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jey2dworld
09-22-2016, 02:32 AM
Pencils by me
Colors by Bryan Magnaye
Script by John Pross

http://img04.deviantart.net/4b9f/i/2015/110/7/7/wolverine_vs__darth_maul_colored_by_jey2dworld-d6ofjbf.jpg

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Thanks for viewing!

The Spirit
09-23-2016, 10:19 AM
This is Crazy good!!!:kewl:

jey2dworld
09-26-2016, 07:05 AM
Thank you!

Cloves Rodrigues
09-26-2016, 02:27 PM
this is awessome art and ideias !

Scribbly
09-26-2016, 11:48 PM
Gosh! At some point I wasn't sure who was going to win.

:thumbs::thumbs::kewl::kewl: :carrot:

DarkHalf05
09-30-2016, 02:25 PM
Are you just sharing these, or would you like some feedback on the pencils?

Toondoctor
10-08-2016, 11:29 AM
The drawings are great but the storytelling just doesn't work. It feels like a series of posters instead of one sequence where you advance the story, helping the reader along the way. It's more like "look at how cool this fight is rather than a careful choreography with a story and purpose in mind - even if this is definitely meant as a showcase of your skills.

For example, on page three, you have Darth Maul standing there grinning at Wolverine apparently, in the lower right panel. It doesn't work. He is not facing Wolverine, because the latter is looking in front/stage in a front view. How can he then oppose and face Darth Maul. You make the same kind of composition above where instead of each of them being in a three-quarter, looking at the other, even if off-screen, they are shown in a front view.

In the following pages, your characters keep switching sides on the screen, preventing a reliable series of action reaction shots in the fight. You keep flipping them from frame to frame, instead of keeping them in one end of the page.

In terms of expressions, they all have the open angst mouth from 1990s Image Comics. Personality-wise, this is a difficult characterization for Darth Maul who is supposed to be a cool silent type fighter, not a berzerker like Wolverine. You should also give Wolverine more expressions.

Finally, you did not start your first panel with a proper establishing shot. All we saw are the two characters jumping in the air. In fact, you seldom draw feet, so for most of the shot, they seem unanchored to reality, especially given that they seem to be in space floating.

Your storytelling and staging are what you need to focus most on. You know how to draw people and your proportions are fine. But comic book art is not pin up art.

Apologies if I sound so rude. I am trying to help you and I think that you can get there.

jorgezeraba
10-10-2016, 02:24 AM
The drawings are great but the storytelling just doesn't work. It feels like a series of posters instead of one sequence where you advance the story, helping the reader along the way. It's more like "look at how cool this fight is rather than a careful choreography with a story and purpose in mind - even if this is definitely meant as a showcase of your skills.

For example, on page three, you have Darth Maul standing there grinning at Wolverine apparently, in the lower right panel. It doesn't work. He is not facing Wolverine, because the latter is looking in front/stage in a front view. How can he then oppose and face Darth Maul. You make the same kind of composition above where instead of each of them being in a three-quarter, looking at the other, even if off-screen, they are shown in a front view.

In the following pages, your characters keep switching sides on the screen, preventing a reliable series of action reaction shots in the fight. You keep flipping them from frame to frame, instead of keeping them in one end of the page.

In terms of expressions, they all have the open angst mouth from 1990s Image Comics. Personality-wise, this is a difficult characterization for Darth Maul who is supposed to be a cool silent type fighter, not a berzerker like Wolverine. You should also give Wolverine more expressions.

Finally, you did not start your first panel with a proper establishing shot. All we saw are the two characters jumping in the air. In fact, you seldom draw feet, so for most of the shot, they seem unanchored to reality, especially given that they seem to be in space floating.

Your storytelling and staging are what you need to focus most on. You know how to draw people and your proportions are fine. But comic book art is not pin up art.

Apologies if I sound so rude. I am trying to help you and I think that you can get there.

For the most part I agree.
I think your intentions should be saluted, I do think you have a good start.
However, storytelling is very basic. There isnt much of a story here. Its just drawings of figures. And the panel layouts appear random, and just to show you are trying to "impress" your audience.

I am not sure what the original script described, but I feel it could have been handled and a more interesting, simpler, and direct manner.