Cobra Missile Command HQ

[Kelly Ishikawa]

can you give me some tips to improve? Thanks for looking, hope you liked it


http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y287/KellyIshikawa/cobra.jpg

[jared]

it's hard to say from only three panels. i can't quite tell what's going on, but i think it might help your readability to use some pov's. you can always establish alot about who is talking to who or what with over the shoulder perspectives. it would probably also help to use more pronounced, maybe even exagerated gestures/body language since the characters are masked making it difficult to show much facial expresion. i hope that is helpful to you. these are some of the things i try to keep in mind when laying out a story sequence. i really like your inking by the way. it kind of reminds me of charles burns.