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rhino1987
08-28-2013, 03:52 AM
After feedback and after I corrected some of MY mistakes.
http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-aaeRtm38Z-w/Uh3ZJE6uW5I/AAAAAAAAAv4/QQmzJsHAKFw/s1600/Activtiy1-Version-2.jpg

digiwombat
08-28-2013, 05:34 AM
Panel 2 feels a bit hard to follow for me. I'll leave it to the pros to pinpoint, but you did miss a question mark on the whisper bubble. And I feel like the text isn't really small enough to imply whispering there. Maybe more bubble?

Otherwise, I think it looks quite good to me! I think the tails are a little thicker and longer than I'd have made them, but again, I'm not experienced enough to say if that's actually a problem or just my preference!

Good job, though! :D

rhino1987
08-28-2013, 07:57 AM
Thanks for the feedback working on version 2 now.

lordmagnusen
08-28-2013, 10:14 AM
I'm with Digiwombat on the tails.

rhino1987
08-30-2013, 10:10 AM
http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-VEjT2f_971I/UiCYY2kT_BI/AAAAAAAAAwg/ldbWx7eV3SM/s1600/Activtiy1-Version-3.jpg