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Haas
04-18-2013, 01:46 PM
Hiya peeps,
Here's some Spidey pages I recently lettered can I please get a critique.

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spidey-1.jpg (http://s18.photobucket.com/user/tazbat/media/spidey-1.jpg.html)

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spidey-2.jpg (http://s18.photobucket.com/user/tazbat/media/spidey-2.jpg.html)

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spidey-3.jpg (http://s18.photobucket.com/user/tazbat/media/spidey-3.jpg.html)

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spidey-4.jpg (http://s18.photobucket.com/user/tazbat/media/spidey-4.jpg.html)

http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b139/tazbat/spidey-5.jpg (http://s18.photobucket.com/user/tazbat/media/spidey-5.jpg.html)

JimCampbell
04-19-2013, 06:12 AM
This is a decent effort, TBH. What follows is more nit-picking over fine-tuning rather than anything catastrophically bad!

Generally speaking, I'd try to be more consistent with the amount of space between panel borders and captions, and between multiple captions. Some captions are flush up against the panel borders while others float in acres of space for no real reason. Also, as a matter of personal taste, I'd leave a little more 'air' around the text in your speech balloons.

Specifically: Pg1 has a lot of page that's not Spider-man, I'd try to have more captions in that space and less on the main figure.

Pg2: I'm not sure why the rescued guy's dialogue is in lower case, or why Spidey's is in italics. That triple dash in the rescued guy's balloon bothers me, too.

Also: the pronoun 'I' should be a crossbar 'I' — as in the very first caption "I do a lot of stupid things". Notice the difference between the two 'I's in this sample:

http://i211.photobucket.com/albums/bb36/jimcampbell2000/Lttrg.jpg

The font you're using (CCYaddaYadda) is an upper/lowercase font so SHIFT-I produces a regular 'I' -- the crossbar 'I' is produced with the upright slash (SHIFT-\).


If you're doing these as samples, rather than practise, I'll mention that a page of captions is pretty much as easy as a page of lettering gets — if you're looking to impress an editor, you'll need pages with lots of balloons and/or SFX.

Cheers

Jim

Piekos
04-19-2013, 01:32 PM
What Jim said, plus:

1) You have to stack your text so it takes up as much of that rectangle caption box as possible -- trying to avoid some of those huge negative spaces you have.

2) Some of those captions are too close to panel borders for me.