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Neil Allen
06-01-2017, 10:00 PM
Hello,

I just recently launched a comic book project called Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian.

https://www.greenlantern.co/news/zatswan-news-01.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Sales pitch:

"Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian is a science fantasy adventure featuring fantastic settings, larger than life threats, affecting characters, and cosmic romance. While living an ordinary life in Southern California, A.C. Cooperís world is turned upside down when he is offered a tesseract; a strange object from the fourth dimension that grants amazing powers. A.C. and a young woman he just met, Marlene Ja lee, are inducted into an organization of cosmic peace keepers called the Zatswan. Utilizing the power of tesseracts, these guardians defend all known realities from the greatest dangers imaginable. A.C.ís loyalty and morality are challenged when his new duty as a Zatswan pits him against a mysterious young lady who is literally the girl of his dreams, with all existence hanging in the balance."

Promo video (with music by me) :

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Here are some pages from the actual comic:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-00.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-01.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-02.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-03.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-04.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-05.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-06.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-07.jpg

All comments, critiques (if any), or whatever else welcome and appreciated.
Thanks a lot for checking it out!

Neil Allen
06-05-2017, 06:33 AM
The story continues:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-08.jpg

Again, more at http://zatswan.com/

Here is some other art I have for the project. The following three images are from my characters page (http://zatswan.com/characters/). There is more information on these characters over there.

A.C. Cooper

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/ac-cooper-char-00.jpg

Allecka Xona
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/allecka-char-00.jpg

Marlene Ja Lee
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/marlene-char-00.jpg

This is a fuller image of my banner:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/trio-00.jpg

And a pin-up featuring a full body shot of the main character:
https://pbs.twimg.com/media/C7tzuYiVsAA1cvM.jpg

Neil Allen
06-07-2017, 09:25 AM
Continued...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-09.jpg

More at: http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
06-11-2017, 04:25 PM
Latest posted page:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-10.jpg

More at:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
06-14-2017, 01:38 PM
Need more ZATSWAN in your life? Well, guess what? I'm your hook up! Latest posted page:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-11-1.jpg

Don't forget to visit http://zatswan.com/ for more Zatswan content! This is just the beginning.

Neil Allen
06-19-2017, 09:22 AM
More Zatswan!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-12.jpg

As usual, more at my website: http://zatswan.com/

sevans
06-19-2017, 11:30 PM
The drawing and proportions aren't perfect, BUT the area that really bugs me.... the lettering.

Everything is done by hand, lines, colours etc...but the precise computer lettering and balloons doesn't fit well. Very Jarring.

Neil Allen
06-21-2017, 04:01 PM
Next page up!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-13.jpg

More at my website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
06-26-2017, 11:04 AM
On and on it goes:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-14.jpg

Website with more content about the project:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
06-28-2017, 02:58 PM
More Zatswan:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-15.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-04-2017, 03:29 PM
Finally, A.C. Cooper becomes a superhero. Next page:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-16.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-05-2017, 05:56 PM
Another update:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-17.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-09-2017, 08:49 AM
More adventure!
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-18.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-12-2017, 10:46 AM
Next page:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-19.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-16-2017, 10:42 AM
Next page:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-20.jpg

End Chapter 1.

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Charles
07-18-2017, 06:44 AM
Your work is awash in color to the point of its own detriment. As I scroll down the page and just browse the imagery, what I find is that the range of color in play grabs my eye, only to continually turn me off. Any particular instance of color usage, even where it seems to be a visual delight in its own right, is in constant visual competition with a whole host of other contenders. The end result is a stunted, muted effect.

Rather than assail the eye with color for particular panels or particular moments, you've gone color wild every step of the way. It's not something that I would buy, and it's not something that facilitates making it easier to persuade the reader to actually invest the time to read what is on display. That's how I feel, anyway.

Not content with beating the eyeball with color splashes non-stop in the panels, you continue the visual assault down in the gutters, also. Granted, white space doesn't have to be the color white, and it is to the work's good credit that you at least made use of the color white in your speech balloons. Otherwise, you don't seem to have much use for the color white. Such a pity, for it indicates that you don't value that color nearly so much as other colors in the color spectrum.

This, in turn, is obliterating contrast on your pages.

Part of what is visually appealing about your work is your manipulation of color. You value color. You love it! And this is nothing to be ashamed of, particularly in light of the fact that you're aiming for something "different." At what point, though, does one reach am artistically viable stopping point?

Imagine the human eye as a runner, and anytime that it sees color, it has to run. Your chosen approach gives the eye little room to rest. Your color taken to excess wears the eye out. The eye tires from color fatigue. This matters for the very simple reason that it negatively impacts the ability of the viewer to more fully appreciate what it is that you are striving so very hard to achieve.

It reminds me of The Rime of the Ancient Mariner, particular the point where the poem says, "Water, water, every where, Nor any drop to drink." With your work on display, here, I would paraphrase that poem by saying, "Color, color, everywhere, nor any drop to drink (as in, visually drink). Your forte is color, but at the risk of artistic blasphemy, I feel that you visually poison your own work because you treat color as a mere plaything to do with as you will.

Or to put it another way, your greatest artistic gift is simultaneously your worst artistic curse. Some of your coloring is really genuinely lovely, whereas other of it simply leaves me smacking myself in the head and asking, "Why?"

I get that each panel is a visual scene, and that you want to populate it with color, much as the real world around us is populated by many different colors, no matter where we tend to find ourselves. What I don't get is why you utilize non-scene elements (such as narration boxes and gutters) to add color insult (color for the sake of color) to color injury (the non-stop visual assault by color run amok across every panel on every page).

By taking the artistic route that you have taken, what happens is that your visual apex moments yield a reduced level of visual color. So, your visual "whoa moments" take on a quality of visual "ho hum." How very quaint, more color. How very.....typical.

Or, in a literary sense, if you prefer, you are undermining the visual story telling, by cutting off at the knees what should rightly be the most visually impactful moments of your story.

Just as I begin to love what I am seeing, I immediately begin to hate it.

