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rodrigo
01-25-2017, 05:56 AM
Hello Everyone,

Here are a few Batman samples I have done, Crits welcome.

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p253/rodrigo_064/RodRodolfo_pg01_zpsks0jgez6.jpg (http://s130.photobucket.com/user/rodrigo_064/media/RodRodolfo_pg01_zpsks0jgez6.jpg.html)

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p253/rodrigo_064/RodRodolfo_pg02_zpsgoeul0jj.jpg (http://s130.photobucket.com/user/rodrigo_064/media/RodRodolfo_pg02_zpsgoeul0jj.jpg.html)

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p253/rodrigo_064/RodRodolfo_pg03_zpsv8hpxsvf.jpg (http://s130.photobucket.com/user/rodrigo_064/media/RodRodolfo_pg03_zpsv8hpxsvf.jpg.html)

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p253/rodrigo_064/RodRodolfo_pg04_zps2kret7r5.jpg (http://s130.photobucket.com/user/rodrigo_064/media/RodRodolfo_pg04_zps2kret7r5.jpg.html)

artsnake
02-07-2017, 12:12 AM
this is looking pretty good.
Changing and dynamic composition and the inking is definitely working over all.
I think I would rework the last panel on page 3. The rest or the page looks great with the feel of being right in the action but that panel falls flat. I don;t know what to do but it would be nice to see this page really pop.
hope to see more

therafalee
02-07-2017, 09:38 AM
I agree in everything that Artsnake said, the last panel on page 3 does not fit the rest.
Also add some expression problems with Bruce in Page one, He is not coming out as Bruce Wayne to me.

But it's a very impressive Artwork.

Renae De Liz
03-06-2017, 08:56 PM
Very cool!! :D I cant tell you enjoyed drawing these pages.

If it's useful, I think these pages are busy and detailed to the point my eye becomes lost in them, and loses track of motion, and storytelling. I think they could benefit from including focal elements to each panel, with a larger focal element for each page.

As part of that, perhaps revisit your use of shadows, and grow confident in using larger black areas, and learn where to place them. As the pages are, every place and every element is detailed and draws the eye, when perhaps they don't need to be drawn to those places (i.e the inside of Batman's cape). This will help the reader focus on elements that further storytelling.

Also, I would mention to perhaps revisit some shot choices. In example, page 3, last panel. That could have been a very dynamic shot, but pulling back so far and coming in from the side makes it feel like the reader is outside the scene, versus inside experiencing it.

Great job! :) Keep going!