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03-12-2008, 11:18 AM
Endgame pg19
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03-14-2008, 08:59 AM
Good work as usual Kong even though I get a bit confused by the long panel you have it seems to through the page off a bit.

03-14-2008, 12:59 PM
Hey Kong, I've really been digging the direction your art has been taking style wise, but the storytelling is still a little confusing in places. Stacking on the left is a REALLY hard thing to pull off well. It makes the page difficult to read as it makes the reader work out where the long panel is meant to be. There are visual markers on your page. it is on the right of panel 1, it's height is also between the top of panel 1 and the top of panel 2. So those 2 visual indicators make me think it's meant to be the second panel read. But I can tell from the content it's meant to be panel 3. The problem is, the fact I have to stop and work it out, means you've ruined my flow of concentration on the story.

03-14-2008, 01:32 PM
Thanks guys. Yea the input I've gotten on this page is the panel on the left is not flowing well. I might (with photoshop) enlarge it and put it slightly behind panels 1 and 2. I tried to seperate it like that to really make the fact that the Venger's doing something unique blocking a bullet with his staff and wanted to exemplify that by putting it apart from the other panels but it seems to be hurting the readers flow....
Thanks for the input.

03-16-2008, 08:51 AM
page 25
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03-17-2008, 11:35 AM
that 1st pannel works for me. i really like the face look on the man with a gun..expresssssssssion...nice :)