What you are trying to pull off successfully with this chosen approach of a full embrace of color in your handiwork is, indeed, commendable, but I question whether you have the necessary mastery of supporting elements to enable you to actually pull it off. Take human anatomy, for one. Take human expressions, for another.

You are very gifted at teasing the human eye with color. You are substantially less skilled, however, in complex manipulation of color. Your characters, for instance, tend to blend in with their backgrounds, if concentrate on the coloring conventions utilized for them and the backgrounds against which they compete for visual attention. Thus, the real star of your story is color, itself, and not the characters - and as I try to digest your work, I find that to be particularly problematic.

And to make matters even worse, where your narrative boxes are concerned, it simply wasn't sufficient for you to color them, also. No, you also had to poke the eye with the sharp visual stick of a transition effect from color to white. Never miss an opportunity to visually distract from what's going on in the panels, eh? How very non-clever of you!

That said, your work has a certain visual lure to it. Like bait, it attracts the eye's attention. Some of your panels have a captivating quality to them. These are indications of artistic greatness bubbling beneath the surface.

Which makes it all the more difficult for me to grasp why in God's name do you squander it? How can a person be so gifted in the art of color, yet simultaneously so careless with the same? You're pushing the visual envelope with color, but you're pushing it in a sloppy manner. And to make matters worse, other areas of your artistic skills are so far behind your pending mastery with color manipulation that it is acting as an anchor around the neck of your colorful undertakings.

Improve your human anatomy skills, your facial expressions skills, and your line weight skills. Your characters, colorful though they may be, have a tendency to be visually stiff. So, improve your skills as they relate to capturing and depicting poses, also. Additionally, more focus on light and shadow could help you to improve the visual transitions between your many different applications of color within a given panel.

Your work is different - and that is a plus. It's part of what makes your work unique and stand out more from other artists' work on display, here.

Oh, and one other thing - work on your speech balloons. They are plain Jane simplistic visual blobs that detract from your work.

Neil Allen
07-20-2017, 09:06 AM
Continuing. Cover for Chapter 2:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/02-00.jpg

Website!
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
07-20-2017, 12:01 PM
Just as I begin to love what I am seeing, I immediately begin to hate it.

For these love and hate statements you make to be at all helpful to me, or even clear, you will need to point out a specific example of what you love and a specific example of what you hate. Otherwise ... it's an interesting sentiment that I can't do anything at all with. Maybe you're content to leave it at that, which is fine, and if you are, then ... okay. I can't say anything about that, other than it's interesting.

And to make matters even worse, where your narrative boxes are concerned, it simply wasn't sufficient for you to color them, also. No, you also had to poke the eye with the sharp visual stick of a transition effect from color to white. Never miss an opportunity to visually distract from what's going on in the panels, eh? How very non-clever of you!

Well, since you said something about this, I will explain it. The gradient, or transition effect as you call it, signals that the main character is thinking to himself. A fully colored box is used by another character in the story when it speaks. If I did what you're suggesting, I may confuse the reader. See page this page for an example.

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-03.jpg

A white box is used for a character to speak while another scene is playing out. See how this page acts with the first panel in the following page. This is a common comic book convention, so it's nothing I invented:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-10.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-11-1.jpg

In short, the gradient is not there just to be there, because I do things willy-nilly as you're implying. It's serving a practical function.

That said, your work has a certain visual lure to it. Like bait, it attracts the eye's attention. Some of your panels have a captivating quality to them. These are indications of artistic greatness bubbling beneath the surface.

Thank you.

Which makes it all the more difficult for me to grasp why in God's name do you squander it? How can a person be so gifted in the art of color, yet simultaneously so careless with the same? You're pushing the visual envelope with color, but you're pushing it in a sloppy manner. And to make matters worse, other areas of your artistic skills are so far behind your pending mastery with color manipulation that it is acting as an anchor around the neck of your colorful undertakings.

I personally do not feel that my coloring is leaps and bounds above the other aspects of my art. Though, I will say it is the aspect of my whole process that tends to be the most time consuming for me, sometimes even by a good margin.

Improve your human anatomy skills, your facial expressions skills, and your line weight skills.

Concerning my anatomy, I admit there are certainly things I could have done better (I've been over these pages probably more than anyone, and sometimes even with completely neutral people to get their takes), but I don't feel I did things so horribly that they will get in the way of the story for most readers. Actually, I don't think most people who aren't intentionally trying to pick the thing apart would even pick up on some of the things I could have done better. That said, there's certainly nothing wrong with fixing things if there are issues, and there are in places. I mean, when you're literally drawing hundreds and hundreds of pictures, and who knows how many figures, things are going to happen here and there. However, I don't feel the anatomy I did in these pages is so glaringly bad that the artwork falls apart, things don't make sense, messages aren't being conveyed clearly, and this artist has no idea whatsoever of what he's doing. I mean, I've seen A LOT worse.

Additionally, more focus on light and shadow could help you to improve the visual transitions between your many different applications of color within a given panel.

Yes, that's something I take into consideration.

Your work is different - and that is a plus. It's part of what makes your work unique and stand out more from other artists' work on display, here.

Thank you. Not to sound contentious, but I get the feeling you believe I'm striving to go for something mondo different with my art. I'm not. It just is what it is. This is what would come out of me when I'm just doing 'regular' art for me. And yeah, it does look ... distinctive compared to most comic art I see. I'm happy you appreciate that. That said, I'm also not trying to look generic or like anyone else. I'm indie comics and I embrace that. If someone wants to see Marvel and DC or something like them, those publishers are there for them. I'm not them, I have little interest in them, and no interest in being like them or working for them.

Oh, and one other thing - work on your speech balloons. They are plain Jane simplistic visual blobs that detract from your work.

I'm fine with the balloons. They're neat, they're clean, they're easy to read, and in a comic with so much going on with the artwork, maybe plain jane isn't such a bad thing. Though I do appreciate the opinion and understand where it's coming from, and one of these days I may experiment with something else.

sevans
07-20-2017, 05:29 PM
Hi Neil.

Charles raised a few very valid points. Your work is very colourful, sometimes distracting. He put a lot of effort into his crit.

NOW, you can disagree and defend yourself against whatever you like, BUT you need to listen to constructive crits too. Many of his crits were well explained and are valid points.

