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10-30-2015, 01:28 PM
Cowbird

Silent Script Contest:

Additional Requirements:


Must Have A Ball
Must Have A 12-Panel Page


Log line : A young girl is abducted by her true mother: a brood parasitizing hive mind.

Characters
Robin A quiet first-grade student, she has a gap toothed smile, long braids, and a large forehead. She has a vaguely-crescent shaped port-wine stain (link) (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Port-wine_stain) on her face under her left eye. Her arms are covered in swirls of freckles. She is casually dressed in a longsleeved striped shirt, khakis, and flats.

Heath & Forest Robin's current brothers. Twin pre-schoolers, both of their heads shaved: they wear matching coverall shorts and polo shirts. Heath has a juice stain on his shirt from the car ride over. Forest has a scar on his knee that extends partway past the end of his shorts.

Rosa Robin's current mother. A large-framed, fat woman in her mid-thirties, she has no chin and a thick neck. She wears several gold bracelets, chunky earrings, and a turquoise necklace.

Robin's doppelgängers There are four, ages: 16; 32; 56 (also seen at 48); 96 (also seen at 88). They all have Robin's facial mark and freckles, and look like her at later stages of her life.


Page 1

Panel 1 Wide, slightly overhead view: The children's section of a Macy's-type (mid-range) department store: Robin sits in a pastel-upholstered chair, engagedly reading a book on a small tablet computer. Heath sits on a couch behind her to the left, playing a game on a system similar to a 3DS; he is sandwiched between a pile of clothes - still on their hangers - and his mother's purse - almost as tall as him, taller with the straps. Forest is indignantly allowing Rosa to pose him in a church outfit in front of a triptych mirror.


Title Cowbird


Panel 2 Low shot in front of Forest: Forest has swung both his arms in front of him and has also leaned his upper body forward to exaggerate the effort it takes to drag himself back to the dressing room. Behind him, Rosa is gently admonishing him to be careful with those shoes.


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Panel 3 Side view: Robin is setting her tablet into her mother's purse with one hand as she holds a dress from the pile beside Heath with the other.


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Panel 4 Slightly low side-view: Robin, having already changed into the dress, is skipping towards the triptych mirror. Forest sits atop the clothing beside Heath, back in his old outfit, and thoroughly enjoying a game on the tablet; he is moving his whole body to turn the tablet, as if shifting his weight will help him move faster in the game.


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Panel 5 Close view: Robin, standing before the mirrors, is rubbing her ear (motion lines) (She is starting to lose her hearing. This is visualized on the page with a bubble full of TV static that sits in a prominent position on the panel that does not obstruct the view of either of the characters. The bubble is small and irregularly shaped, like a cigarette burn. The bubble, though in the field of the mirrors, does not appear in any of the three reflections.) Rosa is adjusting the hem of the dress Robin is trying on.


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Page 2

Panel 1 Slightly overhead shot: The family is leaving the clothing store, and entering the rest of the mall. They are on the second floor. Forest is carrying a full bag, drawn up to his chin, while Heath is accepting a bag from Rosa. Rosa is fishing in her purse with her free hand. She still has bags hanging on both of her elbows. Robin is following behind all three of them: she's carrying bags in both of her hands and rubbing her ear with her shoulder. A bubble of static remains on the panel, though it has shrunk from its previous size. [From this point on, the individual bubbles of static may expand and contract, but they will consistently increase in number and together cover a progressively greater area of every panel (up to 30%.)]


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Panel 2 Low, front view: Forest has tripped forward. The bag he was carrying has swung forward with his momentum, hitting Heath in the back. Heath has braced himself against the leg of an elderly woman using a walker who was trying to pass them by.


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Panel 3 Front view: The elderly woman has reached out to brace herself against the railing that prevents her from tumbling to the first floor. Rosa is facing forward, away from the boys and the elderly woman, with a concerned and slightly surprised expression on her face as she holds her cell to her ear.


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Panel 4 Close view: Robin has closed her eyes and is shaking her head. She is lagging behind the rest of her family and obstructing the path of other shoppers.


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Panel 5 Low (Child-level) view: Rosa has turned to glare at the boys as Forest receives a retaliatory bag to the face from his (off panel) brother. Rosa is pressing her cell to her ear with her shoulder.


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Panel 6 Close, overhead view: Robin is wincing; she has taken both her ears with her hands to fold them closed and is looking towards the ceiling, as if she is searching for the source of an irritating noise.


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Panel 7 Rosa's POV: Heath is indignantly pointing at his brother, who is taking advantage of the distraction to lean back and prepare to hit Heath again. Robin is leaning forward and complaining about her ear. The elderly woman is staring back at the scene disapprovingly.


