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The Abominable Dr
12-04-2015, 01:54 AM
Hey folks! I'm new to the forum, and I'm a fairly new letterer. I'm attaching several pages of my most recent comic, Kill All Superheroes (which I also wrote), and I'd love to get your thoughts on them.

http://40.media.tumblr.com/347297f7bfc0c1192552a0052be3bf8b/tumblr_nt3mluBmfR1uc5qlzo1_540.jpg Page 1
http://36.media.tumblr.com/94bf5c55cc859d94ea7e749ef0f6e844/tumblr_nt3mn3s2n91uc5qlzo1_540.jpg Page 2
http://41.media.tumblr.com/95e0126b3a76821e400ddc4e7e546ec6/tumblr_nt3modD2xz1uc5qlzo2_r1_1280.jpg Page 3
http://40.media.tumblr.com/6af1dc76e594d6cf204e27de20199406/tumblr_nt3mqwHp8m1uc5qlzo1_1280.jpg Page 4
http://41.media.tumblr.com/1911c937110dfbb59e18becf1242aa64/tumblr_nt3mttAAQR1uc5qlzo1_1280.jpg Page 5
http://40.media.tumblr.com/c606f648d0a372a169c41f60ccc8faf8/tumblr_nt3mvzu92s1uc5qlzo1_1280.jpg Page 6

I have colored versions of these pages too, but they're not online yet. Lettering placement remains the same.

Thanks!

paul brian deberry
12-06-2015, 11:24 AM
I like.

Remember the crosshair I is to be used when using the word "I"

There are several occasions you miss that rule.

Thomas Mauer
12-07-2015, 04:14 AM
One of my biggest pet peeves is not enough air in the balloons. Try to leave as much space between the copy and balloon border to fit the letter O in between. It'll give your dialogue room to breathe and draw less attention to the balloon shapes.

Keep balloon tails off characters as that breaks immersion. Try to keep balloons off central characters as well, like the fingers and hair on page 5.

Just as a reminder, don't break line-of-sight between dialogue partners with balloons so they have a conversation instead of talking at a wall of text. You didn't on these pages but it's good to keep in mind.

You might want to trim your dialogue while you're at it. Page 3 is quite text heavy in particular. The balloons breaking multiple panels suggest the dialogue is fighting against the artwork instead of complementing it.

Overall, good job though. Keep at it.

vartemis
12-07-2015, 08:25 PM
I agree with Thomas. Add a bit more air to the balloons.

Also, beware of creating tangents with the art.

j

Comics Commando
12-18-2015, 07:43 PM
Thomas covered it pretty well. Nice job starting out, just give his points some thought and revise, and you'll be in good shape.


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Kurt Hathaway
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Stewart Vernon
12-19-2015, 02:23 AM
A little late to this one... but you've already received some good tips. I'd say you're mostly there.