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Cloves Rodrigues
01-07-2017, 04:45 PM
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ArminOzdic
01-07-2017, 06:15 PM
Nice stuff. Inking is very well done.
But you're characters are very stiff. And arms looks awkward in few panels... holding fork, phone etc.
I would suggest drawing more from life and refs to get more natural looking poses.

Symson
01-08-2017, 01:15 PM
Overall, very nce line work. You seem to have a good command of perspective. Suggest taking some figure drawing classes or having people pose for you get more natural looking figures. Storytelling is pretty clear, just a few things to tidy up.


PAGE 1
Panel 1
Nice establishing shot. You have some problems with tangents. The worst one is near Osbourne’s left arm, the flag and the wall. The others are the chairs and windows.

Panel 2
Another tangent with the heads.

Panel 3
The graphic shock effect in the background seems to be overdone for the scene.

Panel 4
Here it looks like he is done cutting the meat slice.

Panel 5.
Here it looks like he is just starting to cut the meat slice

PAGE 2
Panel 1
You should save breaking panel borders for action scenes, where there is a reason to break the border. Right now this seems arbitrary. The office dividers are just lines, as they have no width to them.

The two guys are looking directly at the walls of their cubicles based on the perspective and directions of their looks.

Panel 2
Is Peter giving Robbie Polaroids? This is the 21st century, he would be giving him a flash drive.
Or they would be looking at the photos on a computer or tablet.

Peter is holding his cell phone in his left hand.

Panel 3
Peter is holding a cell phone in his right hand.

Panel 4
And now the phone is in peters's left-hand again.


Panel 5
Nice extreme close up here.

Panel 6
Good reaction shot.

Panel 7
Nice pull back and reveal.

Panel 8
Hard to tell if Peter is bewildered or surprised here.


Panel 9
It's not clear what's going on in this panel. Did somebody take his phone?



PAGE 3
Panel 1
Are we missing some pages here? Otherwise, looks like they just magically appeared in front of him. I didn't immediately recognize the villains. It was only on second look I saw Sandman, then Electro, I think Scorpion and the one holding Aunt May must be Doc Ock.


Panel 2 and 3
Visually, we still seem to be in the same moment. Nothing more is happening than what we see in the first panel.

Cloves Rodrigues
01-08-2017, 05:11 PM
Hey guys,
thanks for your tips and points
(i do some studies because of this)

Symson
this is pages 1,2 and 6. Sorry for i explain this so late.

ArminOzdic
Your comment helped me a lot.
really i love receive suggestions like this
I made up a study of hands, I'll work more with it later.

thanks

the studies based on books
https://scontent.ffor8-2.fna.fbcdn.net/v/t1.0-9/15871713_10202980294025910_4414106171613327586_n.j pg?oh=2d7395cf05e7969c52312f80e9d762d0&oe=58DCE2E1

youngatart
01-08-2017, 05:25 PM
Cloves, might be even more effective to draw your own hand for studies.
Just a suggestion.

Cloves Rodrigues
01-09-2017, 05:50 PM
youngatart good ideia

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