Good artists always take on crits and work though the valid ones to improve their artwork.

Neil Allen
07-20-2017, 09:07 PM
Hi Neil.

Charles raised a few very valid points. Your work is very colourful, sometimes distracting. He put a lot of effort into his crit.

NOW, you can disagree and defend yourself against whatever you like, BUT you need to listen to constructive crits too. Many of his crits were well explained and are valid points.

Good artists always take on crits and work though the valid ones to improve their artwork.

I listened to Charles.

sevans
07-21-2017, 01:01 AM
then I stand corrected good sir.
(tip of the hat)

Neil Allen
07-22-2017, 10:29 AM
I listen to feedback, but just because someone has an opinion or offers a suggestion doesn't mean I'm going to change course.

About the coloring, I could have done some things better, and the book's coloring gets better as it goes on, I think. Part of the reason it looks the way it does is because visually, one of my main inspirations is Sega arcade games from the '80s, with the prime one being Fantasy Zone II:

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Heck, even Sonic the Hedgehog from the '90s is a big influence on me:

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NorthWindComics
07-25-2017, 06:36 PM
Dude! You keep getting better as the pages go by. I love your commitment too. And I think your colors are really working! They're working for me. It's like a visual feast of hues.

Charles
07-27-2017, 01:15 PM
I personally do not feel that my coloring is leaps and bounds above the other aspects of my art. Though, I will say it is the aspect of my whole process that tends to be the most time consuming for me, sometimes even by a good margin.

I isolate this quote out quite intentionally, because it is especially deserving of highlighting.

More so that coloring, per se, your handiwork on display here denotes a rather advanced appreciation understanding the mysteries of color. In layman's terms, you're like Harry Potter just starting out. Your words aside, your use of color betrays a demonstrated appreciation magnitudes of order ahead of your demonstrated appreciation for anatomical precision or discipline of the lettering variety.

Your own words evidence a lack of appreciation for the gift which has been bestowed upon you. There's more than a bit of magic in your coloring methodology. It shines through, whether you see it or not.

That is not to say that I like all instances of your coloring equally, for I don't. But, even with imperfections in various areas included, what you have on display here is greater than the sum of its individual parts.

To borrow a word used by another, here, but in a different context, your deficiencies in anatomical precision are nothing short of jarring. Yes, you can draw well enough to move the story along, but not nearly well enough to avoid saddling you work with the visual baggage of a litany of distractions.

NorthWindComics stated it very well when he described it as a visual feast of hues. Your work has hues to it. You don't cripple your work with a slave mentality towards base colors, and neither do you worship at the altar of coloring in swath. Your skills with coloring are as diverse as the hues on your pages present here.

In a nutshell, your use of color is interesting. It grabs the eye. In instances, it captivates. The artistic universe is full of examples of coloring that can't make a valid claim to those statements.

Neil Allen
07-28-2017, 09:17 AM
I redid the cover for Chapter 1. There's a chance I could use the image as a cover for my graphic novel (that's the plan, unless I think of a better idea along the way), so I wanted to do a better version:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-00-c-flattened.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-29-2017, 07:05 AM
Dude! You keep getting better as the pages go by. I love your commitment too. And I think your colors are really working! They're working for me. It's like a visual feast of hues.

Thanks a lot for the encouraging words. I am happy you are enjoying this comic. And yeah, I'm always looking to improve, and the best way to do that is to keep doing pages. I've learned A LOT working on this project and have gotten quite a bit better along the way. At least I think so.

And yes, I am very committed to this story. At this point, I know very well what it takes to make a fully colored comic series all by yourself and I'm willing to go through that because I think that I just NEED to tell this story, and if I don't, I could see it depressing me to some degree.

Sometimes after hours upon hours of drawing, coloring, and so on, I do think to myself, "What the heck am I doing?" But then I consider that if I don't do this, I'm going to look back two, three, four, ten, twenty, or however many years later, and be upset at myself. So, in a sense, I feel I have to do this and make the most of it, and I suppose that's a good thing. It definitely keeps me going on, and I'm having a lot of fun doing it, and it's been very enriching considering how much I have learned along the way : )

The comic is just one part, I plan to grow the brand with an indie video game as well, which I'll begin development on pretty soon, but it likely won't be done for a while, and I'll see where else I can take things. But one step at a time!

Neil Allen
08-10-2017, 10:33 PM
A small look at some of the art in the upcoming chapter of Zatswan, the cosmic fantasy multiverse adventure. This is just one panel, it's just at a really large size in this image. There are other pages ready, but I'll release in accordance with my schedule:

https://pbs.twimg.com/media/DG6jVPpUIAE10qw.jpg:large

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
08-23-2017, 04:43 AM
It's time for more Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian! Chapter 2, page 1:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/08/02-01.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
08-30-2017, 06:35 AM
Next page:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/02-02.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
09-06-2017, 05:31 PM
The story continues...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/08/02-03.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
09-13-2017, 05:59 AM
The story continues ...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/02-04.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
09-26-2017, 02:26 AM
Continued...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/02-05.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
09-30-2017, 03:25 PM
I went through all my earlier work (the chapter 1 stuff you will find on page 1 of this thread) and revised all the pages, which was a big job. I've been working on it off and on for the past... maybe two weeks.

I de-saturated the colors, so they're not blaring, and changed some of the coloring on the physical original pages. I changed the gutters on the pages. Many of them are still colored, but I learned that to do colored gutters well (in my opinion, at least), it's best to do either very light colors or very dark. The comic is still colorful, I think it always will be, but the colors are a lot softer and less offensive.

I fixed anatomy issues. At least the ones I found. Of course, I redid the cover for chapter 1, which I did a while ago. I uploaded all the files again and overwrote the old ones, so the new ones are the ones that will be there in this thread ... unless the old ones are still appearing in your browser's cache, in which case you'd need to delete your history.

Just to give a visual idea of what went on, here's a back to back comparison of the old version versus the new version of an especially colorful page:

Old:
http://greenlantern.co/news/page-03-old.jpg


New:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-03.jpg


As I was going through the thread again, I don't think I came across as grateful for the feedback some left as I should have. It was good feedback, and I do listen to it, and it's helpful and informative. I might not act on ALL of it, but it's good to hear other perspectives. Speaking of which...

