ryanscottottney
05-22-2006, 04:57 PM
Setting: London, 1591
A masked thief breaks into a London hotel under the cover of night. He’s quietly watching one French guard, mapping his movements as if he’s been watching him for weeks – because he has. The guard is wearing a set of oddly-shaped glasses, and has a thick beard with a streak of grey in the middle (very distinct looking). The thief is internally narrating the guard’s movements … right on schedule! This is the ONLY dialogue in the entire scene. He throws something down the hallway in the opposite direction to send the guard running to check it out.
Only seconds to act, the thief quickly drops an unmarked liquid into the guard’s drink. The guard comes back, looks around suspiciously, sips his drink, and passes out cold.
The thief moves in to hide the unconscious body of the guard. As he moves the body into the shadows, he removes his mask, and he looks just like the guard! The “guard” reports down the hall to relieve the East Wing Guard for the night. Now alone, the “guard” enters the room to find the guard captain fast asleep. He quietly moves across the room toward the cabinet, and picks the lock to reveal the papers and treasures hidden inside. Easily worth a fortune! The captain suddenly wakes up!
The “guard” quickly leaps up into the fancy molding of the corner, holding himself upside-down just above the captain’s bed. The captain looks around and finds nothing. He moves his light up into corners of the room where the “guard” was, but it’s empty.
Just below, the window is open as the curtains blow in the wind. He looks down and finds a set of glasses, and a false beard lying on the floor, and the door to his cabinet is ajar. Guards scramble outside, as the shadowy thief watches from a hilltop above the palace.
Backstory:
The papers were retrieved by a convoy sent by the French King Henry IV, to negotiate a trade route with (unknown country), passing through British controlled area of (unknown location). The British are very suspicious of the French, and still claim ownership of their throne – a claim which the French vehemently deny.
This is all I want to show right now (not much, I know), because it's a pretty nutty idea for a GN and I don't want to give it away before I've fleshed it out more in-depth. It's still very much a work in progress, but I thought I'd throw this up there just for laughs.
But I'm really enjoying working on this story, and I have high hopes for it. I may not do anything with it though. I'm just taking it one small step at a time and hoping for the best.
If it makes it to print, though, it's sure to be unlike anything you've ever read.
:)
A masked thief breaks into a London hotel under the cover of night. He’s quietly watching one French guard, mapping his movements as if he’s been watching him for weeks – because he has. The guard is wearing a set of oddly-shaped glasses, and has a thick beard with a streak of grey in the middle (very distinct looking). The thief is internally narrating the guard’s movements … right on schedule! This is the ONLY dialogue in the entire scene. He throws something down the hallway in the opposite direction to send the guard running to check it out.
Only seconds to act, the thief quickly drops an unmarked liquid into the guard’s drink. The guard comes back, looks around suspiciously, sips his drink, and passes out cold.
The thief moves in to hide the unconscious body of the guard. As he moves the body into the shadows, he removes his mask, and he looks just like the guard! The “guard” reports down the hall to relieve the East Wing Guard for the night. Now alone, the “guard” enters the room to find the guard captain fast asleep. He quietly moves across the room toward the cabinet, and picks the lock to reveal the papers and treasures hidden inside. Easily worth a fortune! The captain suddenly wakes up!
The “guard” quickly leaps up into the fancy molding of the corner, holding himself upside-down just above the captain’s bed. The captain looks around and finds nothing. He moves his light up into corners of the room where the “guard” was, but it’s empty.
Just below, the window is open as the curtains blow in the wind. He looks down and finds a set of glasses, and a false beard lying on the floor, and the door to his cabinet is ajar. Guards scramble outside, as the shadowy thief watches from a hilltop above the palace.
Backstory:
The papers were retrieved by a convoy sent by the French King Henry IV, to negotiate a trade route with (unknown country), passing through British controlled area of (unknown location). The British are very suspicious of the French, and still claim ownership of their throne – a claim which the French vehemently deny.
This is all I want to show right now (not much, I know), because it's a pretty nutty idea for a GN and I don't want to give it away before I've fleshed it out more in-depth. It's still very much a work in progress, but I thought I'd throw this up there just for laughs.
But I'm really enjoying working on this story, and I have high hopes for it. I may not do anything with it though. I'm just taking it one small step at a time and hoping for the best.
If it makes it to print, though, it's sure to be unlike anything you've ever read.
:)