bezelleo
05-02-2006, 12:06 PM
I posted this over at the Ten Ton Studios forum. Just thought I'd share it with my homies on DW. :cool:
A SPIDER-MAN WALKS INTO A BAR!
PAGE ONE (six panels)
Panel 1. An empty shot glass sits at the bar with a hand hanging onto it. The Patron, named later, is supplying the captions.
1 CAPTION: Man... what did I do?
2 VOICE (O.S.): Hey buddy?
Panel 2. Patron POV. The BARTENDER holds a bottle of whiskey in one hand and points at his shot glass with the other. He has a curious face.
3 BARTENDER: You gonna stare at that glass all night, or are you gonna have another?
4 CAPTION: This guy must not like his job either.
Panel 3. PETER PARKER sits at the bar with his left hand in his hair. He’s frustrated, and a little buzzed, but not drunk. The Bartender pours another. A few other patrons make up the background playing a game of pool and one guy throwing darts.
5 PETER: Sorry. Yeah, one more.
Panel 4. Peter holds the shot glass up, and cheers the Bartender, whom has turned his back on Peter to dry some beer glasses.
6 PETER: Down the hatch.
7 BARTENDER: (quietly) Pansy.
Panel 5. Peter downs the shot.
Panel 6. Peter makes a funny face while absorbing the nasty burn of the whiskey.
8 PETER: Mmmm! Good!
9 CAPTION: Nasty.
PAGE TWO (six panels)
Panel 1. A cell phone on Peter’s belt. Out of frame, Peter is twisting to check it.
1 CAPTION: He’s gonna keep calling until I answer it. Needy jerk.
Panel 2. WOMAN OTS. Peter stares at the bar with his hand back in his hair. A woman looks on, two seats down in the foreground, left.
2 WOMAN: You gonna answer that?
Panel 3. Same as Panel 2. Peter looks over at her.
3 PETER: It’s Saturday. It’s after six. And it’s the boss. Would you?
Panel 4. Full shot of the woman. She’s very attractive, with long black hair, and nice eyes. Probably just got off work herself from the attorney’s office.
4 WOMAN: Depends on how attractive he is.
Panel 5. Peter up close. He smiles.
5 PETER: That’s good. Real good.
6 CAPTION: Especially since my boss is Tony Stark, the richest guy in the country, and sleeps with at least two women a night.
Panel 6. A full view of the bar. Peter has his hands up as the Bartender stares him down again, holding the bottle of whiskey. (I don’t think the bartender wants him in there, if you ask me.) The Woman takes a hit of her cigarette.
7 PETER: (to the Bartender) What???
PAGE THREE (seven panels)
Panel 1. The Woman has moved next to Peter now. She places her hand on his, and takes on the Bartender’s pushiness. Peter has his head down.
1 WOMAN: Listen Ted. Get my friend here a cola, put it on my tab, and I’ll take care of the rest. Sound good?
2 TED: Thanks, Susie.
Panel 2. Susie places her two fingers on Peter’s chin to lift it up. Her eyes glare as he turns to meet them with his own.
3 SUSIE: Been a rough day?
4 PETER: Could say that.
5 SUSIE: This isn’t the answer to your problem, Peter.
Panel 3. Peter swings his head as far up as he can. Kinda like a drunken “WHAT?” look, but it looks more humorous than dramatic.
6 PETER: What? How did you know...
7 SUSIE: Don’t worry. I’m a friend.
Panel 4. Susie smiles as she leans with her elbow on the bar.
8 SUSIE: I called you a cab. It’s waiting outside, and you’re gonna take it, go home and sleep it off. Don’t stop for anything, and don’t answer the phone. Just sleep.
Panel 5. Peter has lifted his ass off the chair and looks to Susie.
9 PETER: Hey, Susie, it’s ah... it’s good to know there’s still good people out there.
10 SUSIE: No problem. Tomorrow’s a new day.
Panel 6. Peter waves back as he is almost out the front exit door.
11 TED (O.S.): I’ve been trying to get that guy outta here all night. How’d you do it?
Panel 7. Susie up close. She grins.
