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mikeorion22
05-14-2017, 08:49 PM
Hi these are some samples im working on any feedback is appreciated. thanks for looking

https://image.ibb.co/jABWvk/comic_samples_1.jpg (https://imgbb.com/)


https://preview.ibb.co/fqAfo5/comic_sample_2_3.jpg (https://ibb.co/dHZ6T5)


https://mikelegan.artstation.com/

donnyhadiwidjaja
05-14-2017, 10:57 PM
mmm..they are too computerize... better if You mastering Your free hand ... learns the fundamental of drawing...

sevans
05-15-2017, 04:19 AM
Very static, and very box like. Cardboard backgrounds aren't adding anything to the pages.
Have seen alot stronger from you before.

Don't mean to sound harsh, but you can do better.
Google street map images....

MattTriano
05-15-2017, 07:24 PM
Very static, and very box like. Cardboard backgrounds aren't adding anything to the pages.
Have seen alot stronger from you before.

Don't mean to sound harsh, but you can do better.
Google street map images....

RE ABOVE: Google Street map gives one a very specific angle and focus that not every panel needs to have in order to communicate its idea.

Overall this is interesting. I like the way you draw but what you're drawing needs refinement, figures in particular. I like your backgrounds, I disagree about 'cardboard' and I think your shot choices are strong.

That said? A little more specificity in design on foreground objects might be nice. I take photos, use google images and other stock photo/video sites like getty as well as Youtube (screenshot it) and of course Sketchup (which it looks like you're already using but maybe not?). These are all valid reference, use in combination.

Your environments are focus-pulled in a specific, conscious way and executed in same, again I like them.

Your people are problematic because they do feel flat, sorta skewed, and the shadows fall over their bodies in awkward ways. Get more ref. Simple. Use your phone, webcam, camera etc and for each page it might be helpful to take quick photos of yourself for mass and gesture purposes.

I like the rendering style and the bold lineweights but the storytelling, in particular on the DPS, including placement of panels and delivery of information needs work. Edit actions, combine them. Look at Klaus Janson's writing on the subject.

Post more. Keep going!

mikeorion22
05-18-2017, 10:04 PM
donnyhadiwidjaja- thanks for your feedback i think i know what you are saying

sevans- thanks, i'll try to work on those issues.

MattTriano- thanks for your detailed critique and advice. I really like Klaus Janson I will have to do research. I cant remember if ive seen your stuff before, Im a new fan.