As for the lettering, I did not do anything to that, because, I ... honestly don't really have a problem with it. I approached three other people and asked them if they had an issue with it, and they didn't. I understand where some are coming from, though. I mean, maybe I could get it to look better, but I'm okay with it as it is. As for hand lettering the whole comic... I would have to experiment and see how much more time that would take, and what it would look like. Maybe I will see one of these days.

Neil Allen
10-17-2017, 03:44 AM
More Zatswan, more power!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/10/02-06.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
11-03-2017, 04:01 AM
A new era of sentimentality is emerging. Never miss Zatswan. Next page:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/02-07.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
11-17-2017, 05:09 AM
The Dimension Warriors return in another page of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian.

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/02-08.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
11-29-2017, 09:03 AM
Pocket Universe peril continues in Zatswan, the cosmic fantasy multiverse adventure!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/02-09.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
12-10-2017, 01:07 AM
More cosmic fantasy multiverse adventure ahead. As ever, Zatswan continues!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/12/02-10.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
12-21-2017, 06:30 AM
The battle rages on:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/12/02-11.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
01-07-2018, 08:23 AM
Multiversal warfare continues in this update of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian.

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/02-12.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
01-25-2018, 07:59 PM
Starlit fantasy never relents! Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian continues:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/02-13.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
02-12-2018, 09:22 AM
Expulzar appears in this page of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/02-14.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
02-13-2018, 11:07 PM
I made some revisions to the last page I posted. The main one was some corrections to Expulzar's head in the upper right panel. He's got a strange head, and frankly, I'm not yet used to drawing it from all angles.

I also changed the dialogue slightly, and the position of some word balloons to improve readability.

New:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/02-14-a.jpg

Old:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/02-14-old.jpg

Neil Allen
02-22-2018, 04:13 PM
Zatswan, the stardust guardian returns!

In between doing new pages, I'm also redrawing my older pages in chapter one to make the whole project look nicer. That part of the book is especially critical since it's the first chapter. It actually doesn't take that long to do, since I already have the main template of the page set up.

Here is a new version of page 10:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-10-a.jpg

Here is what it used to look like:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-10-b.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

griffin
03-05-2018, 10:14 AM
Very cool that you reworked you page. New version looks better. I'm liking what you cooking up so far. Where are you finding most of your readers?

Are you getting feedback from anyone?
That new character reminds me of an X-Men sentinel.
You create some powerful figures.
Well done.

Neil Allen
03-07-2018, 11:48 AM
Zatswan continues:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/02-15.jpg

Wesbite:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
03-07-2018, 12:17 PM
Very cool that you reworked you page. New version looks better. I'm liking what you cooking up so far. Where are you finding most of your readers?

Are you getting feedback from anyone?
That new character reminds me of an X-Men sentinel.
You create some powerful figures.
Well done.

Thank you. About the questions...

Where do I get most of my readers?
I run another website that is about something very similar to this, which gets traffic. I direct visitors of that site to my Zatswan website. I also post on comic book forums and have developed some rapport on some of them. Posts on forums or social networks that have userbases that you believe will be interested in your content can go a loooong way. I have actually gotten rather successful websites off the ground just doing that. That said, I think it is most worthwhile to post on ones that are large in membership and have strong activity.

I also make Youtube videos about comic books and comic book related things, and I'm rather shameless about plugging my Zatswan project, as I should be.

Twitter is another source of traffic. Every time someone follows me, I have an automated system set up that shoots them a direct message inviting them to take a look at my comic. I send out update tweets whenever a new page is ready and use (I think) good hashtags to find new readers.

I also follow other people on Twitter who make web comics and interact with them. They aren't hard to find using the #ComicBookHour and #WebComicChat hashtags, among others. Those are communities that have weekly Twitter chats and I take part in those, usually. They're fun... sometimes. It depends on the topics they talk about. Oftentimes they're about interesting things that yield very good information. I've found the discussions most interesting when subjects like promotion, how best to monetize your comic, and preparing your comic for print are discussed. Other times the topics are just lame, or just about common sense stuff. The Twitter groups get pretty strong activity. Especially ComicBookHour.

I will invest money into advertising when I have more content. I will likely start with ads using Project Wonderful.

Are you getting feedback from anyone?
Not often. Why? I dunno'. Probably best to ask the people who don't give me feedback. They're all around us. I do not find this discouraging, though, because I'm passionate about my project and my passion doesn't really hinge on feedback from some other people. And in the long run, I'm pretty confident about my project. I think it will succeed in appealing to the people I'm aiming it at.

Besides, at this point, I'm not expecting anyone to be a super fan of my project. There simply isn't enough content for it yet. I'm aware that it takes time and content for people to invest in the characters and the story. Maybe if I was doing simple gag comics, I would have enough content by now, but for this type of comic, I don't think there is. I believe the best I can do at this point is intrigue people. If I can do that much, I will count it as a victory. As the story unfolds, I believe more people will become invested if I play my cards right. This is why I don't bother investing money into ads right now. When I spend money advertising, I want readers to have more content to dive into. Finding readers isn't really my prime directive at this point. I'm mainly focused on building content.

griffin
03-08-2018, 09:56 AM
Well, I'm not going to interrupt your showcase thread with a bunch of questions.
But I've always felt, places like this and others are where the creators are. And creatives don't really have a lot to say. Either you're working on your content/material or you are really relaxing.

And readers seem to be scattered.
I know for me, I'm mostly concerned with my own stuff, but I do click through this thread to see what you are up to. Your series is steadily maturing.

Neil Allen
03-08-2018, 10:44 AM
Well, I'm not going to interrupt your showcase thread with a bunch of questions.

Oh, I don't mind. Ultimately, I think we're here to help and engage with other creators.

But I've always felt, places like this and others are where the creators are. And creatives don't really have a lot to say. Either you're working on your content/material or you are really relaxing.

