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iksnerogib
03-26-2017, 07:27 PM
Hello.
I'm adapting the song 'for whom the bell tolls' into sequential art. This is the first page.

Please tell me what you think. Critiques are highly appreciated. Cheers.

https://image.ibb.co/eD8xiv/Scan.png

ld-airgrafix
03-26-2017, 10:10 PM
The way im reading this, the lone gunman is about to charge the three soldiers, before getting shot. I would change either panel 3 or 4 and show the guy getting up, exposing himself a bit more. I feel you are showing action too quick, one moment he is behind the rock, the next he is standing and getting shot.
Depending on the story, you could have gone for more impact, rather than a single shot to the head, you could have showed the guy getting riddled with bullets, i would also leave the other soldiers out of this shot, leaves you more room for detail on the lone gunman.
Either way looking real good.