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05-23-2016, 05:50 PM
Critiques are much appreciated

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Luke Noonan
05-30-2016, 07:03 PM
Generally good, although the hands could do with some practice in most panels, and in Panel 5 of Page 2 the thumb is too short and the hand looks too wide, IMO.
Also in panel 1 of page 2, he is still standing up after having shot himself, then it cuts immediately to him lying face down in panel 2 without seeing him fall. I can't remember if that's how it appeared in the original, been so long since I read it, but looks odd here.
In panel 1 of page 3, his jeans look to tight and too ragged, they look like leggings almost and vagrant-like rather than grungy. Also, panels 3 and 4 are the best here, but in 3 the shotgun looks too thin and the end of the barrel touching his chin is partly hidden by the curve of his neck, it looks unnatural. You've also gone overboard with the shading in 3 and 4 of page 3, but the hands looks better there than in previous panels.
Just my two cents, otherwise pretty good. Poor Arseface. :(

05-30-2016, 08:15 PM
Thanks Luke!!!
I'll look into those things.

Yes, 1st panel from page 2 is the same shot as the 6th from page 1.