I think it depends on the community. This particular one, in my opinion, is not especially outgoing. Perhaps I'm wrong, but that's been my experience from what I've seen. Activity breeds activity. I think if more people offered (beneficial and non-assholey) feedback, then others would be encouraged to offer feedback. For example, I admit that lately I don't have much to say to people here. However, if more people offered me thoughts on my own work, I'm almost sure that I would offer thoughts on other people's work more often and participate in the community more. I mean, for one thing, I'd have more of a reason to be around here more often. When no one is saying anything on an artist forum, then potential members would probably think, "what's the point of even posting there."

I think we should remember that if people aren't offering us any feedback, that's not our fault, so it's nothing that we should be discouraged by. It's likely to do with where we are posting our work, and that's something for the forum administrators to deal with in making their community more active and welcoming. Not our problem.

And readers seem to be scattered.

I think the best thing to do is think about what your comic is about, think about what other franchises it might be like, think about who might enjoy something like your comic, think about who you're trying to reach with your comic, and then go to wherever those people are at, and engage in communities where they are. I think that's the best free way to go about finding readers.

For example, the other site that I have is about the John Stewart Green Lantern character from DC Comics, and it gets traffic. So, when we consider that character, he is a black dude with some cosmic powers. Well, that's exactly what I have in my Zatswan comic, so the traffic I direct from my Green Lantern site to my Zatswan site is extremely targeted. I already have an audience that I think will enjoy Zatswan, so I just point them to my comic. Some of that audience reads my comic, and it's my hope that once they become invested enough in it as the series unfolds, they will enjoy it enough and care enough about it to tell other people they think may be interested, and then things go from there.

I know for me, I'm mostly concerned with my own stuff, but I do click through this thread to see what you are up to. Your series is steadily maturing.

Thanks a lot for that. I appreciate it!

davidj28
03-08-2018, 03:42 PM
Just read through this and my first impressions are the colors are amazing, the backgrounds remind me of Kirby and it reminds me of Power rangers, Transformers and several other series from when I was a kid so great for nostalgia.

Neil Allen
03-14-2018, 03:38 PM
I finished another redone page from chapter one. These two pages work in direct sequence. The page that has been most recently redone is the second. I will continue redoing chapter one pages while working on new pages. I've found it doesn't slow me down.

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-10-a.jpg

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/01-11-a.jpg

I don't often say much about the artwork I do, so I'll give it a shot. The second page (the new one) gave me the opportunity to use my C'aran Dache Musuem Aquarelle watercolor pencils, which I recently bought. From what I saw in video reviews, they are the best watercolor pencil on the market. I recently bought some and I can say that I agree with that. I'm familiar with the top brands (with watercolor pencil work, I have been using Derwent Watercolor pencils and Faber-Castell Albrecht D'urer most often), and the Museum Aquarelle is the best.

The first page shown here was done largely with Derwent Watercolor Pencils for the characters and Crayola Supertip water soluble markers for some of the backgrounds, and while nice, those tools aren't as good for me. Nothing really compares to the Museum Aquarelle. So, it was fun playing with these tools and seeing how they perform for myself.

I have some Holbein Artist Colored Pencils coming from Japan, which are also relatively very expensive, and said to be really good. I am excited to see how they perform. I've been curious about trying them for some time.

Many of the stars in the second picture were done with Sakura Moonlight Gellyroll pens, which are trusty tools of mine I use often. I prefer the sparkly Stardust Gellyrolls myself, but their sparkly effect doesn't pick up well in a scan. The Moonlight Gellyrolls excel at working against dark backgrounds.

The lines were done mainly with a dip pen and Higgins Black Magic ink. I used to use technical drawing pens more often, but I've found that recently I don't like them as much for numerous reasons. One example is if you need to color over pigment to strengthen your lines in case your pigment faded some of them, the technical drawing pens don't work well AT ALL for that, and you can even damage the nib of your pen.

The second page is battle against Final Boss. DON'T GIVE UP!!!
pPcKS2Y2gzE

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
03-14-2018, 04:57 PM
Just read through this and my first impressions are the colors are amazing, the backgrounds remind me of Kirby and it reminds me of Power rangers, Transformers and several other series from when I was a kid so great for nostalgia.

Thank you. That's actually one of the best compliments I've gotten about this project, because that's exactly what I've been going for! It really says something to me when someone is nostalgic for something that didn't even exist during the era they are nostalgic for.

I want the project to have the fun feel of kids action programs from the '80s and '90s, but with more depth, and intelligent storytelling than most, because I also want adults to enjoy the project, especially those who grew up with 80s and 90s cartoons.

Power Rangers is definitely a huge inspiration here, and I hear the Jack Kirby comparison often, so I guess his influence comes through pretty clearly in my work. I'm honored to be compared to him. I also hear Sailor Moon, and that is an inspiration, too. Some of the backgrounds in the original Sailor Moon anime are AMAAAAAAAAAZING watercolor pieces, and I often look to them for inspiration:

https://i.kinja-img.com/gawker-media/image/upload/s--TJH454Ng--/c_scale,fl_progressive,q_80,w_800/rfem2pnzov6jjqkfctcd.jpg

https://i.kinja-img.com/gawker-media/image/upload/s--QOYiCQ9E--/c_scale,fl_progressive,q_80,w_800/s8i2owfk6qcfulgbvjiq.jpg

http://backgroundcheckall.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/12/sailor-moon-background-art-3.jpg

I mean, I could just post these all day long, they're so pretty.

I'm really glad you like my coloring. I put a lot of care and thought into it, and it's a very fun and important part of the process for me. I think the coloring lends strongly toward giving this series a distinct identity.

Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I'm very happy you're enjoying the project!

Neil Allen
03-30-2018, 11:19 PM
The latest page of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian.

To make an end to battle...
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/02-16.jpg

I got to use my new Holbein Artist Colored Pencils on this page, and I really love them!

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
04-15-2018, 11:51 AM
A new page of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian, and a critical moment of this ongoing saga.

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/04/02-17.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
05-02-2018, 08:44 AM
Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian continues...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/05/02-18.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
05-05-2018, 11:59 PM
Now back to Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/05/02-19.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
05-13-2018, 09:30 PM
Zatswan, The Stardust Defender finds himself in a precarious, but is surprised by what he sees:

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/05/02-20.jpg

End Chapter 2.

