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02-19-2017, 07:46 PM
Here is some of my work. ^^





Thank you for looking!

02-20-2017, 01:49 PM
Your art is lovely, and the storytelling overall is clear.

The colors on the first page are muddy and detract from the air, and the word balloons are too large and obtrusive; in some cases they crowd out your characters.

I'm a little confused by the third panel of the final page, which is oddly shaped and doesn't seem to serve a purpose, other than to provide space for the dialogue; the same goes with the white space beneath it. That page is where everything breaks down a bit, primarily, I think, because of the oversized word balloons.

But, again, the art is very nice.

02-23-2017, 08:31 PM
Thank you SO MUCH for the critique. I had no idea of those. I'll keep it in mind as I continue to work.