last panel on the first page BG figure in front. And the guy in front on the last panel of the last page, also that girl on the right, her forearm is as big as her thigh almost. I don't think some of this could just be chalked up to style but you could surely argue the point.
I'm also seeing inconsistencies in the look of the characters faces that at first made me question whether they were actually the same or not. It's mostly the guy that's in the BG on page 1, last panel. Here he has dark hair, the next time we see him he is standing in the same place but has light hair and seems older somehow and then he looks like a different person in pretty much every panel of the third. Your main character does stay pretty consistent though, so that's good. But on the last panel of the second page his hands seem to have turned into shapely blobs. Maybe I'm not seeing all the detail.
I like your guns and you seem to have done a pretty decent job on the cars and stuff except maybe the limo third panel of the last page seems a little wonky perspective wise.
I think your figures ahve some nice movement going on in them, particularly the main character in pg 1 panels 2 & 3, pg 2 panels 3 & 4, pg 3 panel 3 and pg 4 panel 4, though i do feel on the last that the other figure with him seems not to be done as well. I tink this is still my favorite panel here though, maybe the third panel of the first page.
It would be cool to see these a bit larger, you've got them posted 300px wide and they'll let you post them at least 500px heer at DW without any flak I've posted stuff wider and never got any crap so, next time you might want to do that. :har:
Hope these are the kind of comments you were looking for.

yes. Thanks I like detailed crits and I like to know what people like too. I should be more earfull next time on arms and making old man faes look the same. I couldnt decied how I wanted him to look that was the main problem.

[ariel]

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[ariel]

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[ariel]

Put it up bigger