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
05-19-2018, 02:11 AM
I've revisited some pages from chapter 1 and redid them.

First, the cover image. I actually did not redraw this. I didn't feel the need to. Rather, I just changed a couple things and added some details in the line work and coloring. The changes aren't major, but they make a difference. This piece was primarily colored with Winsor and Newton Pro Markers and Prismacolor markers and lined with Micron technical pens and Pigma Professional Brush Pens. The "Zatswan" logo was done by me in Adobe Illustrator... though, I did sketch it out on a piece of paper first.

Here is the new one:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/05/01-00-c-flattened.jpg

For comparison, here is what it used to look like:
http://www.greenlantern.co/news/01-00.jpg

Moving on, the first page of Chapter 1 was entirely redone. The new one was lined with a dip pen and Higgins Black Magic ink, and Steadtler Triplus Fineliners for colored lines. It was colored primarily with C'Aran Dache Museum Aquarelle watercolor pencils. So, those are some of the tools I use often these days.

http://zatswan.com/preview/01-01.jpg

For comparison, the first page used to look like this:

http://www.greenlantern.co/news/01-01.jpg

I redid page 17 of chapter 1 as well. Chapter 1 of Multiversal Guardian was extremely experimental in that I didn't know what medium I wanted to use, what paper I wanted to work on, how I wanted to display things like energy, and even how to portray some of the characters. I figured all that stuff out just by doing it instead of deliberating on all of that beforehand, and it's still like that, really. I'm still trying new things, like papers and supplies, but I have a better idea on how I want my characters to look. For example, I decided that I drew the main character, A.C. Cooper, too small in chapter 1, so in chapter 2 he was bulked up quite a bit, which is how I draw him now. I felt that was a more... exciting, aesthetic look for something like this. You can really see the comparison in these pages.

New version:
http://zatswan.com/preview/01-17.jpg

Old version:
http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/01-17-b.jpg

Also, here are larger versions of the "Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian" logo that I never posted here:

http://greenlantern.co/misc/zatswan-logo-01.jpg

http://greenlantern.co/misc/zatswan-logo.jpg

I will continue to go back and redo pages from Chapter 1 when I feel like it, but that certainly doesn't mean Chapter 3 pages won't be posted soon.

Neil Allen
05-29-2018, 06:08 AM
Chapter 3 of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian begins!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/05/03-00.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
06-04-2018, 05:33 AM
Oh my god! The latest page of Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/06/03-01.jpg

Website:
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
06-19-2018, 05:01 AM
Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian continues...

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/06/03-02.jpg

Find out more about this comic at...
http://zatswan.com

griffin
06-21-2018, 04:19 PM
Damn that was a good slap. She's still recovering two panels later. lol

Is it me or is there a second love interest on the horizon?

Neil Allen
06-23-2018, 06:35 PM
Haha. I don't want to spoil the story, but the girl in the purple dress is a really important character. It's nice to finally be able to fully introduce her. The story should really start to open up this chapter, and what is actually going on should become more apparent.

Thanks for reading!

griffin
06-23-2018, 06:40 PM
You ever thought about putting these out on comiXology?
As far as I see, you have 1 book out? The one for $3.99 that's 21 pages?

Is THIS that book or is this (What we're reading here) all from book 2?
How many books is your series?

Like, where do I get the FULL story?

Neil Allen
06-24-2018, 02:16 AM
You're talking about the .pdf file on my site? If so, that is only chapter 1. I haven't bothered compiling chapter 2 into a .pdf yet, because there are a couple things I want to change. Nothing too major. Just a few panels and a bit of lettering.

What you're seeing in this topic is the whole story that has been posted online. That is chapter 1, which is 21 pages, chapter 2, which is another 21 pages, and chapter 3, of which I have posted 3 pages. I have posted quite a bit in this topic, but at this point, I don't mind where people read it, on my site or otherwise. As I see it, posting it here just gets more eyes on the project, and hopefully more interest in it. Right now, I'm still primarily focused on building content for the project, following that, just building interest is the next priority. I'm not too focusing too much on sales right now, because I figure who is going to buy something they've never heard of and know nothing about. Eventually, I plan on Zatswan paying out, though :)

If you want to read the whole story, the best place to go is zatswan.com and start here:
http://zatswan.com/comic/chapter-01/zatswan-multiversal-guardian-chapter-1-cover/

If you would like to buy the whole story, that's not prepared just yet. Zatswan is a webcomic, so it's mainly meant to be read from the internet, but I will compile Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian in an entire volume for print and digital .pdf when there is more content.

I've considered Comixology, but haven't for the reason I've posted above. If I was to submit my content there, I would have two 21 page chapters to put up.

That is what you do, right? How is Comixology working for you? Do you get regular sales from there?

griffin
06-24-2018, 03:41 AM
A couple thoughts...it took FOREVER to set up. They said there was a problem with getting my business account and tax withholding together. That wasn't the only site that told me- it was a delay so I believe them.

I obviously won't discuss raw numbers, but the first month was awesome and the second month was a total fall off :cry:. I actually contacted them to see if there was an issue with the accounting. lol

comiXology told me that was normal - that all number 1s sell great and then there is a fall off in sales and then it steadily climbs. I was worried for a few months, but now I'm seeing a very nice spike and climb in sales.

I'm also doing more to promote the series across many sites, hosting comic sites and facebook groups. I'm also running ads on facebook and sharing and all that social media stuff.

And so sales are relatively good for an indie out the gate- with no support. Since digital sales numbers are impossible to get, I have no idea if selling X-Number-of-books is an incredible feat or would make a title a failure.

No idea. ANYbody buying one of my books makes me happy so we'll see where the sales arrows go. For now, I'm content at the rise and it's even inspired me to launch a second title.

