Sci Fi Horror story pages

[Apotheases]

Here is the first page of a sci fi horror story I am working on. Comments and critiques welcome. (please don't mind the where I put the pages back together. My scanner is only 8x10)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v303/apotheases/Price1.jpg

[Multisync143]

Saggy boobs!

[dbrennan3333]

Saggy boobs!

Hey, he said it's a horror story.

Seriously, it looks good. I'm not a big fan of that style of faces, I guess because I prefer it to be either totally realistic or else totally expressionistic, but it looks good just the same.

[sevans]

I not too sure about the faces either, they look kinda small or too 'cartoony' compared to the rest of it (not that it's extremely realistic).

Just push the style abit further. Plus the ladies might be abit to big for my tastes - big shoulders and arms and tiny 'male' hips. The upper curves (boobs) need lower curves to fit better.

PLUS - the 'saggy' boobs don't worry me. They look relatively normal to me. Large girls aren't usually pert.

[TenGuKu]

I like the style, its clean, but I think whats bothering me about their faces is that they seem distorted as if you drew them on a flat(*as in: not inclined) table, and were deformed as a consequence of the angle that you were viewing them at...I think that if you take your scan and flup it horizontally in photoshop or whichever program you have you will notice the deformation...beyond that, it seems like an interesting start..oh I also agree with sevans about their hips being too narrow comapred to their shoulders...strong ladies :blink:
I want to see where this is going...Sci-Fi horror rules!

[Apotheases]

hi there. Thanks for the comments. I'll make those revisions to this page and updated it this week along with additional pages I'm working on.

[Apotheases]

here is an additional page of this story. Comments and critiques are welcomed
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v303/apotheases/price2.jpg