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pablodbonis
06-15-2017, 07:48 PM
Adaptation of the tale "The Cask of Amontillado", Edgar Allan Poe

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MattTriano
06-16-2017, 03:07 AM
These are great! Good shots, lighting, character design. A few wonky heads and expressions (2.3, 3.5) and some of your rendering is under-explored in regard to texture --either pulling back or doing more might help differentiate between the material of their clothes vs stone. I think your pacing is great, one small issue: 5.3 is such a big panel for that blackout moment, takes a lot of real estate.

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Scribbly
06-17-2017, 01:29 PM
Muy bueno Pablo. Great job.
I agree about panel 3 page 5 and also panel 7 page 6. I don't know how text work for these panels, but due the importance in size you gave them these panels should have something else on it. As some sort of SFX indicating and enforcing the effect of the punch in one and the last brick in the wall in the other. As they are, these two are identical black panels that are deflating the action.
Plus, your storytelling is very good. Your pencils are excellent.
The inking is almost good. The blacks are in the right place. You got it.
Although, your inking lines could have improvement and commitment.
Work in your inking lines and your work will be outstanding.
Best.

TimR
06-22-2017, 01:26 PM
I second all of that.. Very attractive pages. I'm a big fan of that whole school of Mignola type chiaroscuro or whatever it would be called.

Agree with Scribs though that they are just under what they seem they could be... The inks almost feel a bit like traced photos in places, like they are lacking that flair or commitment or something to really make them take off into the stratosphere. Perhaps need to loosen up slightly.