I say do it when you're ready. It's a very nice reading experience. I have a huge monitor so I like the double pane experience- also, that's how I read comics as a kid. Who opened up one panel at a time? lol

comiXology is owned by the monster Amazon so it's a pretty easy way in. Also it's where all the digital readers are. You can sell your pdfs on DriveThrucomics (I'm on there) but sales are dismal. I know I need to figure out their promotional engine and how to do sales. When the new series arrives, I'm going back to free versions on all the webcomic hosting sites. They were really good for traffic. There's 4 or 5 of them that are worth putting your series on....
Line Webtoon
Tapas
Comic Fury
Smack Jeeves

Neil Allen
06-25-2018, 11:26 AM
Thanks for the information!

I'll certainly give Comixology a try when I'm ready. As I see it, this comic is under construction. Even though I post a lot of finished pages, I may go back and change things with the art or production, as seen in this thread. I just let people watch as I'm building this thing. There will be a point when I won't change things anymore for a set of chapters or a whole book, and once I'm at that point, I will concentrate more on my promotion. I don't want to concentrate too heavily on promoting and selling stuff that may become obsolete due to changes.

Also, as it is now, there is only so much time in a day and creating the comic is such an endeavor that it takes up a lot of my concentration. I don't want to spread myself way thin by tackling tons of promotional stuff at this point, because that's a whole job in and of itself, but this is very useful information.

I'm familiar with the sites you listed. I don't know of any Facebook groups in particular, though. If you don't mind me asking, what groups do you use to promote your comic? And it's good to hear your numbers have been going up. I've also been seeing a rise in interest for my project as the story unfolds, which is exciting!

griffin
06-25-2018, 01:41 PM
Yeah, when I read yours I'm like.....did I miss some pages? Is this the middle of another story...was the bus part, part of this same arc?

I'd like to just sit down one day and read the whole thing in one easy package.
Plus- when it's a page here and there, it feels like it's taking forever to get to the answers I want.

Groups with names like
Independent comic Creators
Comic Creators
Promote your comics etc....

Once you join one group FaceBook suggests all the others or the members link to them.
https://www.facebook.com/groups/140385652820869/about/
https://www.facebook.com/groups/PromoteYourComicsAndCartoons/
https://www.facebook.com/groups/1586726261559854/
https://www.facebook.com/groups/comicbookcreators/

If you want traffic then all those free hosting sites work. If you want to connect to other creators then the facebook group is where it's at.

I'm still looking for a forum for serious comic creators with activity and output.
Most of the forums is kids posting idle topics because they are bored.

And many others, you get views (could be bots) but no engagement.

Neil Allen
06-25-2018, 04:00 PM
I see. If you're reading the comic just from this topic then I can understand how you may have some difficulty. Things aren't laid out perfectly here, because I sometimes post stuff that I drew over again. Although, whenever that happens, I make sure to mention it in the post.

If you go to this link you should have a very straightforward reading experience:
http://zatswan.com/comic/chapter-01/zatswan-multiversal-guardian-chapter-1-cover/

Zatswan: Multiversal Guardian is pretty much your standard webcomic, meaning that it updates page by page. There are advantages and disadvantages to that format. Most webcomics I've seen are made by one person, like mine. It's just not realistic for us to pump out content like the people at DC, Marvel, or wherever, which have teams of people handling projects. With this comic, I'm doing the work of perhaps eight or nine people elsewhere. Let's see... they would typically have...

Writer
Penciler
Inker
Flatter
Colorist
Letterer
Assistant Editor
Editor
Then maybe some "hidden" jobs in the production phase.

And all of that is being handled by only one person here. Unfortunately, one of the downsides is that it is going to take some time for the story to develop. But I'm really happy that there are people out there that actually care about what will happen next! I take my time doing the project. I could go faster, I suppose, but I feel that the quality of the comic is what matters most.

Thanks for the list of links. I will definitely check all of those out.
And yeah, there aren't a lot of great comics communities in general on the net. I've actually thought about starting my own forum because of the lack of places to go.

griffin
06-30-2018, 10:18 AM
You know what, one of my silent opinions turned out to be true.
There's a few issues I always scratch my head over, in WEBCOMICS.

((and I mean works designed and formatted as a webcomic, not just a comic shared and doled out on the web...)))

a) Some that are concerned with page-a-day frequency release filler pages and pages with nothing happening because they need to meet their upload quota.

b) Full pages that are not full pages. If you blow up an image, you usually do that for 2 reasons. One, there is an epic AMOUNT OF STUFF going on and you need to pull close to see all the details. Two, you have an IMPORTANT scene that needs emphasizing, like a vista-like establishing shot or a moment the reader needs to remember. When they take an ordinary panel and make it full-page size, it doesn't feel like a splash page, it feels like a large panel.

c) A stretched story plays havoc with my memory. If you're the writer, you're probably going back and reading a bunch of old pages before dropping the new page or made them all in a row and uploaded them in gaps. As a reader, I tend to forget what's happening when 10 pages in the past is six weeks. I just don't remember all those small details.

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The ONLY problem I had with your book was the last one, where I had trouble following the page-every-so-often release schedule. I know, for now, it can't be helped, but I wish I was getting a single chapter at a time.


Reading you whole book in one swoop was awesome. I had forgotten so much and didn't realize you had so much set up before the action kicked off. I was thinking about the princess (Blondie) and waiting to see where that was going to go, but starting from the top, I'm rooting for Marlene more.

I like the writing, in that, the main characters are saying the same things I would be saying and thinking and it's a fantastic story, but doesn't need too much suspension-of-belief to get into.

The art is steadily improving, which makes you decision to wait all the more insightful. You have some panels that are just incredible and your attention to detail is really key.

The plot makes sense and it seems like you've covered all you bases and you have a true sense of how things work in your universe. Good job.

Neil Allen
06-30-2018, 11:51 AM
First, thanks a lot for reading the story and offering such thorough and specific feedback. That is a HUGE help! It's really beneficial to know what people who are actually interested in the story think of it.

One of the things about posting stuff around is that, of course, not everyone is going to be all that interested in what you're doing, simply because it doesn't speak or connect with them. And that's fine, because our projects can't be all things to all people. While those people who aren't all that interested can still have very useful things to say, and it's also good to have their perspective, it's not quite the same as getting feedback from someone more invested. In other words, feedback from fans or people interested in becoming fans. So again, I really appreciate that.

