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kevinharte36
10-17-2017, 05:21 PM
Working on these at the moment,just the line art at the moment. Going back to just drawing on paper rather than digital.

Page 10 and 11.

http://i67.tinypic.com/opokzn.png

Page 13

http://i67.tinypic.com/2zj9i88.png

kevinharte36
10-17-2017, 05:25 PM
Smaller size

https://preview.ibb.co/b6V76R/CCI17102017_0001.jpg
https://preview.ibb.co/cLG3fm/13.png

MattTriano
10-17-2017, 06:25 PM
Darker please, can't read

kevinharte36
10-17-2017, 06:59 PM
Darker please, can't read

Done, thanks.

kevinharte36
10-31-2017, 06:02 PM
Roughs tightened up on lcd tablet, to be rendered and transferred back to paper...

https://preview.ibb.co/mEVWFw/10_and_11_kevin_2.png

sevans
11-01-2017, 02:17 AM
The poses in the large panel are lot better. More movement and depth.

kevinharte36
11-01-2017, 10:28 AM
Thanks.

kevinharte36
11-01-2017, 06:10 PM
Studying heads and hands at the moment...

Page 15.

https://preview.ibb.co/cKLx7b/15_scan.png

page 16.
https://preview.ibb.co/jVtH7b/16_scan_lines.png

sevans
11-02-2017, 02:00 AM
The punch panel is quite cliche, but very nicely done.

12013
11-03-2017, 03:58 PM
so I like the redraw of the guy getting kicked in the bigger panel, but I cant shake the feeling that ive seen that pose in a comic before. like you maybe swiped a pose. which isn't exactly a horrible thing unless its copied line for line. I don't know. I could be wrong, but it looks REALLY familiar.

as far as the rest, there are thing that look good and things that look bad. to a point where id say some stuff looks like you referenced it, and then on the same page drew something from your head and the difference is glaring.

for example, the page with the knife thrower and the girl. first in panel 1, everything is faked. google a circus and see a real layout and add believable details and background elements and it will punch it up SO much more. but it looks totally faked.
also in panel 3, the girl looks horrible. anatomy is all over the place(boobs crooked, arms and wrists looking skewed and just wrong) and her face looks super faked cartoony with the eyes and mouth.
what makes it worse is in panel 4, that guy sitting close to us, the guy in profile looks fantastic by comparison. id say you obviously referenced that guy and others in that panel. and it shows. it looks good. it looks real and believable. but contrasted next to the girl in the previous panel, it shows where your drawing ability is lacking when it comes to doing it from your head vs using reference and/or just growing your drawing skills.

there are elements like that all over these pages. where things look referenced at least in some part and others where you are relying on your own skills, which aren't developed very far yet.

so... not trying to be a dick. just being straight about what I see. these do look fun and I absolutely say keep drawing and posting.
thanks for sharing

rob

kevinharte36
11-03-2017, 05:24 PM
Thanks for the tips, I'll take them into consideration. What about the last two pages, if you don't mind?

12013
11-04-2017, 09:52 PM
Thanks for the tips, I'll take them into consideration. What about the last two pages, if you don't mind?

its kind hard to judge them exactly seeing that they are in such a rough work-in-progress state. but based on what is there now....

panel 1, the drawing of nightwing is pretty bad. head looks to big, arms to small and muscle anatomy barley even approaching anything resembling comic book figure work. they guys in the suits are looking a bit better but overall, it looks rough. BUT, WIP, I know.

kinda hard to follow exactly whats going on. someone is throwing him in panel 2? I guess..? the suit guys?
hes ninja kicking an armored dude that wasn't in the page before, BUT, I don't know what the whole story is here, and I know they were in previous pages.
the spacing between guy kicking and guy getting kicked is way to far apart.

suddenly new guy shows up with sword, and nightwing has a sword suddenly to? again, maybe finished pencils will address all this.

next page. first 3 panels are a sword fight. I get that but it reads kinda rough. could be reworked for clarity.
the big panel of punching looks to me like it was referenced from elsewhere as it shows better anatomical knowledge that in most other places. so it looks really good where other images look really bad by comparison.
the remaining sword fight (by the way, where did nightwings sword go anyway...? he had it. then he punches and doesn't have it, then its there again.) but the rest of the fight again, its kinda unclear. could be reworked as well for clarity.

so... finish them up and show us the final versions. id love to see them

rob

kevinharte36
11-05-2017, 01:14 PM
Thanks for the feedback. It's weird, when I did those there was something that slightly popped at me as being wrong, but without realizing I ignored it. I guess, sometimes it's best to go to something else then go back to it..

kevinharte36
11-06-2017, 05:28 PM
Learning about comic shading, going to re-do some of the people. They seemed to pop out more as mistakes when I went into render..
https://preview.ibb.co/jhCg5w/1.png

unshaded
https://preview.ibb.co/ekkOJG/1_un_shaded.png