12 SUSIE: We have the same boss, and I know how it is. Believe me, I know how it is.
the end... hopefully soon...
A SPIDER-MAN WALKS INTO A BAR!
PAGE ONE (six panels)
Panel 1. An empty shot glass sits at the bar with a hand hanging onto it. The Patron, named later, is supplying the captions.
1 CAPTION: Man... what did I do?
2 VOICE (O.S.): Hey buddy?
Panel 2. Patron POV. The BARTENDER holds a bottle of whiskey in one hand and points at his shot glass with the other. He has a curious face.
3 BARTENDER: You gonna stare at that glass all night, or are you gonna have another?
4 CAPTION: This guy must not like his job either.
Panel 3. PETER PARKER sits at the bar with his left hand in his hair. He’s frustrated, and a little buzzed, but not drunk. The Bartender pours another. A few other patrons make up the background playing a game of pool and one guy throwing darts.
5 PETER: Sorry. Yeah, one more.
Panel 4. Peter holds the shot glass up, and cheers the Bartender, whom has turned his back on Peter to dry some beer glasses.
6 PETER: Down the hatch.
7 BARTENDER: (quietly) Pansy.
Panel 5. Peter downs the shot.
Panel 6. Peter makes a funny face while absorbing the nasty burn of the whiskey.
8 PETER: Mmmm! Good!
9 CAPTION: Nasty.
PAGE TWO (six panels)
Panel 1. A cell phone on Peter’s belt. Out of frame, Peter is twisting to check it.
1 CAPTION: He’s gonna keep calling until I answer it. Needy jerk.
Panel 2. WOMAN OTS. Peter stares at the bar with his hand back in his hair. A woman looks on, two seats down in the foreground, left.
2 WOMAN: You gonna answer that?
Panel 3. Same as Panel 2. Peter looks over at her.
3 PETER: It’s Saturday. It’s after six. And it’s the boss. Would you?
Panel 4. Full shot of the woman. She’s very attractive, with long black hair, and nice eyes. Probably just got off work herself from the attorney’s office.
4 WOMAN: Depends on how attractive he is.
Panel 5. Peter up close. He smiles.
5 PETER: That’s good. Real good.
6 CAPTION: Especially since my boss is Tony Stark, the richest guy in the country, and sleeps with at least two women a night.
Panel 6. A full view of the bar. Peter has his hands up as the Bartender stares him down again, holding the bottle of whiskey. (I don’t think the bartender wants him in there, if you ask me.) The Woman takes a hit of her cigarette.
7 PETER: (to the Bartender) What???
PAGE THREE (seven panels)
Panel 1. The Woman has moved next to Peter now. She places her hand on his, and takes on the Bartender’s pushiness. Peter has his head down.
1 WOMAN: Listen Ted. Get my friend here a cola, put it on my tab, and I’ll take care of the rest. Sound good?
2 TED: Thanks, Susie.
Panel 2. Susie places her two fingers on Peter’s chin to lift it up. Her eyes glare as he turns to meet them with his own.
3 SUSIE: Been a rough day?
4 PETER: Could say that.
5 SUSIE: This isn’t the answer to your problem, Peter.
Panel 3. Peter swings his head as far up as he can. Kinda like a drunken “WHAT?” look, but it looks more humorous than dramatic.
6 PETER: What? How did you know...
7 SUSIE: Don’t worry. I’m a friend.
Panel 4. Susie smiles as she leans with her elbow on the bar.
8 SUSIE: I called you a cab. It’s waiting outside, and you’re gonna take it, go home and sleep it off. Don’t stop for anything, and don’t answer the phone. Just sleep.
Panel 5. Peter has lifted his ass off the chair and looks to Susie.
9 PETER: Hey, Susie, it’s ah... it’s good to know there’s still good people out there.
10 SUSIE: No problem. Tomorrow’s a new day.
Panel 6. Peter waves back as he is almost out the front exit door.
11 TED (O.S.): I’ve been trying to get that guy outta here all night. How’d you do it?
Panel 7. Susie up close. She grins.
12 SUSIE: We have the same boss, and I know how it is. Believe me, I know how it is.
the end... hopefully soon...