About the webcomic format. To tell you the truth, I am really not a huge webcomic reader. And I wasn't a webcomic reader at all before undertaking this project, though I have since found some that I really like. I understand not liking having to settle for such small updates and then having to wait again for another small update. Honestly, the format suits comic strips a lot better than comic books, and I believe strips (the types of things like Garfield and Peanuts) are what was originally done in this format.

I'm using the format now because I feel it's the most feasible way of telling my story at the moment, so I take the good with the bad. From a creator standpoint, one of the advantages is that you keep your content updating regularly, and when you get a following people will tweet or share whenever a new page comes out. In some settings, many small regular updates can be more beneficial than few massive updates, because it opens up potential for more sharing of your content and people build a routine of visiting your site and sharing your stuff, and the people they share it with keep seeing it pop up in their feed.

I mean, one example is that this topic has way more views than other topics where people are like, "Hey, come check out this book I did," and then they're gone. It's the numerous small updates that gets people coming back to see what is happening here.

About Marlene and the Princess Allecka Xona. I have heard that same thing from some others where they prefer Marlene. Marlene has the advantage of being introduced first, so I think it's normal for readers to like her more. That's just the way the story naturally flowed In many ways the story tells itself. I've been really wanting to get to the parts with the Princess, but I had to stay true to the story. I an really excited to finally be at the part when she comes to the forefront. We will see a lot more of the princess and learn more about her in the pages to come.

It's good to hear that the art is getting better. I always work at improving things in that department and I'm glad it is noticeable. I actually don't do splash pages hardly at all. Perhaps it has something to do with me doubling as a writer, but I oftentimes think they are a waste if valuable real estate. Though I don't want that to sound like an absolute. They can be done very effectively. And much of the reason those are used in comics is due to technical print and/or advertisement things that don't affect me in the digital format I am using. I oftentimes use big anchor panels for emphasis instead of splashes.

And again, I'm really happy you're enjoying the story and I'm glad to hear it makes sense and is easy to follow and that the characters sound natural and are believable.s More new content coming soon!

griffin
06-30-2018, 04:17 PM
Oh man, I could write for days about your book. First, the bright colors threw me- with all the digital tools available, it seems like a weird decision to make it almost crayon like and so vibrant-

BUT! That's what makes it different. You do the colorful art in EVERY panel, which is different than just the energy or action scenes having heavy color and all the regular scenes are kinda boring and less intense.

Your world building is modern day, but then you have the multi-verse which can be anything. You've already shown us a huge array of alien characters, which makes it seem like a true VAST, vast universe. So many other races are already working together. As a sorta-post-teen main character, you've taken it a step further and shown us college-bills as an issue. Financial aid is his concern- so we have real problems that the characters are dealing with.

It's the classic trope of character gets awesome powers and is unhappy with life. Here, you skipped past that and threw him into a battle- and he was SCARED, but did his job and knew he needed to make a difference. He already shows characters and a moral curve. The moment when he looked down and saw the dead solider and was like "That could be me".

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I think you're right about the updates and getting more hits. On sites like this, I just don't know how many are reads and how much traffic is crawling bots. There are a few sites that I'll glance at books without replying because I can't be bothered to join up or log in- just to leave a comment.

Keep going. So far, so good.

Neil Allen
07-02-2018, 11:39 PM
The latest page of Zatswan!!!

http://zatswan.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/03-03.jpg

More Zatswan content at:
http://zatswan.com/

Neil Allen
07-04-2018, 03:03 AM
Oh man, I could write for days about your book. First, the bright colors threw me- with all the digital tools available, it seems like a weird decision to make it almost crayon like and so vibrant-

BUT! That's what makes it different. You do the colorful art in EVERY panel, which is different than just the energy or action scenes having heavy color and all the regular scenes are kinda boring and less intense.

Your world building is modern day, but then you have the multi-verse which can be anything. You've already shown us a huge array of alien characters, which makes it seem like a true VAST, vast universe. So many other races are already working together. As a sorta-post-teen main character, you've taken it a step further and shown us college-bills as an issue. Financial aid is his concern- so we have real problems that the characters are dealing with.

It's the classic trope of character gets awesome powers and is unhappy with life. Here, you skipped past that and threw him into a battle- and he was SCARED, but did his job and knew he needed to make a difference. He already shows characters and a moral curve. The moment when he looked down and saw the dead solider and was like "That could be me".

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I think you're right about the updates and getting more hits. On sites like this, I just don't know how many are reads and how much traffic is crawling bots. There are a few sites that I'll glance at books without replying because I can't be bothered to join up or log in- just to leave a comment.

Keep going. So far, so good.

Thanks again.

About the art... I suppose my approach to it is not standard for comic books, but at the same time, like many comics, it's a mix of digital and traditional methods. I often do gutters in Photoshop and most of the lettering is done in Illustrator, although I often hand letter certain things, too. Everything else is done by hand, and I ink and color directly on the paper that I draw on, so I never use light boxes or any kind of transferring method. The paper I use varies. These days I mostly use vellum and watercolor paper, though I plan on using some mixed media paper, too.

I draw with regular sketch pencils and ink mostly with a dip pen and brushes. My coloring tools vary. I use mostly colored pencils and watercolor pencils these days, but I also use oil pastels, soft pastels, markers, acrylic paint occasionally, and probably other things I'm just not thinking of right now.

Why did I decide on this approach? I can't remember it really being a conscious decision. It was more like that is just the way I make art, and then I transferred that over to comics. When I'm working on my project, I don't particularly set out to make "super hero comic art" or emulate a particular comic art style, or try to make it look like something from Marvel or DC Comics, though I'm sure those influences are there to a degree.

I often try to put a lot of detail in the backgrounds, because I view the set pieces kind of like characters. I feel I need to strongly establish them like I need to establish the characters. Plus, it contributes a lot to the world building without having to use text to do it.

Neil Allen
07-18-2018, 05:33 AM
Zatswan returns!

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More Zatswan at the website!:
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Neil Allen
08-03-2018, 04:49 AM
More and more Zatswan!

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WEBSITE!
http://zatswan.com

Neil Allen
08-22-2018, 06:33 AM
Zatswan is back!
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WEBSITE!
http://zatswan.com