View Full Version : noir gangster sequentials - comments on inks appreciated

08-29-2014, 05:16 AM
Using a brush pen for most of this, plush a 03 pilot pen for some of the details... critiques appreciated...








08-29-2014, 10:48 AM
I like the artwork and the tones you've chosen to use. The lettering I'm on the fence about. Maybe a different font might work better with the noir feel you are establishing. I can't say much about the story as nothing much has happened yet. You touch on the characters and the type of London they live in. But it feels like the plot is going to push forward with the next page.

12-13-2014, 10:16 AM
Dude!!!! I really love your stuff. Hey, one question: Are you interested on a collaboration? Im looking for an artist with a style like yours.
If you are interest please write me, my address is lennon.skywalker94.19@gmail.com

I hope you consider it

Comics Commando
12-21-2014, 11:55 AM
The lettering is the weakest part. It's an ugly font and the stacking is all outta whack. On many balloons the top line is the longest line. You get crummy stacking that way. Many two-line balloons should be 3 or 4 lines to get a better-looking balloon. And all your balloon shapes are what we call football balloons...they should be more rounded. Play around with it in adobe illustrator. That's the app of choice to get the best results.

I'm diggin' the art, though. Very street gritty.

Kurt Hathaway
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01-02-2015, 02:49 PM
Word balloons are weak also, the heay black outline is distracting from the art. I'd hire Ed, dw's very own, to letter this and any other.