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Panel 8 Side view: Rosa has raised her hand to her eyebrows in a very forceful had-it-up-to-here gesture, as shown by the momentum in her bracelets and earrings.The children have cringed back in surprise. The family has attracted the attention of a handful of disapproving shoppers.


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Panel 9 Slightly narrowed, side view: Rosa, still sandwiching her phone between her shoulder and ear, is covering her eyes with one hand and has raised the other to gesture loosely towards a location and off screen. The children have relaxed somewhat. The shoppers are no longer paying attention.


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Page 3


Panel 1 Low, front view: The boys, chastened, are following Rosa with their tails between their legs. Rosa is still on the call. Robin, her nose crinkled, sniffling, is following behind, careful not to create too much of a gap. The family is entering a large, bustling food court. The static has engulfed the majority of the background and has begun swallowing up the family.


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Panel 2 Close, low view: The boys are eating junk food sedately at the table, while Rosa has one finger in her opposite ear, looking down at the table, trying to concentrate on this phone call. Robin has some fries in her hand, but she has tilted her head toward something away from the rest of her family. (The static has receded somewhat. More of the background is visible, but is much more dimly lit than in the first page.)


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Panel 3 Close view: The static has completely disappeared. There is a white nimbus around Robin's head. A black EEG line (link) (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Electroencephalography) stretches from her ear to an object off panel. The background is not as dim as it was in the previous panel.


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Panel 4 Side view: The line stretches to a 16-year-old version of Robin, eating at a table by herself, dressed in a very fashionable skirt and military jacket, with the same white nimbus around her head. Aside from the older version of her having gained weight, she just looks like an aged up version of Robin. The background is not as dim as it was in the previous panel.


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Panel 5 Close, slightly overhead view: Robin's elder doppelgänger has risen to leave. The background is not as dim as it was previously. It is nearly as bright as the first page.


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Panel 6 Close, view: Robin is leaving the table (going towards the camera) to follow her doppelgänger while her mother, still on the phone, is distracted cleaning a new stain on Heath's shirt.


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Page 4

Panel 1 Overhead view: Robin has left through the mall exit; there is just a strip of sidewalks separating her from a Crown Vic (link) (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ford_Crown_Victoria) that sits at the curb. Her still-linked 16-year-old doppelgänger is holding the rear passenger door open.


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Panel 2 Close, low view: A 32-year-old version of herself is in the rear seat behind the driver. (All doppelgängers are linked and have nimbuses.) (This triggers a flood of memories that will overwhelm her psyche and synchronise Robin with the rest of the hive mind.)


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Panel 3 Flashback: (all flashbacks are POV and slightly fuzzy at the edges: they blur together at the border) the 16-year-old version of herself is looking at herself in her bedroom mirror, dancing.


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Panel 4 Flashback: she is sailing on a small private boat: she is adjusting the rigging.


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Panel 5 Flashback: she is sitting on a city street in the 20s, playing with a ball and cup.


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Panel 6 Low, close view: In the car: A 56-year-old version of herself is in the driver's seat.


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Panel 7 Flashback: she is dragging a hoe in a field as a biplane flies overhead.


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Panel 8 Flashback: she is attending an 80s dinner party where everyone is exceedingly well dressed.


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Panel 9 Low, close view: In the car: A 96-year-old version of herself is in the front passenger seat looking over a map spread on the dashboard.


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Panel 10 Flashback: she is crossing the stage towards a college dean at a 1990s graduation.


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Panel 11 Flashback: in the 1930s, she is walking in the park with a lover dressed in the style of the time.


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Panel 12 Flashback: she is holding a balloon and holding hands with an 88 year old version of herself. A 48-year-old version of herself is beside the elderly woman, casting a nervous glance at something off panel.


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Page 5

Panel 1 Slightly overhead: In the mall food court: Rosa, now off the phone, holding a reluctant Forest's face still so as to clean it properly with a napkin, is looking over to Robin's empty seat.


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Panel 2 Close view: Rosa has twisted around in her seat to survey the rest of the busy food court. She is calling out for Robin, with a fairly frustrated expression on her face.


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Panel 3 Wide-view: She is dragging the nervous boys into the women's room as another woman exits.


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Panel 4 Overhead view: the stalls are all empty. A distraught Rosa calls out for Robin as she peers into an empty stall.


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Panel 5 Close view from behind the security guard: Now outside the woman's room, a shaken and desperate Rosa is speaking with a security guard, offering a picture of Robin on her phone.


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Panel 6 Close, side view: In the car: Robin, in the rear passenger-side seat, is plotting coordinates on the map now resting on her lap, still linked by EEG lines to the rest of her selves (these lines can extend off panel: the other selves need not be pictured.)


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