Hot Bosom Buddies!

[bezelleo]

At least, that's what Harvey likes to call em! They're cuties. :happy:
Anyhoo, here is a short horror story being readied for horror anthology submission, so please check out these pages and let us know what you like about it, and what you don't.

Artist: Harvey Bunda
Writer: Mike Fish
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We've got our trashbags ready, so tomatoes and watermelons are fine. Just dont throw any hammers or typewriters please. I bruise easily, and Harvey will cry. And then no more bosom bunnies. :cry:

Some things we're interested in:
- Would you like to see colors or does black and white fit it well?
- Lettering placement okay?
- Does it need inks? Ask Harvey about that one!
- Just how hot these girls are? Numbers would help.

Thanks for checking us out
-Mike

[soulspline]

whoaaaa whos harvey?.........hey my first name is harvey...hey thats me!!!!!!!!

enjoy the viewing of the bosom bunnies !!!!!! ;) :banana:

[GRIMSCRIBE]

Mike, I like these two pages a lot. They are very clean and the lettering is
well placed. Ha no problems reading through, appreciating both the art the
narrative. And yes, the girls are hot...in a very refreshing, believable way.
Keep em coming,
Ron

[stahss]

Aww, and here by the thread title I was hoping for some Tom Hanks/Peter Scholari fanfic! :(

:laugh:

OK. So far, so good, I think. The pencils are really solid (as in no glaring anatomical/perspective errors), but this really needs some inks. There's alot of dead line weights that don't look intentional (like a Mignola or Risso), but rather they look uninked to me. If you're not gonna ink it, I think it needs some color or a good greyscaler.

The transition from panel 2 to panel 3 on page 1 was a little awkward. Something about the dialogue didn't flow- I went back and forth a few times, thinking I was reading the panels in the wrong order. Probably a minor adjustment.

Finally, yes, the girls are lovely without being too over-the-top cheescakey. I don't know if that was your intent, but I think it's just right. I do, however, think that shadow on her cheek in the last panel (close up) on page 1 is too heavy...I'd crosshatch it instead of making a solid black.

Awesome! I wanna see what happens at the movie! "Army of the Evil Deadites"-- :thumbs:

[bezelleo]

Thanks Grimscribe! We actually might be looking for a publisher on this since the original one seems to be missing now, so if you know of anyone, pass it on!

Thanks Stahss! I know! We totally need a comic book about the original "Bosom Buddies". Then we can be a back up story with our Bosom Bunnies. ;) Yeah, Harvey will get to you on the inks. Something about the awesome paper I got him. :laugh: I actually thought it was inked! Man, I'm slow. :slap:
As for the lettering, I agree. Those balloons in panel 3 were tricky. I couldn't find any other places that wouldn't sacrifice the art and Lacy's wonderful hair. Would it help if I put Susan's last blurb on the computer, right above the third panel's initial opener, "Well then go out with him already?" And yes, Army of Evil Deadites. How can you not love that title? ;)

[Fahnon]

Hey this is some good work. You obviously have a strong handle on female faces.

The only nitpicky thing I have to say is I dont like the shadow on the girls face in the last panel of page 1. I think it would have looked better clean like the rest of your work.

Good job.

[bezelleo]

Added page 3 for more feedback and crits. :)

[soulspline]

wow what a nice thread..hmmm i think im lost here.......

[bezelleo]

Lost? Why you lost, Harvey? You da man. :cool:
Anyhoo, we're hot! 300 views! Yay! Our bosom bunnies are pop-u-lar.
:banana: :carrot:

[heartofglitter]

I love the name of the movie! Army of Darkness fan are we?? :banana:

[bezelleo]

just a little... :p

[soulspline]

who are these harvey anf mike fish guy anyway...hmmm it seems they are good....;) :banana: