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AverageGuy
04-15-2008, 10:24 PM
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg1019.jpg
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg2020.jpg
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg3021.jpg
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg4023.jpg
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg5024.jpg

WON'T LET ME HOT LINK FOR SOME REASON...OH WELL

BenelGermosen
04-16-2008, 03:49 AM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/JLApg1019.jpg
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/JLApg2020.jpg
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/JLApg3021.jpg
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/JLApg4023.jpg
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AverageGuy
04-16-2008, 11:50 AM
Thanks for the hot link ben...lol...story of my life...computers are my enemy...lol

Phatman
04-16-2008, 12:02 PM
Beautiful rendering.

Dave_Ryan
04-16-2008, 03:30 PM
Nice stuff. Are you working for anyone?

AverageGuy
04-16-2008, 05:01 PM
Nope....I have a friend who works for DC. It was his idea to have me do some samples. He is pretty confident I can get work, I figured why not...give it a shot. Thxs for the compliment

young-sedat
04-16-2008, 05:44 PM
these pages are really good. Sometimes it gets a little bit hard to understand whats going on storytellingwise, but the rest is awesome. cant wait to see more!

TenGuKu
04-16-2008, 06:40 PM
I agree that they're a bit hard to follow in oplaces, but I really enjoy the drawings...the last panel is my favorite...awesome stuff! :banana:

AverageGuy
04-16-2008, 09:12 PM
there is a page missing, pages 4 and 5 are a 2 page spread, that maybe what is throwing you off. These pages are done off of an old DC script my buddy had. Hope this helps. Thxs for the compliments!

AverageGuy
04-16-2008, 09:13 PM
http://s275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/?action=view&current=JLApg5024.jpg

missing pg 5 of the 2 page spread. Am i doing something wrong with the hot linking. I cant get the images to show up???

Shiniku
04-16-2008, 10:44 PM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/AverageGuy74/JLApg5024.jpg?t=1208396463

Uhh, right click on the image and go to properties. Copy the URL that says 'image location' and paste it, and put tags around it. Like such:
[img]linkhere
Or, with photobucket right to the right of the image the bottom choice of URLs is IMG tag, you can copy and paste that.

But, anyway, awesome work! Quite professional looking. I think they could be tightened a bit.. but they're alreayd pretty tight. I just like to see lineart so clean you think it's inks.
Also, great expressions here, some intense stuff.

nnee
04-17-2008, 09:28 PM
this is really great.

AverageGuy
04-17-2008, 10:56 PM
thxs...appreciate it

Yojimbo
04-18-2008, 03:24 AM
Average, a few critiques from a writer's perspective:

From page 1 to page 2 we've suddenly flipped the injured guy (sorry, not familiar with JLA so much) and he's getting help. Probably need to see the chick's hands reaching down to him from off panel so there's the establishment of how he changes position. Just a thought.

I think panel 2 of page 2 you ought not to cut the guy's head off. Foreshorten a bit more so it doesn't look like he's bald and you may also find it looks a bit more dynamic. The fist looks out of place as well. I'd draw the whole thing smaller, but with a more extreme angle.

I love the layout on page 3. The bad guy looks like he suddenly lost his eyebrows on panel 4 though.

In panel 5 on page 3 Green Arrow's elbow touches the panel. It looks like you were trying to get it to break but misjudged the anatomy. I think you should change his angle to face more toward the reader and work the dynamic foreshortening again. Also, shrink the panel horizontally and have the arrows break through. That would add some dynamicism to it. The burst lines need to fill the whole panel. Maybe. Photoshop coloring is a wonderful thing these days, so I may be wrong on that count.

Page 4 rules. The only thing I would say is that at the end the last two panels look like they're fighting for space. Panel 5 looks like it would have dialogue setting something up for later, while Panel 6 needs more breathing room for action. That's a ball you have to put back in the writer's court. If you made me decide, I'd re-write panel 5 as some sort of silhouette so it can be smaller, convey the action, and leave room for dialogue while panel 6 gets the whole bottom of the page.

The only other note I would mention is that bad guy and Supes both break upward into the panel above them. I'm not sure if that's awkward or not, but it caught my eye.

Great style. I like how facial expressions carry the mood.

AverageGuy
04-20-2008, 11:16 PM
Had a really great review with John Barber from Marvel...wants to see more of my work, so I guess I will send him more.

MaHeRo
04-20-2008, 11:54 PM
Nice work. I'd rather see you on JLA than the current artist, Benes.

AverageGuy
04-21-2008, 12:29 AM
lol....thxs...appreciate that. I use to like Benes, but I think his work is getting kinda weak, like maybe his heart isn't into it anymore. I think he was more of a cover/pin up guy more than a interior guy anyway...imo.

OZ!
04-21-2008, 04:17 AM
Wow, looks awesome! Yeah, I agree about Benes, but I think it has less to do with him and alot more to do with the style that DC is pushing him to use. Sometimes I can't decide if he is trying to go Jim Lee or Turner when his own style was so great to begin with.

Anyway, stop being so good, you're ruining my self image! ;)