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baixam
10-28-2016, 02:31 AM
Hi. I open this thread to upload my sequential art, looking for feedback. Feel free to give your opinion.

MattTriano
10-28-2016, 02:48 AM
I like your line but your storytelling and compositions are a little under developed. More reference, pull back a bit on some of these shots -- show us who, where, what in a single image. Don't repeat the same information in multiple panels, keep samples moving fast. Either sink further into interpretive marks or harden your forms to create a weighty world; sometimes panels feel whole but not all the time.

Try to insert pictures into your thread so it's easier for everyone here to see them and comment; I know it's a weird interface but these pages are already online so it should work.

Keep going.

Post new pages when you can!

Best,
M

baixam
10-28-2016, 02:19 PM
sorry, trying to insert some pics. I think I got it.

http://img11.deviantart.net/e061/i/2016/298/f/d/week5_doors_by_baixam-dam6prd.jpg

baixam
10-28-2016, 02:19 PM
http://img00.deviantart.net/7b82/i/2016/285/4/2/week3_day_everything_changed_small_by_baixam-daks5cl.jpg

baixam
10-28-2016, 02:20 PM
http://orig01.deviantart.net/0455/f/2016/262/b/8/scumbagcop008_by_baixam-dai8abp.jpg

baixam
10-28-2016, 02:22 PM
Hi. Thanks for the feedback.

paul brian deberry
10-28-2016, 08:57 PM
These good. Only feedback i have is draw more.

baixam
10-29-2016, 08:05 AM
Thanks for the feedback. Draw more and invest more time in each page. A problem I have is that I get bored of the page and I give a rushed finishing. Patience is the mother of art

baixam
10-31-2016, 09:56 AM
http://img10.deviantart.net/eab2/i/2016/305/c/f/week6_small_by_baixam-damxzin.jpg

TimR
10-31-2016, 04:40 PM
I like the overall style of it.. reminds me of Eddie Campbell somewhat. Only criticism is some of the figures seem a little stiff and awkward in places.

baixam
11-01-2016, 09:06 AM
Thanks for your comment