View Full Version : [Blurb] Is this dumb....?

paul brian deberry
10-20-2017, 08:29 AM
Ward The Bastard feed to The Living Prison for being a villainous scum, where he was to slowly dissolve for all eternity. His punishers, desperate for a savior. Turn to The Bastard to save a child...

10-20-2017, 11:16 AM
What makes this villainous scum good savior material? Is the child in the prison? Is Ward the Bastard the only one that knows how to get to the child?

10-22-2017, 08:32 AM
It's not dumb but McKinley's right, it needs to be detailed out a bit more. What was his crime that made him a villainous scum, who were his punishers, what was the crisis they were facing that needed a savior, and why is the child so important? Also if they were powerful enough to capture the Bastard and send him to prison, why do they need his help to save the child?

paul brian deberry
10-30-2017, 05:21 PM
Thank you. I'm working out that stuff and hope it'll be something (maybe this years Nanowrimo)