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david_landi
11-16-2016, 08:00 AM
Hi everyone, I tried to post these pages a while ago, but nothing worked.

These pages, along with several others were reviewed by writer Matteo Casali, artis Giuseppe Camuncoli and Marvel talent manager Rickey Purdin.

I wanted to show them and get some feedback.
I'm also available for comic work, also inked..just let me know if you're interested.

http://i.imgur.com/kcfMRJt.jpg

http://i.imgur.com/1YTPE2x.jpg

http://i.imgur.com/rbqpWfN.jpg

http://i.imgur.com/QnbocZH.jpg

http://i.imgur.com/o3zJDF8.jpg

http://i.imgur.com/DVa1Mj8.jpg

MattTriano
11-16-2016, 10:12 AM
These are ok. I think you're better than these.

Immediately stop:
Breaking panel borders
Cutting off figures at elbows/wrists/feet/knees

Get the same amount of information on the page without making either of the mistakes above and your storytelling will improve. Composition is everything, your figures are nice and you can draw. It's just logistics now.

Draw another set of samples. Make up a fun story that includes location and clothing/costume changes, conflict and emotional impact, animals and effects. You already know that's important, I can see. More and better, now.

Work for two days at the start on just roughs. Take a whole day after that to take ref photos, go online and get images and 3D models. Go for broke but pencil no more than a page per day. Post when you can.

Thanks for sharing these. Keep going!

Best,
M

david_landi
11-16-2016, 12:16 PM
Hey Matt, thanks! Very helpful feedback, I appreciate it.

Almayer
11-16-2016, 06:54 PM
Great job! I can't add nothing more to what Matt have told you. I think you only need to do more pages, you know the foundation very well, so it's a matter of time to be working with a big publisher. Good luck!

david_landi
11-17-2016, 06:14 AM
Thank you Almayer!